1989: What Happens When A Killer Returns For Revenge

James Smith

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GENRE

ACTION CRIME DETECTIVE MYSTERY SUSPENSE/THRILLER HORROR

    Core Theme

    A WOMAN'S DETERMINED INVESTIGATION TO SOLVE HER HUSBAND'S KILLING AND GET TO THE ROOT OF A 30-YEAR-OLD MURDER MYSTERY.

    TIME PERIOD

    2000s

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    PERFECT MURDER. PERFECT STRANGER. MURDER, SHE WROTE.

    CHARACTER LIST

    NICOLE JONES, AFRICAN AMERICAN, 40, AN ATTORNEY SHE IS SMART, ELEGANT, RESOURCEFUL AND DETERMINED.

    SGT. MIKE ALLEN, WHITE, 50S. THE POLICE PARTNER OF NICOLE'S LATE HUSBAND WHO TURNS OUT TO BE HIS KILLER, AND IS KILLED IN TURN FOR COVERING UP CORRUPTION 25 YEARS BEFORE.

    MARY-JO JOHNSON, 31, LIGHT SKINNED AFRICAN AMERICAN. SHE FAKED HER OWN DEATH AND CHANGED HER NAME TO BECOME AN ATTORNEY, WORKING WITHIN THE SYSTEM SHE BLAMES FOR FRAMING HER LATE FATHER AS A SERIAL KILLER.

    ALAN KEYES, WHITE, 40S. NICOLE'S LAW PARTNER WHO TAKES HER IN AFTER HER HUSBAND'S DEATH, SUPPORTIVE AND CARING.

    CAPTAIN LUCAS BROWN, AFRICAN AMERICAN (?), 50S. FAIR AND CARING, HE LOOKS OUT FOR NICOLE.

    MABLE THOMPSON, AFRICAN AMERICAN, 70S. ADOPTED ALLEGED KILLER SAM AS A CHILD, BUT ADOPTED OUT HIS LIGHTER-SKINNED SISTER, MARY JO. PROVIDES IMPORTANT INFORMATION TO COP HOWARD JUSTIN, AFRICAN AMERICAN, EARLY 30S, WHO HELPS NICOLE IN HER INVESTIGATION.

    Logline

    The story picks up thirty years after the death of the Penny Murderer, when two people are killed on the same night using his signature. After their deaths old ghosts are awaken as the police try to figure out if they made a mistake 30 years ago or this is a new killer out for revenge.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 18-34

    Target Gender: Universal

    Setting

    Small Towns in Georgia

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: self-published

    Publisher: Self-Published

    Year Published: 2021

    Starting Description

    Nicole Jones's life is perfect, she is married to the man of her dreams and she has achieved all of the professional goals she has set for herself. However, her world is shattered when she finds her husband dead in bed.

    Ending Description

    After achieving her goals, Jo is finally able to relax knowing she is almost complete with her plan for revenge. Just as she thinks she has made it without anyone knowing anything, Nicole Jones, her former friend shows up to her home, surprising her in the process.

    Group Specific

    Information not completed

    Hard Copy Available

    Yes

    ISBN

    1649908024

    Mature Audience Themes

    Information not completed

    Plot - Other Elements

    Twist,Other

    Plot - Premise

    Internal Journey/Rebirth,Overcoming Monster/Villain,Tragedy

    Main Character Details

    Name: Nicole Jones

    Age: 38

    Gender: Other

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Sexy,Selfless,Outspoken,Skillful,Faithful,Heroic,Visionary,Secretive,Strong Moral Code,Confident,Educated,Empathetic

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Mike Allen

    Age: 50

    Gender: Male

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Aggressive,Masculine,Villainous,Complex,Empathetic,Outspoken,Skillful,Honorable,Secretive

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Mary Jo Jones

    Age: 31

    Gender: Female

    Role: antagonist

    Key Traits: Aspiring,Villainous,Charming,Complex,Confident,Criminal,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Secretive,Outspoken

    Additional Character Details

    The author has not yet written this

    Genre

    SUSPENSE, THRILLER

    Brief

    When her cop husband is poisoned in the same manner as a convicted serial killer 25 years before, African American Georgia attorney Nicole finds herself going down a murky path of investigation as an apparent copycat killer takes out nearly a dozen people, revenge for framing her innocent father.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    THIRD PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: FAIR

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: FAIR

    Franchise Potential: FAIR

    Pace: FAIR

    Premise: FAIR

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    Yes, it's pretty accurate.

    Draw of Story

    Strong African American female lead. Suspenseful murder mystery that keeps one guessing until the very end. Intriguing copy-cat killer premise with well-placed clues.

    Possible Drawbacks

    Too many characters. It was hard to keep track of them all and their complicated back stories. Too many unanswered questions. Why did Nicole's mother kill her father? Who was the original Penny Murderer? We never find out. How and why was Sam picked and framed as a serial killer? Why were innocent Melissa and grad student Tracy killed? Name confusion: Murder victim Laura White dated Sam Johnson, the alleged killer. But she was married to Victor Johnson, no relation. Sam Johnson's real name is Jones, which is also lead Nicole's last name. This makes one think all along that Nicole was the other adopted twin and is inadvertently married to her own brother, Marcus, which doesn't turn out to be true - but is confusing.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    Lead character's husband found murdered in first scene. Strong female lead must get to the root of the investigation that unearths corruption in powerful authority figures.

    Fanbase Potential

    Possibly although it's more in the vein of Murder, She Wrote or a mystery MOW. The story still has too many holes.

    Awards Potential

    No. It's a run-of-the-mill murder mystery with familiar elements. There is nothing truly striking or original.

    Envisioned Budget

    LOW BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    PERFECT MURDER, PERFECT STRANGER, MURDER, SHE WROTE.

    What’s New About the Story

    African American female lead and other African American leads in a Southern-based murder mystery. The story feels unfinished; there are plot holes, unanswered questions and it ends too abruptly, with no real resolution between protagonist and antagonist.

    Lead Characters

    Strong African American female lead who is mature (40), smart, beautiful, edgy, determined and resourceful. She will not let her husband's murder go unsolved, despite risks to her own life. The other characters are not so much leads as an ensemble - and many of them get killed as the narrative unfolds.

    Uniqueness of Story

    No. The book needs astute editing and revision prior to re-publication, in order to tie up loose ends and provide a more satisfactory ending.

    Possible Formats

    TV Series: Network

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    As mentioned, there are too many plot holes and unanswered questions. We never find out who the original Penny Murderer was: DA Wallace is blamed but there's no proof. The story ends too abruptly as Nicole confronts the killer, Mary Jo, a childhood friend - and actually her late husband's sister. There are also small oddities that should be edited out, like Trisha meeting privately with cop Howard in a 'red lacy teddy and heels', while at an outdoor location! Some of the cops recognize victims' sleep garments as 'Gucci negligees', etc, which doesn't ring true.

    Tips for Improvement

    The story needs some smart editing and revisions to get rid of plot holes, answer some important questions and provide a satisfying denouement in which the killer is apprehended - or not.

    Brief

    When her cop husband is poisoned in the same manner as a convicted serial killer 25 years before, African American Georgia attorney Nicole finds herself going down a murky path of investigation as an apparent copycat killer takes out nearly a dozen people, revenge for framing her innocent father.

    What We Liked

    A complex murder mystery driven by African American leads, a welcome rarity in this genre. Female lead Nicole is strong and resourceful as she uncovers past corruption from a 30-year-old case, in order to solve her late husband's recent murder.

    1989 would make a great MOW or mini-series, with its complex murder investigation and multiple killings keeping an audience guessing. Driven by a strong African American female lead, the cast is refreshingly diverse.

    Key points:
    Strong African American female lead.
    Starts off with a bang, the murder of the lead's husband.
    Very solid hook to draw one in emotionally.
    Multiple murders keep one guessing until the end.

    Synopsis

    Atlanta, Georgia, present day. NICOLE JONES (African American, 40) is a successful lawyer who worked in corporate law to earn big bucks that enabled her to start her own firm, encompassing both corporate and pro bono cases, in which she believes passionately. She is still madly in love with her husband MARCUS (African American, early 30s), a cop, but sadly, they haven’t been able to have children.

    Nicole gets home from a long day at work, touched to see flowers, wine and a bubble bath waiting as a gift from Marcus. But when she goes up to their bedroom, she is shocked to find him dead in bed! On his body is a single penny and a note: ‘What happens to a man who awakens a ghost?’ It’s the exact same MO as the Penny Murderer killings 25 years before, for which African American Samuel Johnson was convicted and was later killed in prison. In the late ‘80s and early ‘90s, he allegedly killed at least 12 white victims, all of them poisoned.

    Nicole calls 911 but when the police get there, they arrest her! She’s taken to the station where Marcus’s partner and their close friend SGT. MIKE ALLEN (40s) and CAPTAIN LUCAS BROWN (50s) quickly release her, annoying DA HARRY WALLACE (50s) who has a grudge against Nicole for winning so many cases for ‘the bad guys’.

    Years before, Mike’s wife Joanne and their two children perished in a house fire. They are both perturbed by the ‘Penny Murderer’ note: did they convict the wrong man or has a family member come back for revenge? Unable and unwilling to go home, Nicole stays with her law partner and good friend ALAN KEYES (40s), his lovely wife PATRICIA (40s), a neurosurgeon and their adorable toddler daughter.

    The cops are called out to another murder, MELISSA LANDRY (40s), the daughter of Judge White, who presided over the Sam Johnson trial, and the daughter-in-law of former GOVERNOR LANDRY (60s). She has been placed in an alley, with a pillow and blanket as if she is sleeping, exactly as a previous Penny Murderer victim. There is another note: ‘Your father took an innocent life.’

    Mike isn’t happy to meet his new partner Det. JUSTIN HOWARD (African American, late 20s). He’s too busy and stressed to play nursemaid to a rookie.

    Nicole returns to her house to look for clues – and is shocked to find statements from a hidden off-shore bank account worth twenty million!

    A third body turns up, that of JUDGE WHITE (80s) who presided over the 1989 Penny Murderer trial. A note also accuses him of framing an innocent man. Allegedly, his daughter TRISHA (40s) once dated accused killer Samuel Johnson, who was despised by her racist family.

    Nicole flies to the Bahamas to investigate the secret bank account, meeting with Harry Wallace’s estranged brother JAMES ‘BILLY’ WALLACE (40s) who has married a local woman. The accounts show anonymous deposits of half a million a year for 30 years. Billy discovers that the account was opened in 1993, the year of the Penny Murderer trial. The deposits are from Governor Landry and Judge White to DA Wallace, who prosecuted Sam Johnson. Does that mean Sam was framed?

    Cops Mike and Howard track the poison to that of an exotic South American frog purchased from illegal wildlife trader THOMAS RICE (39), who says the customer was tall, white and female. The cops track the store address of her burner phone.

    Trisha White calls Howard for a secret meeting. She was 12 when her older sister Laura was killed. At the time she was married to Victor Johnson. She reveals their father was furious about her earlier affair with black Samuel Johnson.

    The current MASKED KILLER now confronts PATRICK and APRIL MILLER (both 40s) revealing that her husband killed her former fiancé, staging it as a car crash, in order to marry her. April is shocked – the Killer poisons them both.

    Another body shows up, that of Governor Landry’s son ARTHUR (40s), Melissa’s cheating husband. The Killer accuses him of killing her sister, Laura, who he was dating, ‘in an accident’. He told his father who went to Judge White and DA Wallace, who agreed to help cover it up by attributing it to Sam Johnson. When the cops get there, they find Landry removed the Killer’s note in an attempt not to involve his son in any potential scandal.

    Howard visits Nicole privately and admits he’s discovered some inside info from Marcus that made him think he didn’t trust his partner, Mike, and that Nicole shouldn’t either. Nicole is skeptical but agrees to work with Howard, showing him the secret bank accounts with payments from Landry and White to DA Wallace.

    Mike and Howard trace the burner phone of the poison purchaser, TRACEY BUSH, 20s, via CCTV footage but when they get to her house, they find her poisoned like the other victims. Judging by her lab and class books, she really was just an innocent grad student doing research.

    Howard tracks some of Sam Johnson’s former contacts, which leads him to MABLE THOMPSON (African American, 70s). She knew him when he was younger when he was married to Tiffany (black), with two kids. They came from the same small town as Nicole and were friends with April Miller. But Sam also liked the ladies and he had an affair with Laura, Melissa’s sister, who was later killed.

    Unbeknownst to him, she became pregnant and was sent away to Europe for 9 months to have the baby – twins, in fact, a boy and a girl. When Laura’s family disowned them, her mother gave them to Mable to raise. Now, Laura’s mother, Judge White’s widow, breaks down and confirms the story.

    Mike Allen gets blind drunk and wakes at home to find the Masked Killer has tied him up. He also helped cover up Laura’s murder by Arthur. Allegedly, his late wife Joanne killed someone in a hit and run and Wallace used this to blackmail Mike into staying silent about framing Sam. Marcus had recently found out and that’s why Mike killed him!

    The Masked Killer injects Mike with fatal poison. Nicole is horrified to discover the body, with a note that reads: ‘What happens when you kill to protect your secrets.’

    Howard is shocked by Mike’s murder. When he visits Mable again, she has just passed away. He notices many photos of Marcus, whom she claimed she took in after his parents were killed in a car accident.

    Mable’s daughter gives Howard a sealed envelope left by her mother for him. In it, Howard learns that Laura’s twins were Marcus, who was raised by Mable, and Mary-Jo, who was lighter skinned and given up for adoption. She is also Mike’s ex-wife, who allegedly died in a house fire.

    The Masked Killer sets up Harry Wallace and GARRET JAMES (50s), Sam’s former defense attorney. The Killer knows they meet monthly at a particular rural inn and waits for them there, eager to see their shocked response as they find their dark misdeeds 25 years before make breaking news on the TV, anonymously leaked by the Killer. Proof that Wallace received payments has been found, showing he deliberately framed Sam. Meanwhile, the Killer poisons both Wallace and Garret.

    Nicole’s fingerprints are now found on all the crime scenes, as well as CCTV footage of her leaving the inn where Wallace and Garret are found dead. She is brought in for questioning but a witness whom the Killer had saved from a beating by Arthur Landry testifies that they had blue eyes, not brown, like Nicole’s.

    Howard learns that Nicole and Sam were from the same small town and that she was friends with his daughter, Denise. After his unjust conviction and murder, she drank herself to death and her mother Tiffany followed soon after. Nicole was determined to get justice for Sam and to avenge the torment heaped on her best friend. Growing up, she had also witnessed her mother kill her father.

    Sam’s daughter Jo – the Masked Killer – now confronts Governor Landry who thinks he’s safe at his lake house. She reveals who she is and knows what he did to cover up the murder of her mother by his son, and the framing of her father for her death. He killed both of her parents. She injects him and watches him expire.

    DA Wallace (not dead?) makes a public announcement that he is opening an impartial inquiry into the 1989 conviction of Sam, just in case they had the wrong man. He appoints INGRID SMITH (light skinned African American, 31) from his office. When Nicole, who has now been released, sees the news she realizes that Ingrid is Mary Jo, Sam’s daughter!

    When the cops are slipped confidential information on Wallace, he is arrested for Sam’s murder as well as the dozen other murders at the time. Charges against Nicole are dropped once and for all.
    Jo is shocked when coroner Adam is killed – she didn’t do it.

    Jo has now killed everyone who contributed to framing her father and causing his death in prison. She’d faked her and her children’s death in a house fire using morgue bodies, changed her name and studied law. She is, in fact, Ingrid Smith, who works at the DA’s office! She deliberately didn’t kill Wallace: she wants him to suffer public shame and an awful life in jail.

    But she hadn’t counted on Nicole realizing who she is and now confronting her.

    About The Author

    African American author James Smith is a retired US Army Veteran who received two Bronze Stars and many other awards. He also has a BA in Criminal Justice, which gives his debut murder mystery novel realistic grit and authenticity. James is married with two daughters, and they currently live in Georgia