Jeremy and the Witches Medallion

Book Cover

FANTASY SCI-FI ADVENTURE ACTION ADVENTURE HISTORICAL FICTION YOUNG ADULT

17th Century or Earlier

Randy gauthier

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Logline

Jeremy chases a Magpie bird all over England to retrieve his medallion it stole from him while having the ability to encounter different animals as friends to help to catch the magpie

Genre

Fantasy, Sci-Fi, Adventure, Action,,Adventure,Historical Fiction,Young Adult

Short Summary

A witch puts a spell on a medallion that will give her human form after being hung by King James. She loses the medallion and follows it four hundred years until one day Jeremy gets the medallion on his 17th birthday and the magpie witch steals it. Jeremy then chases the magpie all over England


After Jeremy and his friends get the medallion back homes telling goodbye

Setting

England, Wales, Scotland

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Quest

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Jeremy

Age: 17

Gender: Male

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Skillful,Educated

Additional Character Details

Name: Mrs Fitzy,

Age: 20

Gender: Female

Role: Sidekick

Key Traits: Badass,Badass,Faithful,Naive,Blunt,Sarcastic

Additional Character Details

Name: Mr Sterling

Age: 30

Gender: Male

Role: sidekick

Key Traits: Educated,Honorable,Leader,Skillful,Confident

Additional Character Details

Name: Stallone

Age: 30

Gender: Male

Role: sidekick

Key Traits: Adventurous,Skillful,Naive,Underdog,Obedient

Development Pitch

A present day teenage boy from London,England is handed down a family heirloom from his mom only to see a magpie bird steal and fly off with it. By chance Jeremy finds himself transported back in time to the seventeenth century where he embarks on a magical journey throughout England, Wales and Scotland. On his journey he discovers that his abilities are endless as he makes friends with a variety of animals while learning he can communicate with them. A strong bond is formed and the pack decides to accompany Jeremy and help him retrieve the family heirloom.

About The Author

Target Audiences

Age: 13-17,18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: with a Publisher

Publisher: Austin Macauley

Year Published: 2020

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

The ePub ISBN is 9781647501532, the hardcover ISBN is 9781643786568 the paperback ISBN is 9781647501525

Genre

COMEDY, ACTION, DRAMA, FANTASY

Brief

Jeremy accidentally travels back in time to catch a magpie who stole his family heirloom. Suddenly in the 17th century, Jeremy discovers even more hidden powers. He uses his newfound ability to talk to animals to help him and his friends regain the heirloom his mother gave him from the mischievous magpie.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: FAIR

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The book profile does reflect the story, but the short summary could be a bit more clear and the development pitch could add some elaboration. The development pitch in explaining why the story is marketable would benefit in mentioning the themes of the story so the audience understands how the magic and characters are relatable. The short summary's switch to the perspective of the witch adds further information but would be clearer in keeping Jeremy as the protagonist instead of switching between the two characters.

Draw of Story

The idea that the magpie is supernatural but also that Jeremy has hidden powers on top of suddenly being able to time travel is fun in that he enjoys his newfound abilities without added seriousness. His mission remains simple and successful.

Possible Drawbacks

The dialogue can slow down the pacing at times and the inner conflicts of the characters are not always apparent. Making sure the dialogue retains purpose either in plot progression and or character development will help quicken the pacing and shorten the banter that has already been established in the friends' dynamics.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that Jeremy is given a small present that is stolen by a bird and then suddenly Jeremy can time travel along with the bird.

Fanbase Potential

For an original fantasy suitable for children this might have a decent fan base with more distinct themes within the inner conflicts to match the fun external conflict but provide greater depth and emotional investment.

Awards Potential

If animated, the story as an adaptation could possibly win within children's categories or for prestige animation categories, but as a children's film in live action there is less change that the story would be nominated.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

PUFF THE MAGIC DRAGON, ARTHUR AND THE SORCERER’S STONE, PHIL OF THE FUTURE, A WRINKLE IN TIME, CHARLOTTE’S WEB, DR. DOLITTLE

What’s New About the Story

The originality stems from the magical abilities Jeremy gains from his quest. The first being time travel and the second being the ability to talk to animals.

Lead Characters

Jeremy is curious, friendly and carefree. Mr. Sterling is dutiful but with a solid sense of humor. Mrs. Fitzy is direct, gutsy and confident.

Uniqueness of Story

The fantasy premise if fun, but more transformation to the inner conflicts and dialogue adjustments are needed to reach the narrative's full potential in plot and character.

Possible Formats

Film: Studio, Indie, Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

Jeremy accidentally travels back in time to catch a magpie who stole his family heirloom. Suddenly in the 17th century, Jeremy discovers even more hidden powers. He uses his newfound ability to talk to animals to help him and his friends regain the heirloom his mother gave him from the mischievous magpie.

Tips for Improvement

Making sure the protagonist and side characters have clear inner conflicts to become less static and increase emotional investment in their mission. Condensing the dialogue to create more purposeful conversations that progress the storyline would also help if incorporated.