Containment Breach

Wm. A.Yandell

Book Cover

GENRE

SCI-FI.

    Core Theme

    UNITY; HUMANITY COMING TOGETHER TO SURVIVE ITS GREATEST THREAT.

    TIME PERIOD

    The Future,Future

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    INDEPENDENCE DAY, CONTACT, THE EXPANSE (TV)

    CHARACTER LIST

    DR. WALTOR SMITHTON. 30S. INTELLIGENT. CAUTIOUS. KIND. COMPASSIONATE. DETERMINED..

    JAN: 20S. ASSISTANT.

    DR. STEVE: 30S. PARTNER/ANTAGONIST.

    JACK. 30S. HELPER.

    MARCIE. 20S. HELPER.

    JONATHON. 30S. ANTAGONIST.

    Logline

    Walter Smithton creates a new insect life form restructuring DNA. His predecessor did this before and on a space station, they are getting out of control killing every human they can. The creatures have found their way to Earth. Smithton's team is sent to find a way to stop this killer creation.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 18-34

    Target Gender: Universal

    Setting

    city and workplace, space shuttle, space station in outer space

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: self-published

    Year Published: 2014

    Starting Description

    Walter Smithton is a scientist developing new life forms by restructuring DNA. Smithton has a great discovery; one he believes his predecessor, Demetrious Zayack made and caused his disappearance. Now Smithton and his team are seen as the last best chance to stop Zayack's out of control creation.

    Ending Description

    With his own death moments away and in a desperate move the Smithton releases his own creatures which help him, and the remainder of his team defeat the rogue leader and his men.

    Group Specific

    Information not completed

    Hard Copy Available

    No

    ISBN

    Information not completed

    Mature Audience Themes

    Extreme Violence

    Plot - Other Elements

    Philosophical Questions, Twist

    Plot - Premise

    Overcoming Monster/Villain

    Main Character Details

    Name: Walter Smithton

    Age: 38

    Gender: Male

    Role: Logical

    Key Traits: Perseverance, Skillful, Complex, Insecure, Modest, Strong Moral Code, Desperate, Faithful, Secretive,Modest,Empathetic,Educated,Insecure,Honorable,Skillful,Complex

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Bush

    Age: 50

    Gender: Male

    Role: Antagonist

    Key Traits: Educated, Greedy, Leader, Power-hungry, Villainous, Aggressive, Confident, Criminal, Narcissistic, Crazy, Insecure, Lone Wolf,Aggressive,Villainous,Narcisstic,Unapologetic,Manipulative,Power Hungry

    Additional Character Details

    Name: General Tallion

    Age: 60

    Gender: Male

    Role: logical

    Key Traits: Masculine, Patriotic, Confident, Decisive, Educated, Honorable, Leader

    Additional Character Details

    The author has not yet written this

    Development Pitch

    When asked to admit one of their biggest real fears It is being bitten by a bug or spider. A spider on a bedroom wall or ceiling can cause people to run from a room in terror. The manufactured creation of killer bees has added to this phobia. With genetic engineering and cloning continuing the possibility of a more deadly created bug is real. Now add the fiction of breathing human DNA into the insect creation making them smart and having the ability to think complex thoughts is scary. We add in the creatures are like armored clawed drilling machines. Landing on a human they immediately dig their way into the body where only the lucky humans die quickly. Unlike most creatures that are large overpowering beings these cricket sized insects swarm from a hive and attack in numbers and learn how to find their only pray, humans. On the back cover is the simple sentence, the story is fiction, the threat is real. I believe this can be either a movie or a TV series. The short scene format leans inself to adaptation and breaks. With over one hundred reviews, the main comment is that it crosses genres and has a good story line that holds the reader and viewer to wanting more.

    Genre

    ACTION, SUSPENSE, THRILLER

    Brief

    Dr. Walt Smithton has secretly engineered a new species of creatures while working at a research facility. When the US government selects Walt and his team for a secret mission in space, it soon becomes clear why: a hostile species is threatening Earth, and only Dr. Walt has the knowledge required to save humanity.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    FIRST PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: FAIR

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: GOOD

    Franchise Potential: GOOD

    Pace: FAIR

    Premise: FAIR

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    It is accurate.

    Draw of Story

    The story, although familiar in premise, is relatively fresh in execution, resulting in a fast-paced story that becomes intriguing right away as we are introduced to the creatures that provide the primary source of antagonism for the heroes. These creatures are imaginative and frightening, and generate the most excitement in this story.

    Possible Drawbacks

    In comparison to its decent plot and creative twists, the quality of the writing in CONTAINMENT BREACH is poor, overly relying on exposition and endless conversations to advance the story. The writing is often more of a summary style than vivid and immersive, and many of the conversations between characters lack substance and drag on for a long time. Overall, this is a decent story, but, if the writing were more focused, restrained and immersive, this could be a very good story.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS.

    Primary Hook of Story

    There is not quite a hook to this story as each individual element of the story has been seen before many times. However, the particular combination of familiar elements here feel fresh, as do the story’s antagonistic creatures which are genuinely sinister and intriguing. Overall, this is a story for all fans of sci-fi.

    Fanbase Potential

    Yes, this could have a large fanbase as it is high-stakes sci-fi punctuated with exciting action sequences and intended for a universal audience. Amazon’s highly popular THE EXPANSE is a comparable TV show.

    Awards Potential

    The awards community traditionally ignores sci-fi, but awards and festivals specific to genre fiction could be enthusiastic about an adaptation of CONTAINMENT BREACH.

    Envisioned Budget

    LARGE BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    INDEPENDENCE DAY, CONTACT, THE EXPANSE (TV)

    What’s New About the Story

    Original is the story’s portrayal of its fearsome creatures intent on annihilating the human race. They are frightening and intriguing and not quite like creatures seen before. Otherwise, every element of this story has been seen before, but the combination of these familiar elements feel somewhat fresh. This story could be made more unique by enhancing the depth of its main characters and providing them with more unique characterizations as well as more unique and deeper inner conflicts.

    Lead Characters

    As a group, the main characters are an interesting bunch of highly determined, often courageous and sometimes ruthless people. Walt stands out the most as the protagonist with the most pronounced inner conflict; he is highly intelligent, observant, and brave, yet also quite secretive and duplicitous—an interesting combination of traits for a protagonist.

    Uniqueness of Story

    This is not quite a rare gem; the premise and most other elements are too familiar, and the characters too thin, while the quality of the writing leaves a lot to be improved. If revisions can improve the writing quality while deepening the characters, especially Walt and his inner conflict, this would be on its way to becoming a rare gem.

    Possible Formats

    Film: Studio, Streaming TV Series: Network, Cable, Limited Run / Mini-Series, Streaming

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    It requires improvement in most areas.

    Tips for Improvement

    Vastly improved quality of the writing with a more refined plot and deeper characters, particularly the protagonist and his inner conflict.

    Brief

    Dr. Walt Smithton has secretly engineered a new species of creatures while working at a research facility. When the US government selects Walt and his team for a secret mission in space, it soon becomes clear why: a hostile species is threatening Earth, and only Dr. Walt has the knowledge required to save humanity.

    What We Liked

    CONTAINMENT BREACH is a wonderfully imaginative take on the alien-invasion premise, featuring everything audiences love about this genre and more: secret experiments creating new lifeforms, a high-stakes fight for the survival of humanity, political intrigue and backstabbing, and a courageous, ingenious protagonist willing to sacrifice it all to save the world. Although the premise is nothing new, the execution provides many surprising developments along the way, and the creatures feel fresh, as frightening and sinister as they are enthralling.

    Film: As CONTAINMENT BREACH follows the classic three-act structure ubiquitous to feature films, it could easily be adapted into one. The high-stakes plot combined with an inventive portrayal of its creatures and the entertaining, twist-filled plot mean a feature-film adaptation of this novel could become the next hit sci-fi/action film that a universal audience flocks to theaters to see, or tunes in eagerly on a day-one streamer exclusive release. A feature-film adaptation of this novel should take care to consolidate the epic plot full of many characters and plot strands into a tight, fast-paced sci-fi thriller which leaves no moment wasted. If an adaptation can achieve this, the resulting film could be highly successful.

    TV: TV is an ideal format for an adaptation of CONTAINMENT BREACH as the story includes a vast array of strands of plot and characters that could lead to myriad subplots and character arcs. Similar to Amazon’s highly popular THE EXPANSE, CONTAINMENT BREACH follows an epic story encompassing many characters from scientists to the top of the US government as the fight against the invading creatures escalates to new heights. For this reason it is conceivable that an adaptation of this novel could become either a long-form or limited series on network, cable or streaming services, and, like THE EXPANSE, a large and devoted following is entirely possible.

    Key points:
    1) Fun, inventive take on a familiar premise.
    2) Fast-paced plot filled with exciting twists.
    3) Intriguing protagonist.
    4) High-octane action balanced well with suspense and intrigue.
    5) High stakes as the fate of humanity hangs in the balances creates much forward
    momentum for the story.

    Synopsis

    A scientist, Dr. Walt Smithton, works at a high-end research facility where he develops scientific life forms. He has a relatively successful life, being the youngest level four in the facility and having resources to support his experiments. His secretary, Jan, effectively obtains information about the facility, which comes in handy as Dr. Walt is often engrossed in his work.
    His perfect bubble is disrupted when he and his team members, Steve, Jack, and Marcie, are called into a meeting. This meeting is rather tense as a mind reader, Jonathon Dart, is present and actively trying to gain information from Dr. Walt, who is cautious as he is hiding an important scientific discovery, a life form he calls Zayans. After the meeting, Dr. Walt does not find his secretary but assumes she is out gathering information about the meeting. This assumption is later discredited as it is soon discovered that Jan is missing. After further probing, Jan’s husband, James, also goes missing. Dr. Walt is informed that they have been contained due to an illness, but he remains skeptical. Dr. Walt and his team are chosen for a mission to space, but nobody wants to give them any information on why they were chosen or what they were going to do. Everyone is suspicious and worried about having been taken from their offices without an opportunity to call their families or grab a few essential items.
    When Jack tries to protest, he is quickly suffocated in his suit to ensure he does not cause a further scene. This leaves the team more tense yet subdued. Soon enough, they reach the space station and are given limited information about what they are to do. The team should come up with a means of creating an open restart for an orb to kill violent creatures.
    After reading the folders about the research and the violent creatures, Dr. Walt is sure about two things: the creatures are similar to his Zayans, and the information provided to him is not extensive. However, he is confused as to why
    the creatures became violent. The team is scheduled for a Q and A with a scientist in the spaceship, but the whole setting was a ruse. The scientist was fabricated, and he had little to no information about the creatures or the
    research. Dr. Walt gets frustrated and asks to see a credible person to ensure that his research will work. His request is granted, and soon enough, the team members finally get information about the nature of the orb, which would help them in designing an open restart.

    Tension fills the group as Dr. Walt, and Dr. Steve are at a crossroads. Dr. Walt was appointed team leader and is doing well, but Dr. Steve feels he is more suited to do the task. These constant conflicts slow down their progress, and Dr.
    Steve does not wish to share any insight with the group. Instead, he wants to use it to get credit for being the hero. Nonetheless, the experiment comes to a dead end, and Dr. Walt is convinced he needs more information. He creates a scene to get the attention of the people in charge, and he finally gets an audience with the general and Bush. While the general shows no emotion about his character, Bush is infuriated and hates being under the control of someone he deems inferior. He uses Dr. Walt’s scene to get him off the team by implying he is uncooperative. He forms a separate team using Steve, Jack, and Marcie.
    On the other hand, the general thinks that Dr. Walt is resourceful. He places him at the station, close to the creatures but generally in a region the creatures would not suspect. However, Dr. Walt has to be careful as the creatures can detect sound and quickly move towards it, killing any humans along the way. In this region, he discovers a way of killing the creatures using the Geo Thermal Equalizer (GTE).
    The discovery makes Bush more serious as he seems to be lagging behind. He takes his anger out on Steve and Jack, who have been working tirelessly to create an open restart. He pressures Jack and Steve to work harder. He picks a region where the open restart should be placed and orders the plan’s implementation. During the plan’s implementation, Steve becomes hysterical that the creatures would devour them if they were not let free. His fears come to pass as Bush never intended to let them go. He authorizes the auto-restart, which kills some creatures, soldiers, troopers, Steve and Jack. The implosion also
    damaged a huge section of the station as some rooms were destroyed and
    debris floats around space.
    Bush went against protocol to authorize the open restart. Instead of taking the blame for his actions, he tells his supervisor, High Commander, that Jack went rogue and did it all on his own. The general can see through the façade but
    decides against pressing on it. They both need to find a way to stop the creatures
    before they escape and attack humans.
    Dr. Walt has effectively used a GTE to prevent further advances of the creatures.
    Bush knows this and tries to get him back on his team. He sends Marcie to convince Dr. Walt that the other side has more resources, but Dr. Walt is adamant about maintaining his position. Marcie blows his cover as a trooper by stealing the GTE and trying to get the soldiers protecting Dr. Walt killed, but only one of them dies. Dr. Walt decides to use another open restart to kill the remaining colony of creatures. His plan succeeds in destroying a nest, but another nest is soon found. The station is now in pieces with limited fuel and space suits. Dr. Walt decides to release his Zayans and hope they find a way to survive. However, the Zayans seem to be his saving grace as they lead him to discover the Zayai.

    About The Author

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