DRAMA, FANTASY

Lucas and Skipper investigates unusual cases in the South. Lucas relies on his knowledgeable friend, Sasha the radio host, for her wealth of supernatural lore. When the legends start becoming real, the three have to work together to solve the problems before the consequences get worse. The three could not be more different, but they make it work for the sake of the community.

GOOD

THIRD PERSON

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: EXCELLENT

Pace: GOOD

Premise: EXCELLENT

Structure: FAIR

Theme: GOOD

The current logline functions more as a development pitch and should be switched to that section. It is a really good overview, but some of the background information presented would be helpful to include in the narrative as the relationships are already established which could be confusing to those new to the series. The logline itself should talk about what this volume in particular has to offer in originality in around one to two sentences rather than compare it to another piece of media.

The cases that the team comes across are wide-ranging, super creative and provide intriguing folklore and legends. The side effects of each case and how they solve them are also compelling.

Because of the structure of the multiple cases without a larger case to link them there seems to be no lasting consequences or chronological order to the events or the character's trauma. This makes the main character's internal conflicts hard to track and thus they can feel somewhat static at times even if they are slowly being developed throughout the story.

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

The hook is that two straight-laced conservative detectives are in in cahoots with a left-wing supernatural scholar/ radio host to solve wild supernatural cases in the South. The monsters intertwine folklore and history as well as healthy infusions of imagination to create fresh gothic characters and a creepy tone filled with suspense. Because a lot of the monsters were created rather than adapted they're unpredictable which is intriguing.

This could have a huge fanbase if the main character dynamics are solidified and their internal conflicts are more apparent to create emotional investment in the detectives despite the procedural and episodic nature of the supernatural cases.

This is unlikely to have awards potential for film due to the slow development of the characters, but as a TV medium this could have potential either as the whole series or for select episodes.

LARGE BUDGET

X-FILES, SUPERNATURAL, BUFFY THE VAMPIRE SLAYER (TV), LAW AND ORDER SVU, NCIS, TRUE BLOOD, POLTERGEIST, TERRIFIED

Each of the cases has different monsters, different problems and different needs in order to be solved. The actual investigators themselves however could have clearer internal conflict to make them more memorable.

Lucas is surefire and quick on his feet. Carol Ann "Skipper" is determined and skeptical. Sasha is brassy and brilliant.

The protagonists need lasting consequences in their lives from the investigation in order for the otherworldly phenomenon to feel ground and chronological. The actual monsters are rare gems, but the episodic structure could benefit from fine-tuning.

TV Series - Network, TV Series - Cable, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series, TV Series - Streaming

WORK IN PROGRESS

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Rounding out the main characters and furthering their relationship dynamics would help strengthen the emotional investment and link up the narrative between the monsters. Otherwise the episodes wouldn't require the specific protagonist investigators to solve.