THE GIRLFRIEND MOM (a memoir)

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MEMOIR FUNNY COMEDY FAMILY

Contemporary

Dani Alpert

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Logline

Dani fell in love with a divorced father of two and reluctantly became a quasi-parent. Then, when she couldn’t imagine life without the kids, she's dumped for a natural blonde. Dani won’t be ignored, love won’t be denied, and she and the kids won't break up.

Genre

Memoir,Funny,Comedy,Family

Short Summary

"You're not very maternal," my boyfriend Julian said, backing out of his ex-wife's driveway, after dropping off his kids. I stayed in the car and waved good-bye. I thought, "Maybe the next time we have the kids, I'll whip out a boob and breastfeed them. Would that be maternal enough for you?"


The ex-wife and I are friends, bonded over shared experiences, and my deep love for her kids. Her daughter and I are about to embark on a road trip and I don't know what to expect. What if she tells me to fuck-off while we're barreling down some back road in Yachats, Oregon? To be continued...

Setting

New York, New Jersey, Dubai

Based on a True Story

Yes

Plot - Premise

Internal Journey/Rebirth,Other

Plot - Other Elements

Coming of Age,Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions

Mature Audience Themes

Language/Profanity

Main Character Details

Name: Dani

Age: 40's

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Clumsy,Complex,Sexy,Empathetic,Selfless,Engaging,Faithful,Funny,Romantic,Sarcastic,Educated,Strong Moral Code,Insecure,Unapologetic,Naive

Additional Character Details

Name: Julian

Age: 40's

Gender: Male

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Masculine,Aggressive,Narcisstic,Charming,Confident,Sexy,Blunt,Romantic,Educated,Manipulative,Funny

Additional Character Details

Name: Nicole

Age: 18

Gender: Female

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Badass,Confident,Blunt,Outspoken,Funny,Insecure

Additional Character Details

Name: Nicole

Age: 13

Gender: Female

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Badass,Charming,Outspoken,Funny,Insecure

Development Pitch

About The Author

Dani’s first headshot was her mug shot taken after getting arrested for tagging in the New York suburban town where she grew up. She’s been trying to reclaim those glory days ever since. An NYU Film School and American Film Institute graduate, Dani spent twenty-five plus years working in Hollywood. Her film, A Lifetime Intimate Portrait . . .of a Complete Unknown, was a festival breakout. Her writing appears in various outlets, and she’s spoken at lifestyle conferences and been interviewed on nationally syndicated radio shows. Dani boasts placing second (in the mature category) in the 2014 US National Pole Championships. Pictures provided upon request.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Female Leaning

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Little Ricky Books

Year Published: 2020

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

978-1-7345752-0-0 (May 2020)

Genre

ROMANCE, DRAMA

Brief

The story of a modern woman who used to put career first, and suddenly saw herself having a solid relationship with her ex's kids.

Overall Rating

GOOD

Point of View

FIRST PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: GOOD

Premise: GOOD

Structure: GOOD

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

Not completely. There are two Nicoles there, and I believe the author should add Marie to the profile.

Draw of Story

The writing style. It's engaging and easy to follow. The protagonist is also interesting, and her voice in the first person helps us to connect with her.

Possible Drawbacks

It's long and only based on the same narrative line: Dani builds a relationship with her ex's kids. I understand that developing these connections takes time, but I still believe it could have subplots.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

This idea that, sometimes, you plan your life in your own head, but fate comes and changes it all. And in the end, these changes are positive.

Fanbase Potential

I don't say a large fanbase, but the protagonist is somewhat inspiring.

Awards Potential

If the story focuses more on the beautiful and unexpected relationship between ex-girlfriend and the kids, I believe it could become an attractive drama.

Envisioned Budget

LOW BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

STEPMOM: THE RELATIONSHIP BETWEEN THE NEW GIRLFRIEND, THE EX-WIFE, AND THE KIDS; THE SOUND OF MUSIC: THE GOVERNESS OF THE HOUSE OF A WIDOWED CAPTAIN, WITH SEVEN CHILDREN, WHO BRINGS LOVE AND LIGHT TO THEIR HOME.

What’s New About the Story

I believe the author could intensify the drama. The conflicts are already there, but, sometimes, the story is told sarcastically (which is acceptable since it carries the protagonist's voice).

Lead Characters

The protagonist is very honest with the audience. We know her fears, struggles, and goals from the very beginning.

Uniqueness of Story

Not a rare gem. The plot of the woman struggling to choose between a career and kids, between having her own life, independently, or following her heart and staying by the kids' side is very powerful. I think this plot should be developed with more intensity though.

Possible Formats

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series

Analyst Recommendation

CONSIDER

Justification

The style is efficient, and the narrative is powerful. It touches the audience who can connect easily to the protagonist's struggles and doubts. This woman in her 40's feeling forced by society to become a mother, and her own struggle to reach high levels in her career and still feel fulfilled as a woman is very powerful and credible. It's a type of story that can sound clichè, but it's still very important to be told. It talks directly to a lot of women who still feel forced to make decisions. The best part of this narrative, though, is the fact that the storyteller didn't try to force a happy ending full of expected resolutions. In the end, the protagonist stays by the kids' side, it doesn't matter if they are her ex-boyfriend's kids. If people believe she should have her own kids. It's her choice, it makes her happy, and this is what makes the story more unique. The writing style is intimist, makes us feel connected to the protagonist, and the pace is effective. The story has some problems to be fixed. I believe the emotions could be more intense, the conflicts more punchy. Since the protagonist tells the story more amusingly, it loses a little of the powerful drama it could present.