Shift

Kimber Ireland

Book Cover

GENRE

ROMANCE

    Core Theme

    YOUNG ROYAL COMING OF AGE, FALLING IN LOVE AND GETTING MARRIED, LEARNING TO DEAL WITH TRADITIONS AND PERSONAL TRAGEDIES.

    TIME PERIOD

    Other

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    BRIDGERTON, GOSSIP GIRL.

    CHARACTER LIST

    JAYDIS SHIFT. 18. LEAD. TALENTED, BEAUTIFUL, ARTISTIC, SEDUCTIVE, INNOCENT, INSECURE.

    HARBUR LADNEK. 21. JAYDI'S LOVE INTEREST, FIRST HUSBAND. MASCULINE,CONFIDENT, STRONG, ATTRACTIVE.

    CIL DEVEREAUX. 18. JAYDI'S BEST FRIEND. FUNNY SMART, OUTSPOKEN, PRETTY.

    LAURAE SHIFT. 20'S. JAYDIS' OLDER SISTER. PRETTY, POPULAR, FASHIONABLE.

    REI LADNEK. 22. HARBUR'S BROTHER, JAYDIS' SECOND HUSBAND. ATTRACTIVE, INSECURE, STRONG MORAL CODE, AGGRESSIVE.

    FLOK. 30'S. SHIFT'S FRIEND, JAYDIS' 'UNCLE'. FUNNY, JOYFUL, TALENTED.

    Logline

    In this coming of age novel, young royal, Jaydis, comes to grips with growing older. Her lackluster, privileged life becomes entwined with a set of royal brothers from another kingdom, who enjoy freedom and rebellion. Jaydis learns of love, betrayal, and heartbreak through their eyes.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 18-34,35-54

    Target Gender: Female Leaning

    Setting

    Information not completed

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: self-published

    Publisher: Kindle Direct Publishing

    Year Published: 2021

    Starting Description

    At a festival held every year, Jaydis is showcased as the new gem of the season due to turning 18. Here, she starts to see her soon to be brothers-in-law in a different light. One is handsome and charming, the other is down right annoying and immature.

    Ending Description

    Jaydis finds herself the victim of trauma when her new husband dies suddenly and she's forced to marry her unwed brother in law to satisfy tradition. They want no part of each other or the arrangement.

    Group Specific

    Information not completed

    Hard Copy Available

    Yes

    ISBN

    979-8711407454

    Mature Audience Themes

    Nudity, Language/Profanity

    Plot - Other Elements

    Coming of Age,Twist

    Plot - Premise

    Tragedy

    Main Character Details

    Name: Jaydis Shift

    Age: 18

    Gender: Female

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Clumsy,Empathetic,Skillful,Selfless,Secretive

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Harbur Ladnek

    Age: 21

    Gender: Male

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Confident,Masculine,Engaging,Heartthrob,Honorable,Seductive,Sexy

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Rei Ladnek

    Age: 22

    Gender: Male

    Role: protagonist

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Aggressive,Heroic,Funny,Outspoken,Masculine

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Cil Devereaux

    Age: 18

    Gender: Female

    Role: sidekick

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Aggressive,Confident,Outspoken,Unapologetic,Blunt

    Development Pitch

    Shift Coming Of Age/Romance In this modern meets Victorian society, at 18, Jaydis is living in the shadow of her older sister, Laurae, who is set to have the royal wedding of the year. Everything changes when the groom's playboy brothers, Harbur and Rei, waltz into Wellspring with sharp jaw lines and bad reputations. Jaydis catches the eye of Harbur, much to the dismay of Rei. Is it love? Is it lust? Or is she just another girl in his game? Abandonment, cheating, deception, voyeurism, and loads of regret is just the tip of the iceberg--When she finds herself in a dangerous dance between the two. Can young Jaydis handle what comes next when her life is in the balance, or will she "Shift" for good? The interesting thing about this story is the complex relationship that develops between Jaydis, Harbur, and Rei and how it plays out. Jaydis initially finds herself attracted and in love with Harbur, but something about Rei, even though she attests him fully, keeps bringing her back in. They have a massive secret between them, Jaydis and Rei. They never find the right time or way to heal from their mistakes before tragedy strikes them both and now they must live with the consequences and guilt of their decisions.

    Genre

    ROMANCE

    Brief

    Royal girl Jaydis, at the age of 18, is ready to be announced as the newest single available in the kingdom. Now more grown up and willing to meet someone, Jaydis starts to notice the beauty of her two soon-to-be brothers-in-law. She ends up falling in love and marrying one of them and starts getting to know their strange family traditions.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    FIRST PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: FAIR

    Characterization: GOOD

    Commerciality: FAIR

    Franchise Potential: FAIR

    Pace: GOOD

    Premise: FAIR

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    Yes, it is accurate, but an antagonist is missing there. Harbur's mother could play this role since she is the cause of embarrassing situations for Jaydis.

    Draw of Story

    The story mixes old traditions, rituals, and practices with a more modern look and style. It gives the book a positive first impression.

    Possible Drawbacks

    The narrative sometimes seems shallow. It seems that the author paid a lot of attention to the story's main beats and left the rest aside. Some dialogues, conflicts, and actions end up not having the strength expected.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    The hook is the blooming of this young girl to her adult life in a royal universe that adds glamour, charm, and romance to the plot.

    Fanbase Potential

    No. The characters demand higher stakes, and the conflicts need more intensity to attract a larger audience.

    Awards Potential

    No. The author would need to improve its narrative dramatic arc greatly, deepen characters and conflicts to achieve the potential for awards.

    Envisioned Budget

    MEDIUM BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    BRIDGERTON: DAPHNE IS PRESENTED AT A BALL TO LOOK FOR ADMIRERS AND FALLS IN LOVE WITH A VISITOR WITH A TROUBLED FAMILY HISTORY. PRIDE AND PREJUDICE: ELIZABETH AND MR. DARCY FALL IN LOVE, BUT THEY WILL HAVE TO CONFRONT PREJUDICES BECAUSE THEY ARE FROM DIFFERENT CLASSES AND BACKGROUNDS.

    What’s New About the Story

    The fusion of period traditions with a contemporary style makes the plot more interesting.

    Lead Characters

    Jaydis is a young girl who is getting to know love and letting herself live new experiences. Despite her young age and immaturity, she manages to stand for herself. She is a good female protagonist. The Ladnek brothers present very different characteristics and bring a good balance to the scenes.

    Uniqueness of Story

    It is not. It would need narrative changes, and improvements in central conflicts to stand out somehow.

    Possible Formats

    Film - Indie, Film - Streaming

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

    Tips for Improvement

    The mixture of period traditions with modern style is entertaining and could be further explored. Conflicts are not very satisfying. The protagonist and her beloved one manage to get married without great opposition from the family. Harbur's mother doesn't seem to like Jaydis, but she also does barely anything to prevent the matrimony. The biggest points of conflict seem to exist only to favor the presentation of erotic scenes. Harbur's mother accepts the marriage, but the couple will need to have their first postmarital coition in front of Harbur's brother, Rey, because of family traditions. At another time, when Jaydis marries the second brother of the Ladnek family, she must again have sex in front of a third person. The adversest part of these scenes is that Jaydis shows no resistance and ends up having sex with the two brothers at the same time. These are not credible circumstances for these characters at all. The couple is absolutely in love, and Harbur does not show any jealousy when he sees his own brother participating in the sexual act. It sounds quite out of the blue for these three characters. The one who feels guilty after the whole situation is Rei, who was initially the most detached from morals and feelings. It could look like a plot twist, but it sounds absurd. The plot would need more punctual and intense conflicts to make us cheer for this couple. The structure could be better developed. It does not seem that the end has any relation to the beginning. The structure could deliver something more impactful regarding the main plot. Rei seems to be the character that has changed the most throughout the story, but he is not someone we care about. The book has its potential, but the narrative needs to be improved.

    Brief

    Jaydis is a young innocent royal coming of age. While she is preparing for her sister's wedding with Johan Ladnek, she meets Harbur, one of his brothers, and falls deeply in love. She gets married, but the marriage is short-lived as Harbur dies in an accident and she is obliged to marry his brother Rei.

    What We Liked

    This story is interesting due to its protagonist, Jaydis, a character that is able to combine both strength and vulnerability, and also because the narrative combines contrasting elements such as modern and tradition; innocence and lust; joy and tragedy.

    Film: It would be a great adaptation for film because narrative is surprising and there are big changes considering protagonist's initial status.

    TV: It would be a great adaptation for TV as the narrative is rich in short passages and small conflicts that cross through a wider narrative.

    Key points: Young and charismatic protagonist; Sexually explicit passages; attractive male characters; tragedy; beautiful and rich settings.

    Synopsis

    Jaydis is a young royal comfortably living in the shadows of her sister Laurae, who is about to marry Jonah Ladnek. Her hobbies are spending time with best friend Cil, 'uncle' Flok and drawing. As the family prepares for the big royal wedding and Jaydis is introduced to society during the Festival of the Wells, she meets Harbur and Rei, the two other highly attractive Ladnek brothers.

    Soon, Jaydis and Harbur get involved, but she is not convinced of his intentions. She eventually falls in love with Harbur as she discovers her sexuality and physical attraction for him. It takes longer for her to stand the presence of the annoying Rei, though.

    When Jaydis travels to her boyfriend's castle to meet his parents, Harbur proposes to her. He also organizes a surprise wedding and Jaydis is also surprised by the 'voyeur tradition' that runs in his family, which means that one person of the family will be watching as the couple spends the first night together. After the wedding, they realize the one watching will be Rei, and the voyeur tradition becomes a threesome with Jaydis, Harbur and Rei.

    On the day after, Harbur doesn't remember what happened, but Rei and Jaydis are consumed with guilt.

    Three months later, Harbur dies in an accident and the responsible for his tragic death is Cil's brother Rodge. After a conflict between the two kings, Harbur's father agrees not to kill Rodge if Jay agrees to follow another tradition from the Ladnek family, which states that a widow in the family should marry the deceased man's brother. Jay discovers she is pregnant.

    About The Author

    Kimber Ireland is awaiting the day she can call herself a New York Times bestselling author, but until then, she's wife to a goofy superhero, and a girl/boy mama to a sassy diva and a dinoscholar. Kimber calls Louisiana home, and when she's not watching period dramas, or listening to true crime podcasts, she enjoys downtime with her family of heathens. She loves to cook, but even more than that she loves to eat (crawfish, please!) This writing thing came easy to her, and somehow what started as a kind of therapy for trauma, ended up being total escapism from the chaos of the universe. Kimber hopes her emotions translates into her work, to the reader, every awkwardness, every tear, every soaking wet panty.