"WHAT ARE YOUR TREASURES? My Miraculous Journey through Heaven: What I Discovered About How God Works Will Revolutionize Your Life."

Cindy Barry Strobel

Book Cover

GENRE

MELODRAMA MEMOIR ROMANCE DRAMA ADVENTURE BIOGRAPHICAL FAMILY MYSTERY YOUNG ADULT CHILDREN'S RELIGIOUS

    Core Theme

    SURVIVING AND RECOVERING FROM HARDSHIPS, MAINTAINING FAITH, CHOOSING LOVE

    TIME PERIOD

    20th Century (multiple decades),Other,Future

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    HEAVEN IS FOR REAL

    CHARACTER LIST

    CINDY: 19-60 THROUGHOUT STORY. LEAD. RELIGIOUS CHRISTIAN WHO IS LOVING.

    DAVID: 20S-60S THROUGHOUT STORY. ARCHITECT AND CINDY'S HUSBAND.

    JESUS CHRIST: CINDY'S SPIRITUAL GUIDE WHO SHE CONVERSES WITH IN HEAVEN.

    PRINCE CHARMING: 20S-60S THROUGHOUT STORY. DOCTOR WHO CINDY MEETS BEFORE HE GOES TO THE ARMY AND THEN REUNITES WITH 40 YEARS LATER WHEN SHE IS GETTING SURGERY.

    GRANDFATHER: OLD MAN. CINDY SEES HIM IN HEAVEN.

    CATHY: EARLY 20S. CINDY'S FRIEND IN COLLEGE WHO LOOKS OUT FOR HER AFTER HER ACCIDENT.

    Logline

    Are you afraid of death? Turning tragedies into treasures, hearing the true story of twists and turns, miracles, jewels, joining’s and recollections as a deformed, Texas Cinderella makes medical history from her bizarre NDE. There are no coincidences in your life journey.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 35-54,55+,18-34,7-12

    Target Gender: Universal

    Setting

    Small Country towns in Texas, Dallas,Heaven

    Based on a True Story

    Yes

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: with a Publisher

    Publisher: WestBOW Press

    Year Published: 2015

    Starting Description

    1972 - Fall evening- Car against a fence, lights dimly glowing. Slumped down, below a steering wheel, a College-bound Texas Cinderella lies, unaware of her physical state, her body, shades of black-blue. Her hopes- dreams erasing like a tornado had blown through it leaving her with debris

    Ending Description

    I pursue God’s promise of treasures. Trusting in His will, the long-awaited treasures are unearthed. The treasured seeds develop into the perfect diamonds in God’s eyes. Jesus is the author of all stories; therefore, there is no end. No one knows how the next chapter of our life ends. Be a Treasure

    Group Specific

    People who are in hospice. NDE interest groups People who fear death

    Hard Copy Available

    No

    ISBN

    ISBN: 978-1-5127-0893-6 (hc)

    Mature Audience Themes

    Information not completed

    Plot - Other Elements

    Meaningful Message, Twist, Philosophical Questions, Happy Ending, Coming of Age,spiritual,Twist,Philosophical Questions,Happy Ending,Coming of Age

    Plot - Premise

    Internal Journey/Rebirth,,Overcoming Monster/Villain,Voyage and Return,Tragedy,Quest

    Main Character Details

    Name: Cindy Barry Strobel / Texas Cinderella

    Age: Birth through 60

    Gender: Female

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Insecure, Selfless, Empathetic, Extraordinary Powers and Abilities, Flexible, Complex, Engaging, Funny, Romantic, Obedient, Modest, Adventurous, Perseverance, Beautiful, Charming, Naive, Faithful, Aspiring, Strong Moral Code, Religious, Sexy, Decisive, Educated, Outspoken, Gracious, Honorable, Heartthrob, Skillful, Confident,Adventurous,Charming,Aspiring,Clumsy,Complex,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Heartthrob,Educated,Naive,Strong Moral Code,Romantic,Funny,Outspoken,Selfless,Religious,Obedient,Modest,Sarcastic,Confident

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Texas Cinderella/Scarecrow Brain

    Age: 19 to present age 60

    Gender: Female

    Role: Antagonist

    Key Traits: Secretive, Unapologetic, Funny, Adventurous, Manipulative, Sarcastic, Complex, Faithful, Lone Wolf, Outspoken, Perseverance, Aggressive, Aspiring, Engaging, Religious, Clumsy, Desperate, Flexible,Funny,Adventurous,Aspiring,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Heartthrob,Educated,Naive,Religious,Blunt,Romantic,Sarcastic,Manipulative

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Jesus

    Age: 30

    Gender: Male

    Role: mentor

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Religious,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Heartthrob,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Funny,Selfless,Visionary,Secretive,Sophisticated,Strong Moral Code,Unapologetic,Leader,Flexible,Outspoken,Modest,Masculine,Obedient,Sexy,Blunt

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Prince Charming (Chris Himmellheber)

    Age: 18 through 60

    Gender: Male

    Role: emotional

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Complex,Confident,Masculine,Modest,Sexy,Decisive,Religious,Empathetic,Selfless,Engaging,Outspoken,Faithful,Skillful,Funny,Flexible,Gracious,Visionary,Romantic,Heartthrob,Heroic,Secretive,Educated,Honorable,Strong Moral Code,Leader

    Genre

    ROMANCE, RELIGION, DRAMA

    Brief

    Young woman suffers from Carbon Monoxide poisoning while driving her car and has a near death experience. She goes to Heaven and asks Jesus if she can have more time on Earth to spread love. This is granted, and she struggles through a challenging physical and mental recovery from her accident, but she eventually finds the love she wanted in her husband and her two sons.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    FIRST PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: FAIR

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: FAIR

    Franchise Potential: FAIR

    Pace: FAIR

    Premise: FAIR

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    The short summary is a bit wordy and convoluted. Also, listing Cindy as two different characters is confusing to people looking at the profile; just list her as one character, and greatly shorten the number of adjectives used in the character descriptions. The About the Author can also be more concise.

    Draw of Story

    The premise is very intriguing – the author claims to have died, gone to Heaven, conversed with Jesus, and then been resuscitated. She writes with fervent belief, and this moment has had a lasting impact on her life and the lives of those around her. Cindy undergoes a really traumatizing event and has a very challenging recovery; she struggles to maintain control of her body, loses memories, and yet she still has such strong faith.

    Possible Drawbacks

    There were parts of the book that felt too preachy. I think the story should speak for itself and that directly telling the reader over and over again that they need to embrace Jesus will not succeed in making them want to do so. There were also many phrases that were repeated from chapter to chapter, specifically phrases about things not being how they should be or that sometimes in life you have to go back to the beginning to understand the end. Overall, the most exciting, enticing parts of this book are the parts when we see Cindy doing things and living. The parts where she gets too introspective for extended periods of time and she rambles on about religious beliefs for very long periods of time slow down the pacing tremendously and can definitely be more concise.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    Cindy's description of dying and going to Heaven is the most intriguing part of this story and the part that would draw audiences in. I think if this were turned into a movie, the scenes where she goes to Heaven, converses with Jesus, sees her blue room, waits while he speaks with God, etc., would all definitely be the most interesting. However, most viewers would want to watch her life story unfold, not hear her explicitly demanding that they accept Jesus into their own lives, so I think a less explicit approach should be taken if this is adapted.

    Fanbase Potential

    No, this would have a very specific fanbase if it were to be adapted – religious Christian people who believe in Jesus. I do not see this story appealing very much as it is now to people who do not hold the same or similar religious beliefs to the author.

    Awards Potential

    No, this story would not have Awards potential if adapted because it would not appeal to a wide enough audience.

    Envisioned Budget

    MEDIUM BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    HEAVEN IS FOR REAL

    What’s New About the Story

    To be more unique, this story could show more of Cindy's life. She has an incredible life story and overcame some really hard moments, and I think showing more of her life and the people around her as well as her slow recovery process could add more emotional complexity to the story. Prince Charming is also a unique character, but he could be utilized better. At the end Cindy believes he is pretending now to know who she is – dig deeper into this and let his character be more active.

    Lead Characters

    Cindy has a wild story, and her fervent belief and ability to maintain faith through such hardship makes her a stand out lead. She wants to spread love and receive love, which is a very human desire, and she is constantly questioning why things happen while believing that there is a reason for everything. Her determination to achieve her dreams is inspiring.

    Uniqueness of Story

    The story at the crux of this book is very inspiring and can positively impact many people. However, a lot of that story is hidden away between pages and pages that attempt to convince readers to believe in Jesus and accept him into their lives. This is an incredible story that should speak for itself; instead of pounding the reader over the head with Bible verses and telling them that they should be more religious, the writer should focus on showing how her experience transformed her own faith. She overcame a lot to be where she is today and should focus on those struggles instead.

    Possible Formats

    Film - Indie, Unscripted

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    The concept can appeal to a small but specific type of viewer, and the story itself could appeal to more people if it wasn't hidden between chunks of pages trying to convert the reader. Again, I think that the writer's best approach would be to let her story mainly speak for itself, since she has had some incredible experiences and overcame tremendous hardship. There are also some places where the writing is very redundant, and this results in the pacing being too slow at times. There should be more focus on action and less on introspection to improve the structure.

    Tips for Improvement

    The writing would need to be less preachy, and the story would need to speak for itself. If this event was enough of a reason for her to be 100% convinced that Jesus is always with her and that everything happens for a reason, she should convince the reader of that by showing them details of her life and the signs she saw from Him, not by telling them over and over to believe like she does. We would also need to see more of her recovery process, since that is the truly inspirational part of this story. She lost her math and grammar skills, couldn't drive or write, permanently lost memories, and yet she still found the love she wanted and had two loving sons and lived in her dream house on the water. Those elements of the story should be the focus.

    Brief

    After dying from Carbon Monoxide poisoning in her car, Cindy goes to Heaven, where she converses with Jesus. Jesus agrees to give her more time on Earth, and she is resuscitated. Cindy struggles to recover from her accident – she can no longer write or drive, she has forgotten how to use grammar and do math, and she has lost many memories. But she holds onto her faith in Jesus and works to achieve her dreams and spread love.

    What We Liked

    This is an inspirational, moving story that will restore faith in those who are having doubts. Cindy is a loving Christian woman who overcomes tremendous hardship to achieve her dreams and make the most of her time on Earth. The lessons about overcoming challenges, supporting friends and family, loving each other, and maintaining faith will resonate with religious Christian viewers, and it is impossible not to empathize with Cindy. It is a story that will provide peace to those who fear death or who have recently lost loved ones and need to cope.

    Film: Viewers who want to see a concise, inspirational story that will transform their conception of life and death would love to see this film. The themes of overcoming challenges, maintaining faith through hardships, and the importance of memory and love are all ones that would resonate with audiences. The inciting incident – Cindy's near death experience – would keep viewers hooked, and the structure of the book would be easily adaptable to the big screen.

    TV: This story spans Cindy's life, beginning with her birth (and her pointy baby head) and ending with her in the present day in her 60s. There is a lot of great content in her life that could lead to a series – her childhood, her accident, her recovery, her college experience, her marriage, her children, her second accident, and her chance encounter with Prince Charming. Developing this inspirational story for TV could allow viewers the chance to see Cindy's life in detail and will allow her message about maintaining faith to resonate strongly.

    Key points:
    Active, likable female lead; Near Death Experience; Close-knit family; Based on a true story; Powerful themes.

    Synopsis

    CINDY BARRY wrote this story about her own life. She grows up as the youngest of four children in a safe, small town in Texas with loving parents. Her whole family is Christian and religious. In 1972, she is 19 years old and doing very poorly in college. Her parents switch her from a large university to a smaller one, and because her roommate CATHY is planning on becoming a healthcare worker, Cindy is inspired and wants to pursue that career path as well. As she is driving home for Thanksgiving, her car gets stuck on a rock, and her friends help her move it off. When she is back at college, she starts getting terrible headaches. One night driving back to her apartment, she falls asleep at the wheel as she is pulling into the parking lot of her building, and her car crashes into a fence. She remains unconscious, suffering from carbon monoxide poisoning. A security guard approaches the car and rescues her, resuscitating her with CPR. An ambulance takes Cindy away, and doctors realize that Cindy has incredibly high levels of carbon monoxide in her body and do their best to treat her.

    Cindy writes about how she died that night and went to Heaven. She describes Heaven as a lush, wonderful place, and she sees her GRANDFATHER, who has passed away. Jesus tells her that he wasn’t expecting her so soon, and she asks him to let her go back down to Earth and spread love; she wants to have a husband and children. He lets her go, but not before she sees her initials being inscribed in the Book of Life as C.S., though her initials are C.B. She wakes up tied to a hospital bed and is told that she is lucky to be alive. Miraculously, the poisoning only affected one side of her brain, the memory side.

    She stays in the hospital being treated for months, and when she goes home, she struggles to regain her memories. The first year of recovery is exceptionally challenging – she is in and out of hospitals, has huge gaps in her memory, frequently acts out of character because of the brain damage, and is in pain. But she remembers that Jesus is with her, and she maintains her faith.

    After she is mostly recovered, Cindy goes back to college with Cathy. One night, they all go out to celebrate a friend’s birthday, and Cindy gets unintentionally drunk. She wakes up naked in a man’s bed and is horrified, but he is kind and tells her that her friends showered her after she vomited last night and left her sleeping in his bed. Cindy is touched by this man’s kindness, and she starts referring to him as PRINCE CHARMING. They get to know each other, and she helps him decide to join the army so that he can go to college for free and become a doctor. She is upset when he leaves for the army, since she feels like they might be meant to be, but she channels the kindness and love she felt from him into all of her future relationships. Shortly after, she meets DAVID, who is working as a carpenter to put himself through college so he can become an architect, and he treats her like a princess. They get married and her initials become C.S., just how they were written in the Book of Life.

    Cindy has her son WILL and then her son LOGAN two years later. She and her husband build their dream home on a lake. She has a terrible fall one day but manages only to shatter her heel bones and not break other bones, which is a miracle. She regains her ability to walk and do almost everything after a recovery period that lasts for several months.

    After her children have grown up and she has been married to David for over 30 years, things start getting worse. David isn’t showing her affection or putting work into the marriage anymore, and it is deeply hurting her. She tries to fix things but feels like the effort is very one-sided. She comes into some money after her parents pass away and buys a new car and schedules a doctor’s appointment for herself to get plastic surgery. To her surprise, the doctor who owns the office she goes to is Prince Charming, who she hasn’t seen in 40 years. She is crushed when he denies knowing who she is. She is certain that he remembers her and is lying, but she isn’t sure why. Then she remembers that they may have met up after his army service, but her memory problems are still an issue, and she can’t remember the details except that she saw him by chance at a Polka Dance in 1977. Prince Charming performs plastic surgery on her, and she feels and looks younger after. Years later, she is baptized again, since she cannot remember the first time she was baptized (or if she even was baptized). She continues to live her life knowing she has lots of love in it and that Jesus is by her side, getting her through it all.

    About The Author

    Cindy Barry Strobel had a near death experience – she suffered from carbon monoxide poisoning, went to Heaven, saw her dead Grandfather, conversed with Jesus, and then asked Jesus if she could return to Earth and continue to spread love. This book documents the inspirational story of this woman who maintained faith through the darkest of times and overcame tremendous hardships.