Not the End

Gianna Gabriela

Book Cover

GENRE

YOUNG ADULT ROMANCE DRAMA FAMILY

    Core Theme

    SPEAKING OUT WITH YOUR AUTHENTIC SELF.

    TIME PERIOD

    Contemporary

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    KIDS, BULLY

    CHARACTER LIST

    • DIMAH: 17. INSECURE, ASPIRATIONAL, UNDERDOG, MODEST.

    • ARON: 17. THE BOLD ATHLETIC GUY WHO ASKS DIMAH OUT AND CHANGES HER WORLD.

    • JANICE: 17. THE MOST POPULAR GIRL IN SCHOOL WHO BULLIES DIMAH.

    • JACOB: 17. AN ATTRACTIVE, POPULAR GIRL WHO IS FRIENDS WITH DIMAH BUT GOES ON TO RAPE HER.

    • DIMAH'S MOM: 30S-50S. DIMAH'S HARD-WORKING, LOVING, SUPPORTIVE MOTHER.

    • SCHOOL NURSE: 20S-60S. THE HIGH SCHOOL NURSE WHO ANGERS DIMAN BY BELIEVING RUMORS OF HER SEXUAL LIFE.

    Logline

    This novella is about sexual assault, bullying, and having the strength to move forward. Dimah, the main character, experiences abuse in different forms which alter her life tremendously. At the end of the book, she finds her voice and discovers she is stronger than she, and others, think.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 13-17,18-34,35-54,55+

    Target Gender: Female Leaning

    Setting

    Small Town (Unspecified)

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: self-published

    Publisher: Self-Published

    Year Published: 2018

    Starting Description

    This story plays with time. It starts off at Prom a year earlier. Then, it fastforwards a year and the girl we first met looks completely different. The reason for the changes are then revealed slowly as the chapters take us back and forth between past and present until both inevitably collide.

    Ending Description

    At the end of the story, fed up with all the bullying and abuse from people that don't know what happens, Dimah decides to tell the truth. She finds her voice, confront her bullies, and makes the decision to move forward.

    Group Specific

    Information not completed

    Hard Copy Available

    Yes

    ISBN

    978-1733995092

    Mature Audience Themes

    Sexual Abuse

    Plot - Other Elements

    Coming of Age,Happy Ending,Meaningful Message

    Plot - Premise

    Quest,Overcoming Monster/Villain,Internal Journey/Rebirth

    Main Character Details

    Name: Dimah Emerson

    Age: 17

    Gender: Female

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Insecure,Underdog,Selfless,Modest,Aspiring

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    Development Pitch

    Often compared to Jay Asher's "Thirteen Reasons Why," Micol Ostow's "Mean Girls," and Laurie Halse Anderson's "Speak," Not the End collapses time as it tells a story of something too many people are familiar with. Abuse. Whether its sexual abuse or bullying, Dimah Emerson experiences it all as a high school student. The suffering she endures causes her to become a shell of a person. Her light is dimmed as the gossip mill runs furious telling a story none of them have any business telling, because none of them really know. Realistic. In a time where young adult films and series are taking over streaming services, Not the End is a perfect fit for audiences looking for shows and movies they can relate to—even if for heartbreaking reasons. Voice. Not the End, while an incredibly sad tale, focuses on sending a powerful message of strength—of rising from the ashes. In her journey, Dimah is fed up with the rumors, abuse, and lies constantly spread about her and decides to stand up for herself. Resolution. This story focuses on Dimah and watches her start to believe in herself again. In her journey, she finds herself and her voice. She stops blaming herself—which many victims do—and instead starts to move forward. She understands it won’t be easy but she knows that won’t stop her from doing it anyway.

    Genre

    DRAMA, ROMANCE

    Brief

    Dimah is a traditional young girl who wishes to be loved by the man of her dreams. The dream turns into a nightmare when she discovers she was used by this man, and the whole school is now against her. She is bullied, humiliated, but she still finds the strength needed to overcome her multiple difficulties.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    FIRST PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: FAIR

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: FAIR

    Franchise Potential: GOOD

    Pace: GOOD

    Premise: FAIR

    Structure: GOOD

    Theme: GOOD

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    She could add other characters to her profile. Jake, Aaron, Janice, and Dimah's mother are also relevant characters.

    Draw of Story

    It's the story of many young girls who are used by bad intentioned men. Also, the girl's naivety seems reliable, accurate.

    Possible Drawbacks

    The book basically talks about one single plot, and it feels a little bit repetitive. It could explore different stories and conflicts.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    It's a story about the loss of innocence. That very moment when you figure out that life is not exactly like in the movies. The bullying, the sexual assault that the protagonist suffers is also relevant.

    Fanbase Potential

    The author has a trilogy that could become a "Not the..." franchise. Thus it could conquer a large fanbase, but it needs development, especially when we talk about the characters, who could be more distinct.

    Awards Potential

    I see the theme having Awards potential. Bullying is a powerful subject to explore nowadays, but the story itself needs more punch to be remarkable.

    Envisioned Budget

    LOW BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    EIGHTH GRADE - AN INTROVERTED GIRL HAS TO FACE HER FEARS TO BECOME HERSELF; SPEAK - A GIRL WHO HAS TO DEAL WITH VIOLENCE AND BULLYING; DEGRASSI - CANADIAN SERIES THAT PRESENTS THE YOUNG ADULTS' UNIVERSE, AND TALKS ABOUT THE DIFFICULTIES OF GROWING UP.

    What’s New About the Story

    I believe that its originality comes from the way the story is told, in two different timelines that gradually reveal what's going on. Conflicts and dialogue could be more intriguing.

    Lead Characters

    The lead character is a girl like many others, and this is the best thing about her. The story feels more realistic because of Dimah. Usually, teenage characters are written by adults and the writers tend to give them adult characteristics. Here, the protagonist is absolutely naive, romantic, innocent, as a girl of her age usually is.

    Uniqueness of Story

    It's not a rare gem as it is, but it can be improved if turned into an indie movie that deeply explores the bullying subject.

    Possible Formats

    Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series, TV Series - Streaming

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

    Tips for Improvement

    The characters, especially the antagonists, are flat. They are too villainous, too evil, and too unrealistic. They would need balanced characteristics to sound like standard teenagers. The story is narrated by the protagonist, and she would be expected to portray antagonists as evil, but it feels exaggerated. The dialogue is cliché, too simplistic, too expository. The story could be more interesting overall if the lines could better describe the teenage-y universe. Some situations seem too unrealistic, such as the one in which an adult nurse humiliates the protagonist because she had listened to rumors that Dimah was a "slut". It doesn't feel realistic at all, and since this is a crucial turning point, this part should be modified. The fact that Aaron starts following Dimah for absolutely no reason is pointless. He even declares his feelings to her, but the whole backstory is a little uncertain and unconvincing. The story has potential, Dimah is a likable and reliable young girl, the theme is relevant, but the plot, characters, actions, and dialogue need improvement to become a promising young adult piece.

    Brief

    This novella is about sexual assault, bullying, and having the strength to move forward. Dimah, the main character, experiences abuse in different forms which alter her life tremendously. At the end of the book, she finds her voice and discovers she is stronger than she, and others, think.

    What We Liked

    - This tells the tale of the universally recognized danger of being young and trusting. A high school girl thinks a boy is a friend to her, yet he rapes her on prom. Her journey from victim to young strong woman is moving. Nearly anyone can relate and empathize with feeling like an outsider when no one is getting the chance to know the real you. Someone finally does, and this helps her transform her from a timid girl to a confident woman.
    - Film: High school stories have traditionally done well on film. This one has a great story arc and cinematic character arcs for an audience to be involved in. The themes are recognizable. Love and rejection is universal, and this story has the added gravitas of a sexual assault, but with a heroine who takes back control of her life. The lead characters are worthy of empathy, while others deserve scorn.
    - TV: "Not the End" would work well on TV not only because it has big emotions and attractive people. There is conflict from beginning to end, and while the conflict is largely internal, it's externalized by sharp dialogue and would be a draw for young actors. Nearly everyone has been to high school or at least seen depictions of high school in film and TV, so there are themes that are universal and characters that are empathetic as well as others who aren't deserving.
    - Key points: High school; Love; Rejection; Strong characters; Comeuppance

    Synopsis

    Timid and bullied, Dimah's life in high school is one of constant humiliation. For whatever reason, she is the subject of scorn from pretty much the whole school. Her one friend since middle school is Jacob, and even he leaves her for the popular kids. He comes back though, and even asks her to prom.

    She meets him at prom, and he immediately wants to leave. He takes her to a hotel room he's pre-rented for the occasion, and she decides to just go with it. Until she doesn't. Jacob forces her clothes off and doesn't listen to her when she says no. He rapes her.

    Back at school, Aron, a popular football player, takes notice of Dimah. He's nice to her and makes a real effort, despite her defensiveness and insecurity. He defends her in an incident where Janice, a popular girl, tells Dimah to stay away from Aron. During the verbal sparring, Dimah tells the crowd that she was raped by Jacob. Aron, who was holding Janice back, let's her go and she runs off after it is clear the crowd is now on Dimah's side.

    Aron continues to pursue Dimah, and takes her to a special place and they decide they're in a relationship. Dimah confesses everything she has gong through to her caring mother, who is sorrowful and cries. The school year finally comes to an end, and Dimah and Aron drive off together to start at the same college.

    About The Author

    Gianna Gabriela is a small town girl living in the Big Apple. Gianna's always been a writer. Growing up, she would write poems, speeches, and even songs. Still, one day she woke up with a pressing need to write a book. She heeded the desire and now writes stories featuring the brooding heroes you want and the strong heroines you need.