Sons of a Citizen Soldier

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1960s & '70s

Mark Abernathy

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Absolute fury of action in a compelling adventure,underwater,by land and sea. Conflict at each turn as a family divided by Vietnam War sentiments comes together in a torrent of dramatic violent clashes with host of adversaries, all to the soundtrack of 1970.


Action,Adventure,Crime,Drama,Family,Political,Religious,Historical Fiction,Funny

Short Summary

Elliott quits college and hichikes to pot commune, ends in brutal sleeping bag assault. Younger brother nearly killed in accident, medically disqualified has confrontation with protesters that ends badly. Men who beat Elliott attack father on gold dredge and have fatal meeting with Jack.

While attempting to retrieve Elliott to work their claim the brothers start a war with the mafia. They retreat to Fla. and sail with old friend to the Bahamas to rescue his father from drug cartel. They return to Dauphin Island to the waiting arms of a pair of sassy sexy watermens daughters.


Trinity River, Junction City,Weaverville Ca., Dauphin Is. Al. ,EL Jobean Fla.,Bahamas.

Based on a True Story


Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain,Quest,Voyage and Return,Rags to Riches

Plot - Other Elements

Coming of Age,Happy Ending,Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions,Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Nudity,Substance Abuse, Language/Profanity,Extreme Violence

Main Character Details

Name: John Copeland

Age: 52

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Masculine,Sexy,Blunt,Badass,Aggressive,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Engaging,Faithful,Skillful,Outspoken,Selfless,Religious,Modest,Adventurous,Patriotic,Strong Moral Code,Unapologetic,Leader,Honorable,Heroic

Additional Character Details

Name: Elliott Copeland

Age: 22

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Visionary,Underdog,Skillful,Sexy,Masculine,Adventurous,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Heartthrob,Heroic,Honorable,Badass

Additional Character Details

Name: Jack Copeland

Age: 20

Gender: Male

Role: protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Confident,Decisive,Engaging,Heartthrob,Heroic,Honorable,Leader,Romantic,Masculine,Obedient,Sexy,Patriotic,Selfless,Skillful

Additional Character Details

Name: Randy "Rabbit"

Age: 34

Gender: Male

Role: sidekick

Key Traits: Adventurous,Masculine,Patriotic,Confident,Charming,Aggressive,Badass,Aspiring,Decisive,Engaging,Flexible,Heroic,Honorable,Leader,Romantic,Funny,Skillful,Outspoken,Blunt

Development Pitch

This book absolutely defines the concept of the real action adventure genre. The protagonists are as lovable as the villains are deplorable. Explosive confrontation is only a page away throughout the adventure with boats, dogs,guns, four-wheel drives, a helicopter and even a concert by Jimmy Buffett for a little comic relief as two young men become blockbuster hearthrobs in this epic screenplay. The cast is full of outstanding well developed characters that recurr in upcoming sequel. The Copelands will win your heart and have you clambering for more justified violence. The locations in the book are accessible for filming or easily duplicated. The book is dialog heavy and easily adaptable to film. I will be available to consult as an expert on all matters of the book and production. This will be a huge blockbuster success. Dont regret not taking a good look.

About The Author

Army Aviator, Sailboat Captain,Sculptor,Carpenter,Builder, wrestler, football player,hunter and fisherman. Currently splitting the years between hunting and growing in Rural Missouri and fishing in SW Florida in the winter. Enjoying writing when time allows.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

sailors,military, outdoorsmen, Floridians,fishermen, action junkies

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: with a Publisher

Publisher: Deeds publishing

Year Published: 2019

Hard Copy Available







A dad fights for survival on his home turf after surviving the Vietnam War. He and his two sons take on a variety of foes in all terrains. The men are able to defeat every foe in a realistic bond that transcends generations.

Overall Rating


Point of View


Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The book profile does reflect the narrative, with the development pitch doing an especially good job of providing thematic insight into the story. It might help to eliminate the line about the cast as it is unclear whether it it referring to the cast of characters therefore an ensemble or the actually casting of actors for an adaption which is not set in stone yet.

Draw of Story

The bond that the three men have and their antics later in the story are heartfelt and the action is very high-octane. It creates emotional investment both in the characters and the pacing later in the story.

Possible Drawbacks

The beginning origins of characters in the beginning create slower pacing in the first portion of the story compared the end of the second act and the third act. The different external conflicts can make the exploit feel less cohesive without a stronger connection between the inner conflict transformations. Sometimes the dialogue can lack subtext in non-action scenes which also creates pockets of slower pacing.

Use of Special Effects


Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that a father and his two sons must fight enemies on land, in the water and even the air. The violent justice is cathartic and satisfying for those that have enjoy clear cut action films.

Fanbase Potential

With more cohesive antagonists and a building of pacing this has a lot of potential for a large audience of fun action movies with traditional American values its themes.

Awards Potential

Given its action heavy genre this is unlikely to have prestige awards circuit potential however this may wind for technical awards given its variety of landscape both visual and for audio mixing.

Envisioned Budget


Similar Films/TV Series


What’s New About the Story

The originality of the story is the strength of the family and adaptability they have in bringing justice in all terrains to distinctly bad antagonists. It might be beneficial to make the bad guys more humanistic in their motivations to make there be even more investment in their conflict and the protagonists' success.

Lead Characters

John is protective, capable and confident. His son Elliot is caring, hopeful and brave. Jack is loyal, romantic and pragmatic.

Uniqueness of Story

The bond is great between the protagonists, and the action is enjoyable but some of the dialogue and structure could be adjusted with further development to reach the story's maximum pacing potential.

Possible Formats

Film: Streaming, Indie, Studio

Analyst Recommendation



While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

Having more nuance to the dialogue with purpose will create more realistic conversations in the non-action scenes. Creating a more consistent pacing with antagonists that build throughout the story will also help make the different locations feel more unified as one story about the family getting justice.