Drop Dead Gorgeous

Donald Allen Kirch

Book Cover

GENRE

EROTICA HORROR CRIME DETECTIVE DRAMA

    Core Theme

    REVENGE

    TIME PERIOD

    Contemporary

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    TALES FROM THE CRYPT

    CHARACTER LIST

    EVE: 30. LEAD. GORGEOUS AND MALICIOUS.

    STEVE: 30S. EVE BEFORE THE TRANSFORMATION.

    ANNABELLE: 30S. STEVE'S WIFE.

    RAY: 30S. EVE'S CAPTIVE.

    CISCO: 30S. ANOTHER OF ANNABELLE'S VICTIMS.

    DETECTIVE WELLS: 50S. A DETECTIVE INVESTIGATING RAY'S DISAPPEARANCE.

    Logline

    Drop Dead Gorgeous is the horrifying story of a man who cheats on his wife, causing her to go insane with rage. Locking him in her Government Laboratory, she turns him into "The Perfect Woman" as a form of punishment. He...SHE...will never cheat on any woman, ever again!

    Target Audiences

    Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

    Target Gender: Universal

    Setting

    Phoenix, Arizona and Addison, Kansas

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: self-published

    Publisher: Why Not??? Publications

    Year Published: 2020

    Starting Description

    Our kidnapped victim "Ray" wakes tied and duct taped in the basement of an unknown building. He meets his captive - a "Drop Dead Gorgeous" woman named "Eve Doe." She seduces him, and tells him a story... A story where Eve was once a man, caught cheating, and turned into a woman by an insane wife.

    Ending Description

    Eve takes her captive's life and goes in search of her "baby" - The detective assigned to look for "ray" is given an FBI agent as a partner, and they go in pursuit of her.

    Group Specific

    Information not completed

    Hard Copy Available

    Yes

    ISBN

    979-8561992766

    Mature Audience Themes

    Language/Profanity, Nudity, Sexual Abuse,Extreme Violence, Language/Profanity,Nudity

    Plot - Other Elements

    Twist,Gender Change Male to Female

    Plot - Premise

    Internal Journey/Rebirth,,Overcoming Monster/Villain

    Main Character Details

    Name: Eve Doe (Steve Kane)

    Age: 29

    Gender: Female

    Role: Antagonist

    Key Traits: Charming, Confident, Desperate, Empathetic, Seductive, Sexy, Villainous, Beautiful, Blunt, Complex, Crazy, Engaging,Sexy,Romantic,Seductive,Secretive,Badass,Aggressive,Complex,Crazy

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Steve Kane (Eve as a male)

    Age: Appears over 30 (Age is a mystery due to his/her condition)

    Gender: Male

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Engaging,Greedy,Heartthrob,Masculine,Sexy,Romantic,Seductive

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Ray Hoie

    Age: 25

    Gender: Male

    Role: antagonist

    Key Traits: Lone Wolf, Underdog, Clumsy, Desperate, Empathetic, Insecure,Insecure,Secretive,Underdog

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Annabelle

    Age: 41

    Gender: Female

    Role: antagonist

    Key Traits: Beautiful, Educated, Badass, Desperate, Manipulative, Sophisticated, Crazy, Skillful, Insecure, Visionary, Blunt, Complex, Confident, Engaging,Complex,Crazy,Desperate,Engaging,Educated,Seductive,Romantic,Power Hungry,Sexy,Narcisstic

    Development Pitch

    Drop Dead Gorgeous is, basically, Fifty Shades of Gray meets Tales From the Crypt. A man is trapped in a basement with the woman of his dreams, bound with duct tape, and has no idea where he is. Opening up like a scene from an episode of Criminal Minds, the story switches to the most bizarre, not unlike the most frightening episode of the Twilight Zone. Eve Doe was once a man named Steve. In this story we watch with fascination as this wife-cheating man turns into a "Drop Dead Gorgeous" woman, made possible by his wife, Annabelle - who goes quite crazy with grief. The special effects ALONE should be a frightful trip into a horror experience unlike any other.

    Genre

    SUSPENSE, THRILLER, LGBT, MATURE AUDIENCE, FANTASY, DRAMA

    Brief

    Man wakes up chained in a basement. His captor is Eve, a woman who used to be Steve before he cheated on his mad scientist wife. Eve kills the man and escapes uncaught.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    THIRD PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: EXCELLENT

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: FAIR

    Franchise Potential: GOOD

    Pace: GOOD

    Premise: FAIR

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    The book is more complex than the pure smut that the profile sells it as.

    Draw of Story

    I liked the pulpy cover and the intro scene where Ray realizes his captor is a woman.

    Possible Drawbacks

    The book became a little transphobic at parts, and it became difficult to sympathize with Eve when she killed Cisco.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    A man turns into a woman and goes on a murderous revenge spree.

    Fanbase Potential

    Not really. Maybe a niche audience.

    Awards Potential

    No; this would be considered too controversial in a bad way.

    Envisioned Budget

    LOW BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    TALES FROM THE CRYPT

    What’s New About the Story

    It would be more unique if they explained why Eve was now so dedicated to kidnapping and killing men. It would also be original to have a book where transgenderism wasn't the punishment or impetus for murder.

    Lead Characters

    Eve is impulsive and seductive, but also wild and murderous.

    Uniqueness of Story

    This is well-written, but the story needs a lot of work. There are minor motivational plot holes and there does not seem to be a strong central theme at all. Also, this book implies a lot about female sexuality and seems ill informed in some aspects.

    Possible Formats

    Film - Indie

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    There are a lot of issues with the story's basis that will prevent any marketing as it will be seen as transphobic, and the book's premise and story do little to counter that notion.

    Tips for Improvement

    I would like Eve to have stronger motivations for kidnapping random men and I would like her to be less of a caricature of a horny woman.

    Brief

    When a man cheats on his wife, her rage turns her insane. Locking him in her Government Laboratory, she turns him into "The Perfect Woman" as a form of punishment. Soon, "The Perfect Woman" looks for revenge of her own.

    What We Liked

    This is a unique horror story.

    Film: As a film, this would be similar to Fifty Shades of Gray--audiences would go for the turn on.

    TV: As a television show, this would be a lurid fantasy on a major streaming platform and viewers would tune in each week to see more of the mystery unfold.

    Key points: Sexy; Scary; Original; Multiple lead roles; Well-written

    Synopsis

    Ray Hoie wakes up locked to a chair in a basement. He sees corpses of other men and soon, his captor comes to greet him--it's a woman, and it's the most beautiful woman he has ever seen. He tells her that his girlfriend, Tammy, will be looking for him, but his captor assures him that she picks her victims carefully and no one will come looking for him. She introduces herself as Eve and begins to seduce Ray, but is quickly and easily upset by small things he says. She tells him that she will tell him a story and then decide his fate.

    Eve was once a man named Steve, a handsome salesman who met Annabelle. Annabelle and Steve fell in love and got married. Annabelle was a scientist working on nanotechnology that could turn a goat into a cat. Right after their honeymoon, Annabelle devoted herself to her work and, for two years, she and Steve didn't have sex and hardly saw each other. Steve tried to remain faithful, but soon began an affair with a stripper named Tana. Annabelle caught Steve having sex with Tana and hit Tana over the head with a poker. Annabelle announced to Steve that her work was complete, but that she had remained faithful to him and would get her revenge. Steve soon found himself drugged and tied to an operating table in the basement. Annabelle injected Steve with nanos to change his DNA--she had already used them on herself to augment her figure and Steve worried that they had made her insane. Annabelle successfully used the nanos and Tana's corpse's body parts to turn Steve into Eve, a woman, complete with female hormones and emotions. One of Annabelle's male slaves, Cisco, was ordered by Annabelle to rape Eve repeatedly, and due to Annabelle's genetic modifications on Eve, Eve was made to feel hornier than others. Annabelle had saved some of Steve's sperm and used it to impregnate Eve. During her pregnancy, Annabelle had Eve in a medically induced coma. One night, Cisco woke Eve from her coma to try and save her, but she was too pregnant and Annabelle caught them before they could escape. Eventually, Eve gave birth to the baby, but Annabelle quickly took him away and sold him to the highest bidder. Enraged, Eve and Cisco managed to subdue Annabelle and tie her to her own operating table and use her technology to turn her body into a gelatinous blob like Steve had been. Eve and Cisco escaped, only for Eve to murder Cisco in revenge for raping her.

    Ray is stunned that the beautiful woman in front of him was once a man, but after Eve seduces him, he comes to realize he loves her and tells her so. The issue is that Annabelle programmed Eve so that she would kill any man that said he loved her. Meanwhile, Detective Wells is investigating the disappearance of Ray Hoie, and listens to a voicemail that tells him where to go. He meets Ray and Eve at the church Eve had picked out, only for Eve to attack the detective and kill Ray. The book ends as another detective investigating Eve waits by Detective Wells' bedside in the hospital, hoping for him to awaken from his coma.

    About The Author

    DONALD ALLEN KIRCH lives in The United States of America. He is an avid reader of history, Sherlock Holmes Mysteries, the paranormal, and is a "hardcore" Doctor Who fan.