Finding Jean Ratelle

Donald Martin donpaulmartin@aol.com 2901015920685

BIOGRAPHICAL COMEDY DRAMA MEMOIR FANTASY ROMANCE

2000s,Contemporary

Don Paul Martin

Logline

Snakebit from a lifetime of loss, a man confronts the ghosts of his past in a familiar setting: the imaginary version of a bar in which he's become lost. The story he writes for a continuing education class not only pits him against his demons, but also his heroes and loved ones.

Genre

Biographical,Comedy,Drama,Memoir,Fantasy,Romance

Short Summary

Having waited until the last night to complete an assignment for class, Ray takes his story to an imaginary version of his favorite escape: a bar filled with his exes, his abusers, and perhaps worst of all, his writing professor.


Forced by his mind's representations of his best friends to re-live the worst moments of his life -- and thus to face his true demon -- Ray must say goodbye to the two central figures of his life, and choose to keep or let go of one more.

Setting

New York City

Based on a True Story

Yes

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain,Internal Journey/Rebirth,Quest

Plot - Other Elements

Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions,Twist,Happy Ending,Coming of Age

Mature Audience Themes

Language/Profanity,Sexual Abuse

Main Character Details

Name: Ray Sarazen

Age: Early 30s

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Empathetic,Aspiring,Insecure,Funny,Underdog,Selfless,Complex

Additional Character Details

Name: Greg

Age: Early 30s

Gender: Male

Role: Logical

Key Traits: Funny,Blunt,Charming,Sarcastic,Unapologetic,Faithful

Additional Character Details

Name: Nicholas

Age: Late 40s

Gender: Male

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Educated,Charming,Funny,Aggressive,Sophisticated

Additional Character Details

Name: Michelle

Age: Late 20s

Gender: Female

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Faithful,Selfless,Sexy

Development Pitch

Written for the stage, I've always imagined Finding Jean Ratelle as being even better presented on film. Set almost entirely in one room - a bar in New York City - the director would be free to move the "scenes" which take place there to other locales or keep Ray's memories in the bar as well, with effects enhanced by other devices other than just lighting and simple props. The main goal is the emotional roller coaster ride release of the audience.

About The Author

Don Paul Martin was born in Lowell, Massachusetts and raised in southern New Hampshire. He began writing epic, bible-length stories in first grade, and having published the poetry of his youth, has enjoyed seeing a long list of his short plays performed across the United States. He and his wife Jessica are ruled mercilessly by their son, Jacoby, somewhere in the Lakes Region of their beloved Granite State.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54

Target Gender: Universal,Male Leaning

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Hard Copy Available

No

WGA Number

Information not completed

Genre

DRAMA, COMEDY, MATURE AUDIENCE

Brief

A man regularly visits an imaginary bar where all the patrons and bartender are people from his real life that represent his hopes, dreams and fears

Overall Rating

EXCELLENT

Point of View

SCRIPT

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: EXCELLENT

Characterization: EXCELLENT

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: GOOD

Premise: EXCELLENT

Structure: GOOD

Theme: EXCELLENT

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes, but it's vague.

Draw of Story

It's a intriguing premise.

Possible Drawbacks

No. It was an interesting read.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

Can a man’s imaginary life point his real life in the right direction?

Fanbase Potential

No. This doesn't fit neatly into a genre so there would not be a built in fanbase.

Awards Potential

There are a lot of places an actor could shine in this so there could be potential for acting awards.

Envisioned Budget

LOW BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

BARFLY, THE TWILIGHT ZONE, TREES LOUNGE

What’s New About the Story

It's an interesting take on introspection. It needs to be more expanded for a full length feature film.

Lead Characters

They are smart and authentic.

Uniqueness of Story

It's pretty unique.

Possible Formats

Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, Film - Indie

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

With some reimagining (more visual elements and life scenarios) and more characters it might make a decent TV series on a cable or streaming network.

Logline

Snakebit from a lifetime of loss, a man confronts the ghosts of his past in a familiar setting: the imaginary version of a bar in which he's become lost. The story he writes for a continuing education class not only pits him against his demons, but also his heroes and loved ones.

Short Summary

Having waited until the last night to complete an assignment for class, Ray takes his story to an imaginary version of his favorite escape: a bar filled with his exes, his abusers, and perhaps worst of all, his writing professor.


Forced by his mind's representations of his best friends to re-live the worst moments of his life -- and thus to face his true demon -- Ray must say goodbye to the two central figures of his life, and choose to keep or let go of one more.

FEEDBACK

Written for the stage, I've always imagined Finding Jean Ratelle as being even better presented on film. Set almost entirely in one room - a bar in New York City - the director would be free to move the "scenes" which take place there to other locales or keep Ray's memories in the bar as well, with effects enhanced by other devices other than just lighting and simple props. The main goal is the emotional roller coaster ride release of the audience.

About The Author

Don Paul Martin was born in Lowell, Massachusetts and raised in southern New Hampshire. He began writing epic, bible-length stories in first grade, and having published the poetry of his youth, has enjoyed seeing a long list of his short plays performed across the United States. He and his wife Jessica are ruled mercilessly by their son, Jacoby, somewhere in the Lakes Region of their beloved Granite State.

Mature Audience Themes

Language/Profanity,Sexual Abuse

Characters

Main Character

Name: Ray Sarazen

Age: Early 30s

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Empathetic,Aspiring,Insecure,Funny,Underdog,Selfless,Complex

Character 1

Name: Greg

Age: Early 30s

Gender: Male

Role: Logical

Key Traits: Funny,Blunt,Charming,Sarcastic,Unapologetic,Faithful

Character 2

Name: Nicholas

Age: Late 40s

Gender: Male

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Educated,Charming,Funny,Aggressive,Sophisticated

Character 3

Name: Michelle

Age: Late 20s

Gender: Female

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Faithful,Selfless,Sexy