ACTION EPIC SCI-FI SCI-FI EPIC WAR
With the ability to manipulate metal, Anna discovered that she was not alone when she met Sara. Both women are now running from the Government and a corporation with an interest in their kind. However another of their kind, Nakita will set Mars on fire for her vengeance on the two.
Action, Epic, Sci-Fi,,Sci-fi,Epic,War
The story start out with a bang as Anna a local cop on Mars, escapes obliteration from a trap set by the Red Skulls gang. Anna soon realized that there was something more than retaliation from this gang that was going on. This something was will change her life on Mars.
The battle with Core and Nakita left Anna and Sara with more questions. However, with the help of Sara's friends, they found a new lead on Earth. Since they are wanted on Mars, there was no other choice but to leave Mars.
Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Overcoming Monster/Villain,,Rebellion Against 'The One',Other
Plot - Other Elements
Mature Audience Themes
Main Character Details
Name: Anna Maytix
Key Traits: Faithful, Funny, Sarcastic, Beautiful, Extraordinary Powers and Abilities, Complex, Secretive, Badass, Blunt,Sarcastic,Skillful,Badass,Empathetic
Additional Character Details
Name: Sara Jessica Bennett
Key Traits: Adventurous, Badass, Beautiful, Extraordinary Powers and Abilities, Modest, Skillful, Charming, Complex, Confident, Desperate, Educated, Sarcastic,Blunt,Skillful,Empathetic,Funny,Honorable,Badass
Additional Character Details
Key Traits: Beautiful, Extraordinary Powers and Abilities, Unapologetic, Villainous, Aggressive, Badass, Crazy, Desperate, Skillful,Aggressive,Faithful,Crazy,Villainous,Engaging,Unapologetic
Additional Character Details
Key Traits: Masculine, Skillful, Sophisticated, Confident, Decisive, Leader, Extraordinary Powers and Abilities, Power-hungry, Unapologetic, Visionary, Complex, Educated, Engaging,Manipulative,Sophisticated,Skillful,Visionary,Confident,Decisive,Leader
Living Metal adaptation sold for both movies or tv series. It’s a series that has a mixture of sci-fi and martial arts to give it an unique place among the rest.
ACTION, THRILLER, WAR, FANTASY
Anna is a law enforcement officer who soon finds herself on the run when getting herself mixed up in an interplanetary conspiracy. She meets a woman named Sara, and the two find that they posses the extraordinary ability to manipulate metal. They attempt to hide from enforcers of a corporation who is responsible for their creation. Ultimately, they face the head of the company and the main enforcer, defeating them (not permanently), living to fight another day.
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
The book profile accurately reflects the book.
Draw of Story
The author begins the story with an action sequence that draws the reader in and introduces one of the protagonists.
The story is sometimes hard to comprehend due to the Author's decision to write everything in the past tense and being littered with grammar issues and typos. Also, the characters and plot points of the story are somewhat formulaic.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
Two women who are the remnants of a secret program intended to create humans with the ability to manipulate metal, embark on a journey to uncover the secrets of their past while evading the corporation that created them. The big budget sci-fi/action plot is the big hook for this story.
If adapted, I don't see this story having a large fanbase. While, the story is big budget and would serve (theoretically) as a "tentpole" film for studios, the formulaic plot and lack of interesting protagonists would restrict it from attaining a large fanbase.
I don't see this story garnering awards/acclaim due to the aforementioned problems of a formulaic plot and characters.
Similar Films/TV Series
FILMS AND TELEVISION SUCH AS "ALITA: BATTLE ANGEL", "AVATAR: LEGEND OF KORRA", "RESIDENT EVIL (FILM)", AND "GHOST IN THE SHELL". THESE FILMS/SHOWS ARE SIMILAR TO THE STORY DUE TO THEIR "SUPER-POWERED" FEMALE PROTAGONISTS AND BEING BASED IN THE SCI-FI/ACTION GENRES.
What’s New About the Story
Nothing really stands out as unique with this story; giving the protagonists more depth and changing the dynamic between the two leads would help to make the story more unique. As it stands the story has two "hot-headed" antagonists that bump heads until they don't to accomplish their goals. Diving more into their backstories and exploring what makes them different and why would remedy this issue.
Nothing about the lead characters stand out in this story.
Uniqueness of Story
This is not a rare gem; as mentioned before, reinventing the protagonists and switching up the trajectory of the plot can go a long way in helping this story stand out. Beyond this, the story could also find a theme it wants to explore to make it more than a simple action story. Exploring ideas of transhumanism, terraforming, and the ethics regarding these ideas would make for a compelling story.
Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Cable, TV Series - Network, TV Series - Streaming
WORK IN PROGRESS
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
I would recommend changing up the dynamic between the protagonists to something more unique and giving them more depth. The Author should consider theme(s) they would want to explore and incorporate those into the story. Also, a minor note is the ending could be changed to not so overtly indicate a sequel to the story. Avoiding a "deus ex machina" for the antagonist and building a suspenseful mystery towards their demise works better for planting the seeds for a sequel.