In this coming of age novel, young royal, Jaydis, comes to grips with growing older. Her lackluster, privileged life becomes entwined with a set of royal brothers from another kingdom, who enjoy freedom and rebellion. Jaydis learns of love, betrayal, and heartbreak through their eyes.
At a festival held every year, Jaydis is showcased as the new gem of the season due to turning 18. Here, she starts to see her soon to be brothers-in-law in a different light. One is handsome and charming, the other is down right annoying and immature.
Jaydis finds herself the victim of trauma when her new husband dies suddenly and she's forced to marry her unwed brother in law to satisfy tradition. They want no part of each other or the arrangement.
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Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Plot - Other Elements
Coming of Age,Twist
Mature Audience Themes
Main Character Details
Name: Jaydis Shift
Key Traits: Clumsy,Empathetic,Skillful,Selfless,Secretive
Additional Character Details
Name: Harbur Ladnek
Key Traits: Confident,Masculine,Engaging,Heartthrob,Honorable,Seductive,Sexy
Additional Character Details
Name: Rei Ladnek
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aggressive,Heroic,Funny,Outspoken,Masculine
Additional Character Details
Name: Cil Devereaux
Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Aggressive,Confident,Outspoken,Unapologetic,Blunt
Shift Coming Of Age/Romance In this modern meets Victorian society, at 18, Jaydis is living in the shadow of her older sister, Laurae, who is set to have the royal wedding of the year. Everything changes when the groom's playboy brothers, Harbur and Rei, waltz into Wellspring with sharp jaw lines and bad reputations. Jaydis catches the eye of Harbur, much to the dismay of Rei. Is it love? Is it lust? Or is she just another girl in his game? Abandonment, cheating, deception, voyeurism, and loads of regret is just the tip of the iceberg--When she finds herself in a dangerous dance between the two. Can young Jaydis handle what comes next when her life is in the balance, or will she "Shift" for good? The interesting thing about this story is the complex relationship that develops between Jaydis, Harbur, and Rei and how it plays out. Jaydis initially finds herself attracted and in love with Harbur, but something about Rei, even though she attests him fully, keeps bringing her back in. They have a massive secret between them, Jaydis and Rei. They never find the right time or way to heal from their mistakes before tragedy strikes them both and now they must live with the consequences and guilt of their decisions.
Royal girl Jaydis, at the age of 18, is ready to be announced as the newest single available in the kingdom. Now more grown up and willing to meet someone, Jaydis starts to notice the beauty of her two soon-to-be brothers-in-law. She ends up falling in love and marrying one of them and starts getting to know their strange family traditions.
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes, it is accurate, but an antagonist is missing there. Harbur's mother could play this role since she is the cause of embarrassing situations for Jaydis.
Draw of Story
The story mixes old traditions, rituals, and practices with a more modern look and style. It gives the book a positive first impression.
The narrative sometimes seems shallow. It seems that the author paid a lot of attention to the story's main beats and left the rest aside. Some dialogues, conflicts, and actions end up not having the strength expected.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is the blooming of this young girl to her adult life in a royal universe that adds glamour, charm, and romance to the plot.
No. The characters demand higher stakes, and the conflicts need more intensity to attract a larger audience.
No. The author would need to improve its narrative dramatic arc greatly, deepen characters and conflicts to achieve the potential for awards.
Similar Films/TV Series
BRIDGERTON: DAPHNE IS PRESENTED AT A BALL TO LOOK FOR ADMIRERS AND FALLS IN LOVE WITH A VISITOR WITH A TROUBLED FAMILY HISTORY. PRIDE AND PREJUDICE: ELIZABETH AND MR. DARCY FALL IN LOVE, BUT THEY WILL HAVE TO CONFRONT PREJUDICES BECAUSE THEY ARE FROM DIFFERENT CLASSES AND BACKGROUNDS.
What’s New About the Story
The fusion of period traditions with a contemporary style makes the plot more interesting.
Jaydis is a young girl who is getting to know love and letting herself live new experiences. Despite her young age and immaturity, she manages to stand for herself. She is a good female protagonist. The Ladnek brothers present very different characteristics and bring a good balance to the scenes.
Uniqueness of Story
It is not. It would need narrative changes, and improvements in central conflicts to stand out somehow.
Film - Indie, Film - Streaming
WORK IN PROGRESS
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
The mixture of period traditions with modern style is entertaining and could be further explored. Conflicts are not very satisfying. The protagonist and her beloved one manage to get married without great opposition from the family. Harbur's mother doesn't seem to like Jaydis, but she also does barely anything to prevent the matrimony. The biggest points of conflict seem to exist only to favor the presentation of erotic scenes. Harbur's mother accepts the marriage, but the couple will need to have their first postmarital coition in front of Harbur's brother, Rey, because of family traditions. At another time, when Jaydis marries the second brother of the Ladnek family, she must again have sex in front of a third person. The adversest part of these scenes is that Jaydis shows no resistance and ends up having sex with the two brothers at the same time. These are not credible circumstances for these characters at all. The couple is absolutely in love, and Harbur does not show any jealousy when he sees his own brother participating in the sexual act. It sounds quite out of the blue for these three characters. The one who feels guilty after the whole situation is Rei, who was initially the most detached from morals and feelings. It could look like a plot twist, but it sounds absurd. The plot would need more punctual and intense conflicts to make us cheer for this couple. The structure could be better developed. It does not seem that the end has any relation to the beginning. The structure could deliver something more impactful regarding the main plot. Rei seems to be the character that has changed the most throughout the story, but he is not someone we care about. The book has its potential, but the narrative needs to be improved.