The Gatekeeper of Lies
ACTION POLITICAL SUSPENSE/THRILLER HISTORICAL FICTION
1980s & '90s
Anthony (Tony) Bruce
This is a story of a man betrayed who refuses to betray those he loves. A story of friendship born in great danger and the obligations of honor over duty and patriotism. A story of loss and belonging, of second chances and the price that must be paid to hold to the only true values in life. . .
Hiding from his previous employer the DGSE (French Secret Service) Tomas Molnar builds a new life over time on a small island in Western Canada. The CIA wish to question Molnar on a joint operation he did with the CIA in Bosnia but the DGSE are unhelpful. A CIA colleague is sent to find Tomas
The hunter killer team are sent to kill Tomas to cover the terrible secret which would severely impact USA/France relations. The CIA agent Quarry is a friend and tries to convince Tomas that the CIA are not hostile when the DGSE assassins arrive.
Washington, Ottawa, Rwanda, Paris
Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Plot - Other Elements
Mature Audience Themes
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Main Character Details
Name: Tomas Molnar (Thomas DuPlessis)
Key Traits: Educated,Honorable,Leader,Skillful,Secretive,Lone Wolf,Decisive
Additional Character Details
Name: Dan Quarry
Key Traits: Educated,Aggressive,Confident,Decisive,Strong Moral Code,Patriotic
Additional Character Details
Name: Marianne Boucher
Key Traits: Charming,Complex,Confident,Sexy,Skillful,Secretive,Seductive
Additional Character Details
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From the beauty of Western Canada's Gulf islands to the killing fields of Rwanda and Bosnia. A man running from demons he cannot understand and the child that gives him back his soul . . . two governments playing for great stakes and sacrificing as pawns the agents they betray. . . . Some dark project was running . . . To sacrifice three experienced DGSE operatives and have their assassin executed spoke of very high level involvement. So he'd run and made a new life, a life he'd slowly grown into. A life he had no right to accept. A life that could now and might still bring disaster to those he loved. Since yesterday when a ghost from the past had found him, there were no longer any options. Tomas knew that he finally had to face the past if he was to save the two people he valued more than anything else. On a lonely windswept coast, Tomas Molnar realizes he can no longer hide and if he wishes to preserve the ones he loves, he must use all his cunning and skills to end this long pursuit.
Tomas is an ex-agent from a government agency trying to live a normal life with his wife and daughter. He is targeted because of a past job and some information he become privy to. Thomas' main goal is to keep his family safe as more pieces come together to see who is behind everything. Thomas gains the upper hand, protecting his family and their future.
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
The book profile reflects on the idea of the book but doesn't touch on the actual story. It needs to preview some of the events of the story not just describing the themes.
Draw of Story
The story deals with a covert organization like the CIA. It details Tomas' time in this organization and his life outside of it.
The book jumps between time and events frequently. It felt like I couldn't get a grasp of the story, the timelines and characters until well into reading the book. It does not need to be linear but an establishing of the characters and present day timeline would be helpful.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
This is a classic 'agent living a normal life, but pulled back in' story. Tomas changed his name and left the life of espionage behind to live a normal life. That is threatened by because of some information that could threaten the world. It is interesting enough to be a good film.
This could have a large fanbase. There are many films like this that have been successful. It has the family factor and gives a more well rounded view of Tomas while he was an agent.
This does not have awards potential. There is not much in character development. It is not breaking ground in storytelling. This book sticks to the formula of its genre.
Similar Films/TV Series
JOHN WICK, EQUALIZER, TAKEN
What’s New About the Story
The story is not original. Most of the events are predictable and have been done before. It could be more unique by making the cast more diverse and placing the characters in a different part of the world. There are other government organizations than the CIA.
The lead character does not stand out. He is a former agent trying to protect his family. He has secrets and uses his wits to outsmart the agency out to destroy him. This character has been seen many times before.
Uniqueness of Story
This is an average story. It is very predictable and could use more diversity and a location change. This espionage story with the US and France as a backdrop has been done before.
Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Streaming
WORK IN PROGRESS
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
This story could be made more unique by having a diverse cast and setting it in location outside of Europe or the US. The main character could be from an African, South American or Native nation as oppose to a white male running around the streets of a foreign location. There would be more cultural depth that would set it apart from the norm.