Satan's U.S. War
Submision Type
book
Logline
Satan starts a war with the US and these two p[people fight him the best they can and do very good work. God is well pleased with them and helps them somewhat. Both men fall in love with a women.
Genre
War,Romance,Religious,Action
Short Summary
The war is just starting and two men are pulled into the army. This is their first meeting in the very small village of Alden Illinois. The story tells about what Satan does to go through Canada, then into the United States. Not just one direction but four different direction.
Setting
Mid-west, Illinois, Wisc, Utah, Kentucky, Louisiana, Florida
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Other,Overcoming Monster/Villain
Plot - Other Elements
Happy Ending
Mature Audience Themes
Information not completed
Main Character Details
Name: Mark and Peter
Age: 30 and 32
Gender: Male
Role: Logical
Key Traits: Confident,Flexible,Heartthrob,Heroic,Leader,Masculine,Patriotic,Religious,Skillful,Romantic
Additional Character Details
Name: Peter, sidekick to Mark
Age: 32
Gender: Male
Role: Sidekick
Key Traits: Adventurous,Underdog,Masculine,Charming,Clumsy,Complex,Patriotic,Faithful,Honorable
Additional Character Details
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Additional Character Details
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Genre
WAR, RELIGION, ACTION
Brief
Satan and his forces start a war in the United States. Some try to fight against them but the U.S. is failing. Mark and Peter try to bring down Satan's troops where they can.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: FAIR
Commerciality: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Pace: FAIR
Premise: FAIR
Structure: FAIR
Theme: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes the book profile accurately reflects the book.
Draw of Story
The story drew me in because it is set in the future.
Possible Drawbacks
This book is very black and white. It is Satan against God, good against evil. That can be uninteresting because there is no nuances. The story is formatted incorrectly and the grammar is juvenile, making it difficult to comprehend at times. There is little depth in the story. The world is battling against supernatural beings and that is not explored at all. The use of the word "oriental" to describe Asian people is not welcome. The women could have a bigger role in the action but there primary role is as love interest or home makers.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that Satan has infiltrated all forms of government around the world and activates them to start a war against the U.S. I would not watch this movie as is.
Fanbase Potential
This could have a large fanbase with the Christian community. It is definitely geared towards them as it deals with Satan and God and quotes scriptures from the Bible.
Awards Potential
This does not have awards potential. The grammar and dialogue do not facilitate character development or deepen the world building.
Envisioned Budget
LARGE BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
HUNTER, THE MAN IN HIGH CASTLE, ANGELS, WONDER WOMAN
What’s New About the Story
The story is original because it uses Christian dieties in a modern war. The ideology and technology hasn't changed in 600 years, however. The story doesn't represent the future.
Lead Characters
The lead characters do not stand out. They are very 2 dimensional with their only objective being fighting Satan's troopers and women.
Uniqueness of Story
This is not a gem but could be reworked into a great story. The fight between the ultimate good and evil on a supernatural plane would translate well on screen. It needs to be palatable for a wider audience than it is. This will appeal to Christians and more left leaning ones.
Possible Formats
Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, Film - Indie
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
This story has potential. The final battle between God and Satan after Satan takes over the U.S. could be interesting, especially because of the U.S. complex history with religion. The presentation that God and Satan are real would be an interesting topic to explore. And that the battle is playing out with mankind would work well on screen. There needs to be more open minded characters. There were some degrading labels used and some disparaging comments about immigrants. The story is set in 2666 and the world would have changed in ideology.