The Forever Horizon

Anthony Noto atonynoto@aol.com 2698189733933

ACTION ADVENTURE EPIC FANTASY MYSTERY HISTORICAL FICTION SCI-FI GOTHIC HORROR FUNNY DETECTIVE APOCALYPTIC

Across Centuries,20th Century (multiple decades),17th Century or Earlier,Contemporary

Anthony Thomas Noto

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Logline

What if you found out that Shangri La was not heaven but hell. The hidden society is forced to its awakening by discovery and sinister forces.

Genre

Action,Adventure,Epic,Fantasy,Mystery,Historical Fiction,Sci-fi,Gothic,Horror,Funny,Detective,Apocalyptic

Short Summary

Finding of the body of George Mallory on MT Everest raised questions on how and when he actually died. Photos of his final resting place were viewed by famed forensic expert Sir Larry Little that not only appeared that he was murdered but his DNA was extraordinary.


The war for The Forever Horizon was over. A new begining

Setting

Himalayas..The Forever Horizon

Based on a True Story

Yes

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain,Internal Journey/Rebirth,Rebellion Against 'The One'

Plot - Other Elements

Philosophical Questions,Coming of Age,Happy Ending,Meaningful Message,Twist

Mature Audience Themes

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Main Character Details

Name: Dr Raymand Price

Age: 47

Gender: Male

Role: Logical

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Masculine,Complex,Confident,Engaging,Leader,Heroic,Skillful,Visionary,Sophisticated,Strong Moral Code

Additional Character Details

Name: Sang Yoon

Age: ageless -looks about 21

Gender: Female

Role: Emotional

Key Traits: Aspiring,Charming,Complex,Confident,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Educated,Heroic,Gracious,Leader,Sexy,Patriotic,Romantic,Sophisticated,Unapologetic

Additional Character Details

Name: Taku

Age: ageless

Gender: Male

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Villainous,Complex,Blunt,Power Hungry,Outspoken,Unapologetic

Additional Character Details

Name: Chaing

Age: 500 years old at least

Gender: Male

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Complex

Development Pitch

Long undiscovered through the centuries the Forever Horizon has existed for centuries hidden beneath the mountains of the Himayalas.Aided by nature, the hidden valley provides riches to humanity beyond ones wildest dreams. This includes supernatural like powers of enhanced strength and kinetics that includes extreme long life. A plague however threatens the society and it's hierarchy just as Dr. Raymond Price is recused from a plane crash. He was on his way to investigate the strange autopsy photos of George Mallory. Mallory the famed Mt Everest climber who had disappeared along with his companion Sandy Irving. They were last seen climbing to the top of Mt Everest. To this day know one knows what really happened. Sandy Irving's body has still not been found. Only a trained forensic scientist would be able to see how Mallory actually died. Instead Price was engulfed within the power struggles of The Forever Horizon. Battled with the plague. The evil Taran and its cruel Leader Taku. Fell in Love with Patriarchs daughter Sang Yoon and had an uneasy relationship with the aging leader Chaing, Price takes us through a mythical world fraught with danger, intrigue and challenge as we cope with the world of The Forever Horizon.

About The Author

Target Audiences

Age: 13-17,18-34,55+,35-54

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Self

Year Published: 2018

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

ISBN-10 1790529174 ISBN-13 978-1790529179

Genre

THRILLER, ACTION, FANTASY

Brief

Dr. Price is convinced to climb Mt. Everest to investigate a hundred year old mystery. The first western adventurer to reach the summit, George Mallory, is believed to have reappeared as a corpse on the mountain. Instead of using science to uncover the mystery, an accident thrusts Price into a world of magic. Price enters Shangri-La, the mystical mountain utopia, only to find there are hidden cracks in the society's image of perfection.

Overall Rating

GOOD

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: EXCELLENT

Pace: GOOD

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The short summary in the Book Profile is cut off and has no mention of Shangri-La nor Price who both the main components of the tale. The development pitch starts with the Horizon but the story focuses mostly of Price and 21st century reality before diving into Shangri-La. The short summary would be more easy to follow chronologically if it match the order of the book's story.

Draw of Story

The connection between James Hilton's classic and the new tale set up a good expectation of exploring the unknown. The dialogue and pacing are quick and the hidden world is surreal.

Possible Drawbacks

Although an update on the 1930s tale and fantasy, the political correctness isn't always modern. For example Sang Yoon is more two Korean names combined but it used as a vaguely Asian name with no connection to Tibet, Nepal or China where Shangri-La would be culturally tied to. There is a lot of explanations in the narrative that are sometimes repeated so breaking up or reducing the exposition and showing rather than telling when possible could help minimize excess explanation.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that Price heads to Mt. Everest and ends up in Shagri-La. Both are visually stunning locations that hold a lot of mystery because they are hard to get to (regardless that Shangri-La is a fictional place). The timelessness of Shangri-La and finding out how the utopia is not perfect is what attracts one to the mystery.

Fanbase Potential

This could have a large fanbase because the mythology is easily understood and the action sequences are compelling and decently paced.

Awards Potential

Although the characters are likeable, the action heavy element means they do not have much depth or internal conflict to garner acting award notice. This could win technical awards however for set design for the homage to Shangri-La.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

THE GREAT WALL, EVEREST, THE GIVER, LOST HORIZON

What’s New About the Story

The uniqueness is the way the mystery unfolds in that Price is seemingly a man of science out to conduct a dangerous investigation on Mount Everest and what solves the case is magic in running into hundred year old Sandy Irvine inside of the utopia of Shangri-La. Although this is still a romanticization of West meeting East like the original Lost Horizon story where the world was created, updating the subjects to be more modern rather than just colonial and foreign could enhance the characters.

Lead Characters

Price is dedicated and daring. Sang Yoon is fierce and wise but also peaceful and joyous. Irvine as humor and whimsy with his outdated-ness but he is still a highly capable adventurer.

Uniqueness of Story

This has potential, but the characters lack an inner conflict to make them fully three dimensional. They do not seem to have flaws or setbacks and are always quite successful in overcoming their external conflicts so it is unclear what their flaws are.

Possible Formats

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, Film - Studio, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series, TV Series - Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

Updating the political correctness of the tale from its 1930s source such as not referring a vaguely Asian nation with a villain from there having yellow skin would make the narrative more marketable. Adding inner conflicts and personal objectives to the lead characters would also allow for subplots and depth rather than a action story mainly about overcoming the singular external conflicts presented in the moment.