Mommy, I Don't Want To
Logline
Mommy I Don’t Want To tells a twisted tale of a conflicted young man that goes on a mysterious crime spree that lasts from the mid-seventies till the mid-eighties.
Genre
Suspense/Thriller,Crime
Short Summary
The Sunshine State, Marcavillian County. 1977. Jay is jogging along the bike trail next to the canal. He makes his way through a dark underpass that leads to a privately owned field where properties are being built. While strolling along the field and smoking a cigarette he begins to fantasize...
Jay is definitely disturbed, but he's able to mask his psychotic tendencies well enough to function in everyday society, and the novel charts his beginnings to the point where he's older, established, and has seemingly given up his ways...or has he?
Setting
Sunshine State during the 1970s
Based on a True Story
Yes
Plot - Premise
Internal Journey/Rebirth,Tragedy,Other,Overcoming Monster/Villain
Plot - Other Elements
Philosophical Questions,Twist,Other
Mature Audience Themes
Extreme Violence,Sexual Abuse, Language/Profanity,Nudity
Main Character Details
Name: Jay
Age: 20
Gender: Male
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Villainous,Crazy,Confident,Complex,Decisive,Skillful
Additional Character Details
Name: Detective Remming
Age: 45
Gender: Male
Role: Antagonist
Key Traits: Faithful,Blunt,Honorable,Heroic
Additional Character Details
Name: Mouse
Age: 18
Gender: Female
Role: emotional
Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Complex,Engaging,Naive
Additional Character Details
Name: The mother
Age: 43
Gender: Female
Role: mentor
Key Traits: Educated,Decisive,Outspoken
Development Pitch
Tagline: Driven by a force he didn’t understand, he would have to strike again. It is 1975, in a quiet suburb of the Sunshine State. Jay is a seemingly normal twenty-year-old who is hiding a dark secret. His secret hobby is prowling through yards in the dead of night. Struggling with his inner demons, he has to find a way to control his urges that will eventually lead him to more sinister crimes involving rape and murder. Get caught and face life in prison, or go out with a bang by his own hands. Through training he receives as a child by his father and uncle, both military men, Jay is no stranger to infiltration and escape tactics. These skills will keep him one step ahead of law enforcement as he becomes one of the most infamous serial rapist/murderers in American history. Jay joins the military to straighten out his life. This works temporarily until Jay relapses, this time committing his worst crime yet, a gruesome double homicide. Detective Shoore, the head investigator, follows a tip from an anonymous caller that leads him to his man. Staking out the place, he interrupts the crime in progress. A showdown ensues, with Shoore being shot dead in the process. Decades pass and the crimes never seem to catch up with Jay, in a nice cabin in the country, the elderly man reflects on his life, justifying his horrible actions with his twisted philosophy. In the far distance, Detective Remming, Shoore’s old partner, is secretly watching the home through a pair of binoculars.