4 Horsemen of the Great Metropolis

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SCI-FI SUSPENSE/THRILLER ADVENTURE

Future

Stephen E Thress

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Logline

My epiphany marks an end of the chaos and disastrous happenings on Earth. A vision granted to me for the extension of humanity.

Genre

Sci-fi,Suspense/Thriller,Adventure

Short Summary

Experiencing a dream state and traveling through time.


Earth is restored to it's original pristine state.

Setting

USA and Australia

Based on a True Story

Yes

Plot - Premise

Voyage and Return

Plot - Other Elements

Philosophical Questions,Happy Ending,Meaningful Message

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Eugene

Age: 45

Gender: Male

Role: Mentor

Key Traits: Confident,Complex,Engaging,Visionary,Leader

Additional Character Details

Name: Samantha ,wife of Eugene

Age: 38

Gender: Female

Role: Skeptic

Key Traits: Confident,Gracious,Educated,Religious,Sexy

Additional Character Details

Name: Kevin

Age: 28

Gender: Male

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Educated,Honorable,Leader,Underdog,Gracious,Patriotic

Additional Character Details

The author has not yet written this

Development Pitch

What would you do ,yourself is you were granted a vision that would show a roadmap on how to fix all the problems of this world. What would you do? Think on that for a few minutes and get back to me. I'm trying various means to get this message out to the world and any medium I can use I will. This vision is to important to keep to myself and it was given to me to share with the world whom it rightfully belongs.

About The Author

Born in Columbus,Ohio in 1951 and moved to Zanesville,Ohio at the young age of 1. Graduated from Zanesville High school in 1969 and immediately joined the USAF. Served over 5 year and eventually ended up in So. California . I have resided in the Riverside area for more than 40 years. This is where I met and married my wonderful wife Linda, my rock, and stabilizer. I worked for Kaiser Permanente for more than 23 years and retired at the age of 65. It was during my time at Kaiser that I had this dream or epiphany about waking up in space and discovering the giant Horseshoe shaped structure floating out in space. Upon further studies and actual close up experience with this object I decided to tell the world about this dream. So welcome aboard world and experience what I believe will be a world changing experience for all.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+,13-17

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Empower your life publishing

Year Published: 2018

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

Information not completed

Genre

DRAMA, RELIGION

Brief

Eugene's descendants reap the benefits of his invention that solves all of humanity's problems. The utopia he created in space at first had casualties but that drove him to make sure it was a success on the deceased's behalf. The current generation upholds the utopia waiting for the day they are reunited with God with the promise to return to the Garden of Eden and be one with the universe.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

The book profile does reflect the singular vision of how a utopia could be created, but the actual plot is about fictional characters. Explaining Eugene's vision and the current conflict will help make the summary more about the concrete plot rather than the philosophiesbehind the plot.

Draw of Story

That a utopia is created through inventions placed in space is a unique concept. Separating humans from being influenced by external forces such as nature or God is also different as a Creator is still part of the narrative.

Possible Drawbacks

The book starts out explaining the complex concepts and need for the Four Horsemen which is a lot of exposition before the introduction of characters. Introducing characters first will break up the exposition and increase emotional investment in the plan. This restructuring could also help reduce the amount of explanations as the solution and the problem wouldn't need to be explained separately.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that there is a utopia on Earth created by four space monitors. The four horsemen of the apocalypse has been replaced by technology innovation with a fresh concept compared to ethereal beings in normative Christian interpretations.

Fanbase Potential

Because of the religious overtones, the fanbase would likely be medium if slightly reduced further the ideas are also not canon to the story of Christianity's New Testament prophecies of the apocalypse in the Bible chapter "Revelations."

Awards Potential

While the space conflict is unique compared to space films, the religious overtones are likely to dissuade the normally secular Awards circuit.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

LEFT BEHIND, TOMORROWLAND, APOCALYPSE (FILM SERIES), INTERSTELLAR, GRAVITY, THE BLUE LAGOON

What’s New About the Story

The original premise about humanity’s own inventions helping to solve their problems and correct the balance of earth is like the joining of two biblical stories: Noah's Ark and the Apocalypse. Instead of focusing so much on the world's problem showing more the struggles of those who create the solution with help increase the emotional investment in the utopia. If the utopia has no conflicts it is difficult to find the tension and rising actions within the story and remain invested in an earned climax.

Lead Characters

Eugene and his family are hardworking visionaries who bravely work through tragedy and personal grief to complete their project to benefit the future. Their future family is dutiful and hardworking as well, sacrificing much of their own bliss on Earth's restored utopia in order to maintain the space stations.

Uniqueness of Story

It seems like a true utopia with no conflict; therefore in order to appreciate the happy ending, making Eugene central to solving the problems rather than having his actions structured as flashbacks would create consistent tension towards the long-awaited climax of rejoining Eden. Once the utopia is settled there isn't a lot of external or internal conflict to create tension.

Possible Formats

Film - Studio, Film - Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

Centering Eugene as the main storyline about his struggle to solve the world's problems and the sacrifices his future family has to make to maintain the utopia will rectify the needs tension to create external and internal conflict. Because the utopia itself has had all of its problems solved there is no conflict to follow with in it so breaking up its history of creation by inserting the more personal characters will help maintain interest in its past conflicts in the trajectory towards the climax of the utopia rejoining Eden.