Secret Fences: A Series

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ROMANCE EROTICA SUSPENSE/THRILLER DRAMA

Contemporary

Zakiya Raines

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Logline

My book, “Secret Fences” is about what happens when a woman decides to live by her husband’s rules. Naomi is an educated, married Black woman, who once had a career and gave that life up for the good of her family. She is living in a brownstone in Manhattan with her Caucasian husband and two kids.

Genre

Romance,Erotica,Suspense/Thriller,Drama

Short Summary

Naomi is introduced as a caring wife and mother with a condescending narcissistic husband. He emotional abuses her and has affairs. Naomi meets William, a business man who fixes computers as a hobby. William is kindhearted and handsome and fills a void. He discovers that Naomi is watching porn.


William watches Naomi pleasure herself without her knowledge. They become intensely good friends until Naomi learns his secret and the affair begins. She gets pregnant. They marry and buy adjoining homes in CT. William's wife dies suspiciously. Naomi's husband suspects the child's paternity.

Setting

Manhattan, New York Brownstone

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Other

Plot - Other Elements

Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions,Twist,Happy Ending

Mature Audience Themes

Nudity, Language/Profanity,Extreme Violence

Main Character Details

Name: Naomi

Age: 37

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Complex,Confident,Engaging,Educated,Sexy,Outspoken,Skillful,Funny,Romantic,Sarcastic,Secretive,Seductive,Sophisticated,Unapologetic

Additional Character Details

Name: Robert

Age: 50

Gender: Male

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Aggressive,Villainous,Narcisstic,Religious,Power Hungry,Greedy,Educated,Insecure,Unapologetic,Manipulative,Secretive

Additional Character Details

Name: William

Age: 38

Gender: Male

Role: protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Masculine,Charming,Complex,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Heartthrob,Honorable,Leader,Gracious,Seductive,Romantic,Visionary,Funny,Skillful,Outspoken,Selfless,Blunt,Sexy

Additional Character Details

Name: Stephanie

Age: 35

Gender: Female

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Aggressive,Villainous,Insecure,Criminal,Secretive

Development Pitch

My book, “Secret Fences” is about what happens when a woman decides to fully live by her husband’s rules. Naomi is a sexy, educated, married Black woman, who once had a career and gave that life up for the good of her family. She is living in a brownstone in Manhattan with her Caucasian husband and two children. She is an amorous housewife who grows tired of having her needs overlooked and putting everyone ahead of herself, at her own expense. She begins taking care of herself and meets William, a tall, dark-haired, well-dressed professional who fixes computers in his free time as a hobby. William is kindhearted, soft spoken, wise and alluring. He becomes Naomi's closest friend and confidante. Naomi loses control of herself and gives in to biology, and loneliness. William fills every void, eventually making him the secret father of her 3rd child while she is still married. They decide to secretly get married in another state while still married to other people. William himself is married and wants out of his false shotgun wedding. William is willing to be with Naomi at all costs. Secret Fences is a sexy slow burn, full of domestic suspense, that you will not regret reading. First book of 3.

About The Author

I am a married mother of 4, who enjoys writing, drawing and painting as forms of expression. I also enjoy gardening and animals. I live in a brownstone in Manhattan with my family, which includes two adopted cats. I grew up in the city, as my parents decided to stay in Harlem, after meeting at Columbia University. I went to Bank Street School for Children and Manhattan College. I have written 2 romance manuscripts and have self-published the following women’s fiction/romance titles: "Risqué: a collection of short sexy stories" "Brianna and Brother John" "Black Sugar: a book of poetry and innermost thoughts" The following is a women’s non-fiction memoir: "A Gentle Fox in the Hen House" As a married woman, I know that marriage is not always fun and roses. Sometimes it is pain and picking up the pieces, mostly for women. When we step into the footprints of the paths that our husbands have left behind, we are called out. Women see a different side of infidelity and the standard that women are held to. I enjoy writing about strong female characters who revolt against patriarchy by shifting the double standard.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54

Target Gender: Female Leaning,Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: No

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

Information not completed

Genre

ROMANCE, DRAMA

Brief

Naomi is an unfulfilled housewife with a selfish and uncaring husband. She meets William when he comes to repair her laptop. They become friends even though the attraction is strong and after years of friendship, take it to the next level. Naomi becomes pregnant with William's baby and continuing their secret relationship even after the tragic death of his wife.

Overall Rating

GOOD

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: GOOD

Premise: GOOD

Structure: GOOD

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes, the book profile accurately reflects the book.

Draw of Story

This story explores Naomi life which is filled with disappointment. She gave up her career for her children, her husband is not faithful or caring. She doesn't love him anymore but is staying so her children have a two parent home. The tone of the story begins as melancholy and depressing but clearly takes a turn since it is romance. The circumstances that get her there are teased at.

Possible Drawbacks

It is a slow burn type of story. Naomi and her love interest, William, take years before they act on their attraction. The story is over the span of years and gets more complicated ever step. The drama is overly done. The relationship between a married Naomi and William is enough but then William gets tricked into marriage and Naomi stays with her husband. Naomi and her husband, Robert , become best friends with William and his wife, Stephanie. Then Naomi gets pregnant with William's child and his wife is hit by a car and dies after being in a coma. The story ends without any real resolution. William and Naomi are still having a clandestine affair right under everyone's noses. There needs to be more focus on the relationship between Naomi and William.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that Naomi is unfulfilled in her marriage and in life which leads her to an intense attraction and affair with William, that results in a love child. I would watch the intensely, slow burn of the relationship with William and Naomi.

Fanbase Potential

This could have a large fanbase but not necessarily in the mainstream. The amount of twists and turns is reminisce of made for tv movies which do have a relatively large fanbase. If the story was edited with the focus on the relationship between Naomi and William, it would intensify the romance, providing more of connection to the characters for the audience.

Awards Potential

This would not garner awards potential. There is nothing extraordinary about the story. It is a drama filled romance that delivers on messy situations and steamy love scenes but does not have the elements or storytelling that attract awards.

Envisioned Budget

LOW BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

FATAL AFFAIR, THE AFFAIR

What’s New About the Story

The story is original because it has a black female lead where the story doesn't revolve around her race. This story spans many years with many different circumstances happening to the main characters. There is no real resolution to the story. The characters continue to have an affair without anyone knowing.

Lead Characters

The lead character stands out because she is a black woman in an interracial relationship with normal issues. Naomi's unhappiness is not racial but universal issues people face in unhealthy relationships and at disappointing times in their lives. Her personality could be more defined.

Uniqueness of Story

This is not a rare gem. There are many films and tv programs similar to this. The story is going for the steamy and messy, not character development or creative storytelling.

Possible Formats

Film: Streaming, Studio, Indie

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

The story needs a more satisfying ending. Naomi is in a loveless marriage , but has meet a new love and now has given birth to his child. She recognizes how she feels about her husband but is still with him. There are so many years throughout the story that one would like to see a change in her circumstances. Especially since William now lives next door to Naomi and her husband, Robert.