The Gatekeeper of Lies

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ACTION POLITICAL SUSPENSE/THRILLER HISTORICAL FICTION

1980s & '90s

Anthony (Tony) Bruce

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Logline

This is a story of a man betrayed who refuses to betray those he loves. A story of friendship born in great danger and the obligations of honor over duty and patriotism. A story of loss and belonging, of second chances and the price that must be paid to hold to the only true values in life. . .

Genre

Action,Political,Suspense/Thriller,Historical Fiction

Short Summary

Hiding from his previous employer the DGSE (French Secret Service) Tomas Molnar builds a new life over time on a small island in Western Canada. The CIA wish to question Molnar on a joint operation he did with the CIA in Bosnia but the DGSE are unhelpful. A CIA colleague is sent to find Tomas


The hunter killer team are sent to kill Tomas to cover the terrible secret which would severely impact USA/France relations. The CIA agent Quarry is a friend and tries to convince Tomas that the CIA are not hostile when the DGSE assassins arrive.

Setting

Washington, Ottawa, Rwanda, Paris

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Other

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending,Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Tomas Molnar (Thomas DuPlessis)

Age: 40

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Educated,Honorable,Leader,Skillful,Secretive,Lone Wolf,Decisive

Additional Character Details

Name: Dan Quarry

Age: 45

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Educated,Aggressive,Confident,Decisive,Strong Moral Code,Patriotic

Additional Character Details

Name: Marianne Boucher

Age: 29

Gender: Female

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Charming,Complex,Confident,Sexy,Skillful,Secretive,Seductive

Additional Character Details

The author has not yet written this

Development Pitch

From the beauty of Western Canada's Gulf islands to the killing fields of Rwanda and Bosnia. A man running from demons he cannot understand and the child that gives him back his soul . . . two governments playing for great stakes and sacrificing as pawns the agents they betray. . . . Some dark project was running . . . To sacrifice three experienced DGSE operatives and have their assassin executed spoke of very high level involvement. So he'd run and made a new life, a life he'd slowly grown into. A life he had no right to accept. A life that could now and might still bring disaster to those he loved. Since yesterday when a ghost from the past had found him, there were no longer any options. Tomas knew that he finally had to face the past if he was to save the two people he valued more than anything else. On a lonely windswept coast, Tomas Molnar realizes he can no longer hide and if he wishes to preserve the ones he loves, he must use all his cunning and skills to end this long pursuit.

About The Author

The Author, Anthony (Tony) Bruce was born and raised in Central Africa. He has lived and worked in Zambia, Zimbabwe, Malawi, Namibia, South Africa, Kenya, England, Canada, Columbia, Ecuador and Timor in Indonesia. He experienced first hand the great changes shaking the African continent and brings to all his novels a unique blend of life experience having been a surveyor, soldier, commercial pilot, mining construction manager and foreign aid cooperant.

Target Audiences

Age: 35-54,18-34,55+

Target Gender: Male Leaning,Female Leaning

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Glendambo Publishing

Year Published: 2004

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

0-9681787-3-1

Genre

DRAMA, SUSPENSE

Brief

Tomas is an ex-agent from a government agency trying to live a normal life with his wife and daughter. He is targeted because of a past job and some information he become privy to. Thomas' main goal is to keep his family safe as more pieces come together to see who is behind everything. Thomas gains the upper hand, protecting his family and their future.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The book profile reflects on the idea of the book but doesn't touch on the actual story. It needs to preview some of the events of the story not just describing the themes.

Draw of Story

The story deals with a covert organization like the CIA. It details Tomas' time in this organization and his life outside of it.

Possible Drawbacks

The book jumps between time and events frequently. It felt like I couldn't get a grasp of the story, the timelines and characters until well into reading the book. It does not need to be linear but an establishing of the characters and present day timeline would be helpful.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

This is a classic 'agent living a normal life, but pulled back in' story. Tomas changed his name and left the life of espionage behind to live a normal life. That is threatened by because of some information that could threaten the world. It is interesting enough to be a good film.

Fanbase Potential

This could have a large fanbase. There are many films like this that have been successful. It has the family factor and gives a more well rounded view of Tomas while he was an agent.

Awards Potential

This does not have awards potential. There is not much in character development. It is not breaking ground in storytelling. This book sticks to the formula of its genre.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

JOHN WICK, EQUALIZER, TAKEN

What’s New About the Story

The story is not original. Most of the events are predictable and have been done before. It could be more unique by making the cast more diverse and placing the characters in a different part of the world. There are other government organizations than the CIA.

Lead Characters

The lead character does not stand out. He is a former agent trying to protect his family. He has secrets and uses his wits to outsmart the agency out to destroy him. This character has been seen many times before.

Uniqueness of Story

This is an average story. It is very predictable and could use more diversity and a location change. This espionage story with the US and France as a backdrop has been done before.

Possible Formats

Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

This story could be made more unique by having a diverse cast and setting it in location outside of Europe or the US. The main character could be from an African, South American or Native nation as oppose to a white male running around the streets of a foreign location. There would be more cultural depth that would set it apart from the norm.