North of the Brazos

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ACTION ADVENTURE

Contemporary,2000s

Keith Remer

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Logline

The leaders of Chicago's most notorious street gangs are being murdered in a hideous fashion. The methods of elimination are so extreme that subordinates are unwilling to fill the vacant roles, prompting a reduction in gang-related crimes. The suspects are seemingly specters from the distant past.

Genre

Action,Adventure

Short Summary

A man worth many billions is dying. He hopes to eliminate gang violence before he does. He hires and elaborately sets up two Cowboys widely know as vigilantes in their home state of Texas. Initially, it seems the two men are working alone. However, they are supported by a highly-specialized team.


The cowboys become legends in Chicago as "the outlaws." The tactics of the outlaws and their support team of highly-specialized professionals literally shuts down gang violence in Chicago, prompting citizens to take back their neighborhoods from the street gangs.

Setting

Chicago and Aspermont, Texas.

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain

Plot - Other Elements

Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions,Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Extreme Violence,Sexual Abuse, Language/Profanity,Nudity,Substance Abuse

Main Character Details

Name: Trey Remington

Age: mid thirties

Gender: Male

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Masculine,Patriotic,Complex,Badass,Confident

Additional Character Details

Name: John Ledford

Age: mid thirties

Gender: Male

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Masculine,Badass,Aggressive,Complex,Patriotic

Additional Character Details

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Development Pitch

This is a very timely story considering the growing crimes of inner-city gangs. The citizens of these communities need a hero. The nation needs a from of relief and assurances that such violence won't spread to their communities. In Trey Remington and John Ledford we initially see two-cold blooded murderers, but as the story unwinds and the twists are straightened, we come to know them as men willing to do what other men don't have the moral courage to do. They will eventually play out on the screen as the heroes needed in specific corners of our nation today. It's often said that my novels "read like a movie." This particular story can easily be adapted for the big screen or as a limited series for the likes of Netflix.

About The Author

Keith Remer is the International Indy Book Award Winner for Best in Fiction for his thriller, The Hiding Place of Thunder. Remer is quickly gaining recognition as one of today's best writers in multiple genres. To date he has written twelve novels that are in various stages of production. A retired Army colonel, Remer lives on his horse ranch in Oklahoma City.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: with a Publisher

Publisher: Honey Lee Press

Year Published: 2020

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

978-1-7341015-3-9

Genre

ACTION, MATURE AUDIENCE

Brief

A rich patron hires old school vigilantes to restore order to the streets of Chicago. The two hired men reek havoc on the rival gangs of the city seeking justice in a way the cops legally can't. One lowly gang member must enlist the help of the outlaw men and the cops in order to save his young cousin. The cops and the streets scramble to retain control of their operations in the wake of the outlaws' presence.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: GOOD

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The logline and short summary are straightforward and match the narrative. The development pitch could consider explaining the themes of the story rather than lauding the quality of the writing so that the audience has a better understanding of the meaning behind the ultra-violence earlier on in the plot.

Draw of Story

The idea that moral courage sometimes requires durastic actions including violence is a interesting philosophical concept. It is the antihero concept on steroids given the large scale effectiveness of the outlaws where they suffer little setbacks in providing justice to the city. They are almost like superheroes but without the magical realism and fantasy elements.

Possible Drawbacks

There is a large cast of characters; that confuses which is the main plot and which are the subplots. While the idea behind the outlaws violence is understood, violence meeting violence doesn't always seem the the long term solution. Showing how the characters are able to grow through internal conflicts will help show how the external conflicts were lastingly effective outside the simplicity of life or death. It is hard to see how gangs would stop once the immediate violent threats of the outlaws are gone without seeing how the surviving characters themselves changed for the better.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that Southern outlaws and their team take down Chicago gang violence once and for all.

Fanbase Potential

This could have a large fanbase for its action heavy plot and interesting antiheroes. However, the lack of nuance in terms of structural functionalism simplifying violence to being the only solution to stop gangs may be off putting to some including a large body of the liberal crowd. This is likely to appeal to a more conservative crowd with a particular idea of justice.

Awards Potential

This is unlikely to have awards potential because it combines the morality of superhero films and Westerns into an action heavy thriller. The characters are not able to develop enough to gain awards recognition and the themes are uncomplicated as an action thriller to garner other awards.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

CHI-RAQ, EQUALIZER, JOHN WICK, PRISONERS, THE WIRE, BATMAN, THE PUNISHER, MAN ON FIRE

What’s New About the Story

The originality of the story stems from the extremism the outlaws are willing to take and the hopefulness that gang violence in Chicago really can be eradicated. A greater understanding about how the violence really does transform the Chicago streets could help empathize with their harsh methods.

Lead Characters

The outlaws are ruthless and just, but it is P-Wac's wish to rescue his cousin as a teenager himself that steals all of the emotional investment. P-wac's willingness to try and work within the system as well as try to work with the outlaws shows a bravery that the fully skilled outlaws never have to show as the outlaws have nothing to fear or lose.

Uniqueness of Story

This has a lot of good action elements, but the characters need more emotional growth to showcase how the violence of the outlaws is specifically affecting in comparison the the death tolls of normal gang violence.

Possible Formats

Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

Focusing and clarifying which is the main storyline, either ending gang violence or rescuing P-wac's cousin, would help a make the narrative easier to follow and the themes more apparent. Some of the characters need to be more dynamic with emotional growth and internal conflict rather than just reacting to external threats.