HORROR MYSTERY SUSPENSE/THRILLER ACTION ADVENTURE DRAMA GOTHIC CRIME
An 'off the books' sheriff's investigation into the sudden appearance of an abandoned house reveals the answer to the age old question...does hell really exist? The answer is yes and it has made a home for all of us.
The sighting and location of an empty house is promptly reported to the sheriff's office by a bewildered land owner. The sheriff puts together an unconventional team to investigate the source and locate the owners of the house.
The survivors of the investigative team created by the sheriff try to cope after their encounter and escape from the horrors and violence that haunt and possess the house only to be brutally attacked in their own homes and dragged back to the dwelling and made part of it forever.
Arkansas - small southern town
Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Plot - Other Elements
Mature Audience Themes
Main Character Details
Name: Sheriff Jeremy Pritchett
Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Gracious,Educated,Heroic,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Modest,Obedient,Blunt,Selfless,Skillful,Strong Moral Code
Additional Character Details
Name: Sam Pritchett
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Complex,Confident,Engaging,Flexible,Gracious,Educated,Leader,Naive,Modest,Obedient,Blunt,Outspoken,Funny,Strong Moral Code,Unapologetic
Additional Character Details
Name: Leslie Singer
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Engaging,Gracious,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Blunt,Selfless,Outspoken,Skillful,Funny,Visionary,Sarcastic,Secretive,Sophisticated,Strong Moral Code,Unapologetic
Additional Character Details
Name: Deputy Cole Sutter
Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Clumsy,Confident,Gracious,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Insecure,Naive,Underdog,Modest,Obedient,Selfless,Strong Moral Code
I believe you will find Dwelling offers an unusual story line. It is not the typical spooky old house because the house itself is the entity and the ghosts inside are haunted as well. The plot of the story will appeal to all fans of the horror genre and the characters and setting will entice any movie fan. Dwelling definitely has sequel potential since the story does not technically end but could be considered a new beginning from the perspective of the house and the ghosts that inhabit it. A television series is promising because Dwelling offers so many different avenues to travel with backstory, the town, characters and of course the house. (THE PLOT) The discovery of a house deep in the woods of the massive Webster property answers the question "are ghosts real," in terrifying, graphic detail. The sighting and location of the house is promptly reported to the sheriff's office by the bewildered land owner. The nature of the complaint, not to mention the demeanor of Mr. Webster, puts in motion the formation of an unprepared team composed of the sheriff and his deputy, paranormal investigators, and two supernatural de-bunkers. What begins with the presumption of an uneventful trek through the woods to locate the inexplicable house and solve a mystery, graduates to one encounter after another with unthinkable abominations and violent confrontations once the Dwelling finds them.
A house suddenly appears in the middle of a land, and the land's owner decides to report it to the sheriff. Weird things start to happen, people disappear, and we discover by the end of the book that the house was controlled by an old entity that looks for objects and people to possess.
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
It is accurate.
Draw of Story
This haunted house appearing in the middle of private property is an entertaining way to start a horror story.
The investigation itself feels repetitive. It takes a lot of pages of people reporting things to the sheriff. The author could write it differently.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The plot sounds suitable for a horror movie. This haunted house that kills people is a good character and scenario at the same time.
If further developed, I believe so.
No. It's not impactful nor thought-provoking enough for it. It's pure entertainment for horror lovers.
Similar Films/TV Series
THE HAUNTING OF HILL HOUSE: A HAUNTED HOUSE IN WHICH THE GHOSTS LIVE THERE FOR GOOD. CHILD'S PLAY: AN EVIL ENTITY POSSESSES A DOLL IN ORDER TO STAY "ALIVE" AND KILL PEOPLE.
What’s New About the Story
A house, in the middle of the woods, that is possessed by an evil entity. The author could better develop backstories and give the house an even scarier "mood."
The sheriff could be better developed, so we could root more for him. Maybe, the house itself could be the main character of this story, depending on "its" backstory. This choice would give the story a more original look.
Uniqueness of Story
No. We could know more about this old entity that wants to remain alive possessing objects. It could give the book a more complex plot.
Film - Streaming, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series
WORK IN PROGRESS
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
I'd like to know more about the entity's backstory. Why is this old spirit possessing objects to remain alive? Why does the entity kill people? If we have the chance to know the entity better, to know her past, her motivations, I believe the story could become more complex and scarier. The writing style is Ok, but it needs improvements in order to really catch people's attention. I don't think that the sheriff should be the main character. If you have an interesting character (the house), the character that is on the opposite side of the story should be equally interesting. The sheriff could be this person, but he needs to be more impressive. I understand that the entity possesses objects to keep moving on, but possessing a doll sounds quite clichéd. I loved the way the story began. A house appears overnight in the middle of the woods, and the land's owner decides to report it, believing someone is trying to take advantage of him. It has the power to be scary. However, the story's development is not equally scary. It should be better elaborated to become an entertaining horror movie.