Human Game 3: The Revelation

Nathan Waire nathanwaire@gmail.com 5098126704794

ACTION ADVENTURE GOTHIC HORROR CRIME DRAMA SUSPENSE/THRILLER

1960s & '70s,Contemporary,1980s & '90s

Nathan Waire aka Nathan Zen-Sapien

Logline

When a psychic begins to have visions of grizzly murders she enlists the help of one serial killing team to hunt down an even bigger threat.

Genre

Action,Adventure,Gothic,Horror,Crime,Drama,Suspense/Thriller

Short Summary

Morgan lies in bed dreaming of a killer. She doesn't understand the nature of his murders but is freaked out anyway. She immediately seeks out the police but they do not believe her so she takes matters into her own hands.


Having allowed the murderous brothers to dispose of the child killing behemoth Morgan decides to team up with them to form an alliance that would take the killer tendencies of the brothers and turn them into bounty hunters... Why shouldn't they profit from what they do naturally!

Setting

New Jersey or New York

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain

Plot - Other Elements

Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Extreme Violence

Main Character Details

Name: Morgan

Age: 21-29

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Selfless,Sexy,Desperate,Empathetic,Visionary,Heroic,Leader,Unapologetic,Secretive

Additional Character Details

Name: Clifton Gerrard

Age: 35 - 40

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Masculine,Confident,Criminal,Decisive,Crazy,Blunt,Skillful,Unapologetic,Honorable,Engaging,Heroic

Additional Character Details

Name: Virgil Gerrard

Age: 40 - 50

Gender: Male

Role: protagonist

Key Traits: Masculine,Badass,Aggressive,Criminal,Blunt,Outspoken,Skillful,Unapologetic,Lone Wolf

Additional Character Details

Name: Tyler

Age: 28 - 35

Gender: Male

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Aggressive,Charming,Villainous,Complex,Crazy,Criminal,Secretive

Development Pitch

I would use a drone for the motorcycle scenes at the beginning to show the lone wolf characteristic of the mystery protagonist. I would put all dream sequences in black and white until the shock end is revealed in each dream then I would incorporate color. I would use the music from the previous Human Game into the story while adding a more sinister beat for the antagonist. And I would make sure that the female characters were viewed as essential parts of the story seeing that this episode focuses on female lead.

About The Author

I am a filmmaker and screenwriter that has won awards for my short films and scripts.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34

Target Gender: Universal

Publishing Details

Hard Copy Available

No

WGA Number

I342736

Genre

ACTION, THRILLER, MATURE AUDIENCE, DRAMA

Brief

Morgan is a psychic accurately solving crimes in her dreams, but detectives have a hard time believing her. She counts on two criminals, Clifton and Virgil, to help her stop Tyler, a killer and pedophile.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

SCRIPT

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: GOOD

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

Profile reflects script accurately.

Draw of Story

The hook of the script is definitely the sharpness of the dialogue, even though plot is underdeveloped.

Possible Drawbacks

There are some typing issues - those can be easily solved; however scenes and characters need to be developed in order to allow the narrative to gain substance and originality.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook about this script is the idea of murderers helping bring justice to murders. Even though very short, dialogue shown is witty.

Fanbase Potential

There isn't enough information in the script in order to know if this adaptation could have a large fanbase.

Awards Potential

There also isn't enough information in the script in order to know if it could have awards potential, however the extremely violent scene would require exquisite acting and directing to be considered.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

X FILES

What’s New About the Story

The most original thing about this story is how the psychic solving crimes doesn't have the attention of detectives and end up resorting to the murders of other crimes to stop a psychopath killing young children.

Lead Characters

Morgan, Clifton and Virgil are interesting and dubious characters with potential, however could have many layers added to them.

Uniqueness of Story

It isn't a rare gem however narrative is well tied-up even underdeveloped. Characters are interesting but still raw.

Possible Formats

Film

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

It is a work in progress as the narrative needs to be properly developed in order to get the attention of a studio and have a chance on being invested on.

Tips for Improvement

If the author has the ambition of getting the attention of studios to adapt, finance and invest on the narrative, some considerable work must be put into the script.

Logline

When a psychic begins to have visions of grizzly murders she enlists the help of one serial killing team to hunt down an even bigger threat.

Short Summary

Morgan lies in bed dreaming of a killer. She doesn't understand the nature of his murders but is freaked out anyway. She immediately seeks out the police but they do not believe her so she takes matters into her own hands.


Having allowed the murderous brothers to dispose of the child killing behemoth Morgan decides to team up with them to form an alliance that would take the killer tendencies of the brothers and turn them into bounty hunters... Why shouldn't they profit from what they do naturally!

FEEDBACK

I would use a drone for the motorcycle scenes at the beginning to show the lone wolf characteristic of the mystery protagonist. I would put all dream sequences in black and white until the shock end is revealed in each dream then I would incorporate color. I would use the music from the previous Human Game into the story while adding a more sinister beat for the antagonist. And I would make sure that the female characters were viewed as essential parts of the story seeing that this episode focuses on female lead.

About The Author

I am a filmmaker and screenwriter that has won awards for my short films and scripts.

Mature Audience Themes

Extreme Violence

Characters

Main Character

Name: Morgan

Age: 21-29

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Selfless,Sexy,Desperate,Empathetic,Visionary,Heroic,Leader,Unapologetic,Secretive

Character 1

Name: Clifton Gerrard

Age: 35 - 40

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Masculine,Confident,Criminal,Decisive,Crazy,Blunt,Skillful,Unapologetic,Honorable,Engaging,Heroic

Character 2

Name: Virgil Gerrard

Age: 40 - 50

Gender: Male

Role: protagonist

Key Traits: Masculine,Badass,Aggressive,Criminal,Blunt,Outspoken,Skillful,Unapologetic,Lone Wolf

Character 3

Name: Tyler

Age: 28 - 35

Gender: Male

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Aggressive,Charming,Villainous,Complex,Crazy,Criminal,Secretive