Sons of a Citizen Soldier
ACTION ADVENTURE CRIME DRAMA FAMILY POLITICAL RELIGIOUS HISTORICAL FICTION FUNNY
1960s & '70s
Mark Abernathy
Submision Type
book
Logline
Absolute fury of action in a compelling adventure,underwater,by land and sea. Conflict at each turn as a family divided by Vietnam War sentiments comes together in a torrent of dramatic violent clashes with host of adversaries, all to the soundtrack of 1970.
Genre
Action,Adventure,Crime,Drama,Family,Political,Religious,Historical Fiction,Funny
Short Summary
Elliott quits college and hichikes to pot commune, ends in brutal sleeping bag assault. Younger brother nearly killed in accident, medically disqualified has confrontation with protesters that ends badly. Men who beat Elliott attack father on gold dredge and have fatal meeting with Jack.
Setting
Trinity River, Junction City,Weaverville Ca., Dauphin Is. Al. ,EL Jobean Fla.,Bahamas.
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Overcoming Monster/Villain,Quest,Voyage and Return,Rags to Riches
Plot - Other Elements
Coming of Age,Happy Ending,Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions,Twist
Mature Audience Themes
Nudity,Substance Abuse, Language/Profanity,Extreme Violence
Main Character Details
Name: John Copeland
Age: 52
Gender: Male
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Masculine,Sexy,Blunt,Badass,Aggressive,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Engaging,Faithful,Skillful,Outspoken,Selfless,Religious,Modest,Adventurous,Patriotic,Strong Moral Code,Unapologetic,Leader,Honorable,Heroic
Additional Character Details
Name: Elliott Copeland
Age: 22
Gender: Male
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Visionary,Underdog,Skillful,Sexy,Masculine,Adventurous,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Heartthrob,Heroic,Honorable,Badass
Additional Character Details
Name: Jack Copeland
Age: 20
Gender: Male
Role: protagonist
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Confident,Decisive,Engaging,Heartthrob,Heroic,Honorable,Leader,Romantic,Masculine,Obedient,Sexy,Patriotic,Selfless,Skillful
Additional Character Details
Name: Randy "Rabbit"
Age: 34
Gender: Male
Role: sidekick
Key Traits: Adventurous,Masculine,Patriotic,Confident,Charming,Aggressive,Badass,Aspiring,Decisive,Engaging,Flexible,Heroic,Honorable,Leader,Romantic,Funny,Skillful,Outspoken,Blunt
Genre
ACTION, SUSPENSE, DRAMA, WAR
Brief
A dad fights for survival on his home turf after surviving the Vietnam War. He and his two sons take on a variety of foes in all terrains. The men are able to defeat every foe in a realistic bond that transcends generations.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: FAIR
Commerciality: FAIR
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Pace: FAIR
Premise: FAIR
Structure: FAIR
Theme: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
The book profile does reflect the narrative, with the development pitch doing an especially good job of providing thematic insight into the story. It might help to eliminate the line about the cast as it is unclear whether it it referring to the cast of characters therefore an ensemble or the actually casting of actors for an adaption which is not set in stone yet.
Draw of Story
The bond that the three men have and their antics later in the story are heartfelt and the action is very high-octane. It creates emotional investment both in the characters and the pacing later in the story.
Possible Drawbacks
The beginning origins of characters in the beginning create slower pacing in the first portion of the story compared the end of the second act and the third act. The different external conflicts can make the exploit feel less cohesive without a stronger connection between the inner conflict transformations. Sometimes the dialogue can lack subtext in non-action scenes which also creates pockets of slower pacing.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that a father and his two sons must fight enemies on land, in the water and even the air. The violent justice is cathartic and satisfying for those that have enjoy clear cut action films.
Fanbase Potential
With more cohesive antagonists and a building of pacing this has a lot of potential for a large audience of fun action movies with traditional American values its themes.
Awards Potential
Given its action heavy genre this is unlikely to have prestige awards circuit potential however this may wind for technical awards given its variety of landscape both visual and for audio mixing.
Envisioned Budget
LARGE BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
YELLOWSTONE, NARCO, SICARIO, BREAKING BAD, DEER HUNTER
What’s New About the Story
The originality of the story is the strength of the family and adaptability they have in bringing justice in all terrains to distinctly bad antagonists. It might be beneficial to make the bad guys more humanistic in their motivations to make there be even more investment in their conflict and the protagonists' success.
Lead Characters
John is protective, capable and confident. His son Elliot is caring, hopeful and brave. Jack is loyal, romantic and pragmatic.
Uniqueness of Story
The bond is great between the protagonists, and the action is enjoyable but some of the dialogue and structure could be adjusted with further development to reach the story's maximum pacing potential.
Possible Formats
Film: Streaming, Indie, Studio
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
Having more nuance to the dialogue with purpose will create more realistic conversations in the non-action scenes. Creating a more consistent pacing with antagonists that build throughout the story will also help make the different locations feel more unified as one story about the family getting justice.