Fly Girl

Bill Hellman and Sali Gear

Book Cover

GENRE

SUSPENSE / THRILLER YOUNG ADULT WAR ACTION ADVENTURE DRAMA HISTORICAL FICTION

    Core Theme

    BRAVERY

    TIME PERIOD

    Contemporary

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    CAPTAIN MARVEL, THE AERONAUTS

    CHARACTER LIST

    • RAWLEY WEST: 28. LEAD. BRAVE AND BADASS.

    • RIP: 30S, RAWLEY'S EX-BOYFRIEND

    • GIL: 70S, RAWLEY'S GODFATHER

    • SALLY: 50S, RAWLEY'S MOM

    • BUD: 50S, RAWLEY'S FATHER

    • DAIKI MASOGI: 80S, VILLAIN

    Logline

    This story is about a young woman who follows her fathers path to become a Navy fighter pilot. Later she leaves the Navy to fly for the CIA and discovers several secrets about her family and lost love. She eventually becomes embroiled in a worldwide hunt for lost weapon of mass destruction.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 18-34

    Target Gender: Universal

    Setting

    Montana, Alaska, Arizona, Afghanistan, Philippines, Havana Cuba, Key West Florida

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: self-published

    Publisher: Create Space

    Year Published: 2018

    Starting Description

    The story begins with Rawley West making her final flight as a deployed Navy fighter pilot. From there she goes to the CIA and during training discovers her father is her new employer. While she is the CIA flight training program we learn many aspects of her early life.

    Ending Description

    The story ends with Rawley West coming face to face with the reality that women are too often minimized. In the end she is the only person who can solve the crisis.

    Group Specific

    Information not completed

    Hard Copy Available

    Yes

    ISBN

    ISBN-10: 1548622885

    Mature Audience Themes

    Information not completed

    Plot - Other Elements

    Other

    Plot - Premise

    Overcoming Monster/Villain

    Main Character Details

    Name: Rawley West

    Age: 28

    Gender: Female

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Aggressive,Complex,Sexy,Patriotic,Heroic,Honorable,Leader

    Additional Character Details

    Name: C. Ripley McGuin

    Age: 28

    Gender: Male

    Role: Sidekick

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Aggressive,Masculine,Sexy,Patriotic,Confident,Heroic,Leader,Secretive

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Gil Adams

    Age: 72

    Gender: Male

    Role: sidekick

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Masculine,Confident

    Additional Character Details

    The author has not yet written this

    Development Pitch

    Leaving this to you

    Genre

    ACTION, THRILLER, DRAMA, WAR

    Brief

    Female Navy fighter pilot leaves the service to join the CIA and discovers that her parents have been a part of the CIA the whole time. On her first mission she rescues her undercover ex-boyfriend who she had thought was missing but was really in the CIA. They go on a mission to recover a WMD from the Vietnam War, save the day, and end up together.

    Overall Rating

    GOOD

    Point of View

    THIRD PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: GOOD

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: GOOD

    Franchise Potential: FAIR

    Pace: GOOD

    Premise: GOOD

    Structure: GOOD

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    Book profile works!

    Draw of Story

    A badass female fighter pilot who joins the CIA and uncovers a bunch of family secrets? I was intrigued from the very start.

    Possible Drawbacks

    There was a lot of over-explaining of technical elements of planes and flying that weren't necessary to the main plot of the story and can easily be cut out.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    A female fighter pilot in the Navy joins the CIA and uncovers family secrets while racing to recover a Weapon of Mass Destruction lost in the Vietnam War. Action, adventure, a strong female lead, romance, mystery, and even history and international relations.

    Fanbase Potential

    This could definitely have a large fanbase within fans of action movies, warfare movies, and strong female leads.

    Awards Potential

    I could see some technical awards being given.

    Envisioned Budget

    LARGE BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    MASH, CAPTAIN MARVEL (TONALLY)

    What’s New About the Story

    It has a female main character who is a fighter pilot. The other characters could be fleshed out a bit more in order to continue to increase the uniqueness.

    Lead Characters

    Rawley is brave, incredibly talented, and still feminine. She's empathetic and smart and she uses her skills wisely.

    Uniqueness of Story

    This could be a rare gem if the main story was sharpened and the characters were a bit more fleshed out.

    Possible Formats

    Film - Studio, Film - Streaming

    Analyst Recommendation

    CONSIDER

    Justification

    This is a unique story that would easily get a big audience with its wide appeal.

    Brief

    Rawley West is a Navy fighter pilot who leaves the service after getting offered a mysterious job in the CIA. Upon taking it, she learns secrets about her family, and realizes that she may have joined the family business as an agent. She soon becomes embroiled in a quest to find and capture a weapon of mass destruction.

    What We Liked

    - This story has a unique female main character who isn't the typical magazine editor or photographer or saleswoman--she's a fighter pilot, and she's amazing at it. She is truly the hero of this story and plays second fiddle to no other character, even though many are talented and incredible in their own right.
    - This would be a thrilling adventure film that would keep audiences on the edge of their seats and make their hearts race.
    - As a television show, this would be a standout in the market as it would feature a female main character who is a fighter pilot. Audiences would tune in weekly to watch Rawley and the team race to find the missing weapon.
    - Key points: Female protagonist; Unique setting; Exciting action scenes; Romance; Strong family bonds.

    Synopsis

    Rawley West is a Navy fighter pilot who has just been offered a secretive job with the CIA. Unable to resist the chance at even more adventure, Rawley agrees to leave the service and join the CIA. Once she starts training, she's surprised to learn that it's not only led by her father, but a group of men who she's known her entire life. Her father, Bud, explains that he's sorry for the secrecy, but he and her mother, Sally, wanted it to be her own choice. Rawley trains with her father and learns that her mother is one of the best sharpshooters in the country.

    Rawley is soon tasked with her first assignment--her godfather, Gil, is getting older, and some of their colleagues worry he may be too old to fly missions. Rawley is given the job of deciding if she should replace him or not. While flying with Gil, Rawley judges that he is still able to fly and tells him that he can continue to fly as long as he wants. Rawley's first official mission is to rescue an undercover agent and his prisoner, but things go awry when their plane is shot down. Rawley acts fast and is able to save both the agent and the prisoner, and leaves the scene with only a minor wound in her leg. However, she soon learns that the undercover agent is her ""missing"" ex-boyfriend, Rip. Rip apologizes and explains that he got recruited for the CIA while they were still in college and wasn't able to tell her.

    Rawley and Rip are assigned to be a part of a team recovering a weapon of mass destruction that has been missing since the Vietnam war. First, they go to Cuba, where they find that it has just been taken. One of Rip's old sailing friends invites Rip to join him in a sailing race from Cuba to Key West, Florida, and Rip invites Rawley to meet him there. In Florida, they discover that the person in current possession of the WMD is Daiki Masogi, an elderly survivor of the Nagasaki bomb. Rawley learns that there is a Truman family reunion at the Truman House in Key West that evening and realizes that it's where Masogi is planning the attack. Rip is shot, and Rawley takes care of him and then finds the man with the WMD and guns him down before he can set it off. Rawley and Rip get back together.

    About The Author

    Bill Hellman was born in Great Falls Montana in 1958. After graduating from High School he joined the Navy where he spent 24 years in SEAL Team. He has made more than 1500 skydives, over 200 as an air to air cameraman in support of training. He has logged over 1200 hours as an instrument rated private pilot. For more than 40 years he has worked as a diver operating military wet submersibles logging more than 5000 hours underwater.