Elizabeth

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ROMANCE SUSPENSE/THRILLER

Contemporary

Eleanor Jane

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Elizabeth grew up alone in boarding schools, disowned by her family. Duncan is a wealthy man. Duncan needs financial backing for a new venture and sees the marriage of convenience a way to achieve it. Elizabeth was stunned by the last-minute wedding, and more so by the flight to Ireland and the beau

Genre

Romance,Suspense/Thriller

Short Summary

For years Elizabeth is sent from boarding school to boarding school, never allowed to come home, never getting any correspondence from her family, never really allowed to make any friends. About the time she was settled and doing well in school, someone would show up and again she was moved again.


Elizabeth comes face to face with the man, who instead of being a father, was a monster, blaming Elizabeth for the death of his wife. She had grown into a compassionate person and had the internal strength to finally tell him what kind of man he had really become.

Setting

United States, Ireland

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Internal Journey/Rebirth

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Elizabeth

Age: mid 20's

Gender: Female

Role: Mentor

Key Traits: Aspiring,Modest,Charming,Religious,Engaging,Faithful,Romantic,Honorable

Additional Character Details

Name: Duncan

Age: early 30's

Gender: Male

Role: Logical

Key Traits: Masculine,Charming,Complex,Confident,Sexy,Decisive,Empathetic,Skillful,Romantic,Heartthrob,Educated

Additional Character Details

Name: Sam

Age: late 20's

Gender: Male

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Aggressive,Masculine,Charming,Sexy,Confident,Patriotic,Empathetic,Skillful,Flexible,Romantic,Heartthrob,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Strong Moral Code,Leader

Additional Character Details

The author has not yet written this

Development Pitch

Elizabeth grew up alone in boarding schools, disowned by her family. Duncan is a wealthy man. Duncan needs financial backing for a new venture and sees the marriage of convenience a way to achieve it. Elizabeth was stunned by the last-minute wedding, and more so by the flight to Ireland and the beautiful estate that will be her new home. Little did either of them know, what was instore for them when they really spent time together. This is a story of deep personal growth for a woman, who seems alone in the world. She is able to make something of herself, found an inner strength and is comfortable in herself. When she finds herself in a foreign country, living in a house where she isn’t wanted. She learns how to deal with that once again until a brother shows up. A brother whom she hadn’t seen in so many years, she was scared. He was there to finally take care of her. This scares her since she has finally found a place where she wants to be. This story shows of how someone, Elizabeth, can make something from nothing and then find love where she had never thought.

About The Author

Born and raised in Minnesota, Eleanor Jane resides with her husband, Jim, in central Minnesota. They have three daughters. Some of her favorite hobbies are gardening, reading and spending time with her family. After acquiring a lake home recently, she enjoys the natural beauty of the lake and the wildlife there. She loves nothing more than to watch the many varieties of migrant birds that come to her feeders, the wild turkeys, loons, swans and eagles, deer and the occasional bobcat and bear. She started writing for herself a few years ago during a short period between jobs. Once her family learned of it, they encouraged her to have her works published. She writes in her spare time as much as possible. Eleanor Jane recently won the Elite Choice Award for her book, Elizabeth, in the Romance category. She has also been a finalist for a Book Excellence award for her books, The Retreat and The Relocation.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Female Leaning

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Author House

Year Published: 2013

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

978-1491809686

Genre

ROMANCE, DRAMA

Brief

At seven years old, Elizabeth was sent away to boarding school with no explanation. She is accosted with a marriage for her father's financial gain and sent to live at her husband's estate, without every meeting him. Her brother ,Sam, tracks her down and uncovers the terrible neglect she has endured while also telling her husband, Duncan. He finally arrives to the estate where he and Elizabeth fall in love, giving Elizabeth a family she has long been denied.

Overall Rating

GOOD

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: GOOD

Premise: FAIR

Structure: GOOD

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

No the book profile does not accurately reflect the book. It is cut off so it only reflects a small part of the story. There should be more details about Elizabeth being left at her husband's estate after her sham of a wedding. The profile also doesn't touch on her reconciling with her brother's or Elizabeth developing a relationship with her estranged husband.

Draw of Story

The story begins with a young girl waiting for her parents to see her recital but they never come. She had big dreams of impressing her family and was abandoned. She is taken home and eventually sent to boarding school. Elizabeth doesn't see her father for almost 20 years. She is shipped from school to school so she can't make friends or get comfortable. Her family never contacts her and she never goes home again. Elizabeth is completely abandoned until she is summoned by her father and forced to marry a man she doesn't know to complete a merger between 2 companies. It is a very heart-wrenching story that intrigues the reader about how the characters story will continue. Will she find happiness in the end?

Possible Drawbacks

The book starts off strong but falls flat by the second half. Elizabeth has lived a lonely life and is yet again, forced into a situation she didn't choose. The tone turns happy and hopeful very quickly. Elizabeth reconciled and forgave years of neglect and abandonment with one conversation. It was too easy and didn't match with the tone of the first few chapters. The second half is very predictable with an "everything is beautiful now that I have found love" trope that is not entertaining.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that after years of abandonment, Elizabeth is thrust from her lonely life into a marriage by her cold father, who blames her for her stepmother's death. Elizabeth is secluded to her husbands' distant manor where she creates her own life. She finally meets her husband after finding out the truth behind their union. He is kinder and more compassionate than he seemed.

Fanbase Potential

This could have a large fanbase because it has all the elements of a grand romance. They are in a sprawling manor in Ireland, a scorned woman who needs love and affection and a handsome man who gives it to her. There needs to be more of a connection between how her past affects her and how she reacts to people coming into her life. Especially, people like her husband and brother who are apart of the group that abandoned her.

Awards Potential

This does not have awards potential as is. An epic romance with compelling characters and stunning backdrop can be done masterfully. This is not there but with some realistic character development and a dive into the emotional work it takes to rebuild relationships and forgive, it could be an awards contender.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

JANE EYRE, FIFTY SHADES OF GREY

What’s New About the Story

The tragedy of Elizabeth's childhood is original to this genre. She has been abandoned by her family with no explanation. She spends all of her time, from the age of seven, living in boarding schools with no contact from any family member. When she is one week from graduating, she is pulled from school to marry a stranger without notice. Then she is shipped off to his secluded estate where she is abandoned by her husband for five years. For a modern day story, it describes unique circumstances.

Lead Characters

The lead character is not a strong female lead at first. She is a young woman holding on to the pain of her seven year old self. She overcomes it by carving out a life for herself with the little she is given. Elizabeth blossoms into her power when she begins to heal through the men in life, her husband and her brother. With the strong female character being so prevalent, it is rewarding to see an average women who needs time and attention to grow into that strong women.

Uniqueness of Story

This is not a rare gem but has elements interesting enough to create a great story. It needs work to make the character arc believable. Elizabeth is quick to forgive but her journey to that should be explored. A normal person does not get over 20+ years of abandonment issues after weekend spent with her estranged brother and husband.

Possible Formats

Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, Film - Indie

Analyst Recommendation

CONSIDER

Justification

This story has elements of an emotionally impactful story. It is a short story but can be improved by exploring the characters emotions further. I felt 7 year old Elizabeth's sadness and loneliness. Adult Elizabeth fades to the background as the story develops around her and more characters are introduced. Duncan's character should be explored as well. He is surprised at what he learns about Elizabeth, how she become his wife and all she has endured. He did agree to marry a woman he didn't know or even bothered to attend his own wedding. It was a business deal for him which he profited from greatly. The loving, honorable man Elizabeth meets would never have agreed to the marriage in the first place. He is a smart man and didn't raise an eye before her brother, Sam, told him what he knew. The characters actions work for the story but are not consistent with the characters that are first presented.