Coal Miners Christ
SUSPENSE/THRILLER ADVENTURE DRAMA POLITICAL
A true grit senator is defeated by a corrupt golden boy married to a former Russian spy whereas the former senator is married to a mixed race activist.. After a night of pleasure with an underage Black teen, the KKK senator kills her, tossing the teen's body onto a cross, KKK carved .onto her chest.
The newly elected senator scoffs at the older, defeated senator for his shabby suit while the senator shakes his fist at him. He watches as the new senator forgets his speech and sings a nursery rhyme instead. Former senator drives home to his mixed-race, activist wife. New senator goes to brothel.
After murdering his wife and raping the underage Black sex worker, the KKK senator tosses her body on a cross. Ghosts at a hidden slaves' cemetery welcome their latest soul. The former senator's wife runs for his vacant seat, and he is nominated to run for President.
Washington, D.C. and Mohegan, West Virginia
Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Plot - Other Elements
Happy Ending,Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions,Twist
Mature Audience Themes
Main Character Details
Name: Former Senator Walter Morrow
Key Traits: Aspiring,Confident,Empathetic,Engaging,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Underdog,Complex,Decisive,Faithful,Gracious,Leader,Modest,Patriotic,Selfless,Outspoken,Strong Moral Code,Charming,Flexible,Skillful
Additional Character Details
Name: Senator Bill Jameson
Key Traits: Aspiring,Badass,Aggressive,Confident,Criminal,Decisive,Greedy,Insecure,Leader,Villainous,Narcisstic,Power Hungry,Outspoken,Secretive,Seductive,Unapologetic,Sexy,Complex
Additional Character Details
Name: Elle Morrow, the former senator Walter Morrow's wife
Key Traits: Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Modest,Patriotic,Selfless,Outspoken,Strong Moral Code
Additional Character Details
Name: Dr. Svetlana Jameson, Jewish-Russian wife of Senator Bill Jameson
Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Desperate,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Sexy,Selfless,Skillful,Sophisticated,Strong Moral Code
West Virginia senator who worked for worker's, women's and civil rights loses his seat to a flashy golden boy, head of a KKK. Their wives couldn't be more different in looks, but share a selfless dedication to humanity, the former being of mixed black/white race and the latter a Jewish-Russian immigrant with a daughter in Russia. Sveta is an M.D. and works with poisoned patients among others. A KGB spy has been assigned to kill her, but she crashes her car into a tree when he tries to shoot her; he ends up in the same hospital room as the former senator, who invites him to dinner. When he tries to kill Svetlana, the Senator's wife grabs a shotgun and kills him. Meanwhile, her husband arrives with an underage Black teen who has been working at a brothel to support herself and her siblings.. Senator Jameson has a vial of anthrax and attempts to poison his wife, but his young consort saves her. The wife of the defeated senator announces her candidacy for his seat. Jameson and friends arrive in KKK sheets; they run the senator's wife, Sveta and his underage tryst into a ditch and shoot all but the young girl, who they rape and throw against a loosely formed cross to die.. A member of the bio-warfare lab tells all and the former senator decides to run for president. His daughters find Khadija's sister and brother for her funeral in the hidden slaves' graveyard. They are welcomed into the family. This is family oriented as well as a political drama. Disregard pages 195 to end.
DRAMA, POLITICS, SUSPENSE
A former senator concerned about the alarming situation of West Virginia miners loses the election to a younger candidate who is only looking for profit and economic growth. Suspicious, the former senator finds out that the current senator is a member of the KKK who wants to execute his ethnic cleansing plan to avoid poverty in the state. The former senator and his wife also discover a barbaric crime led by the current senator involving a 16-year-old girl.
Authors Writing Style: GOOD
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes, it seems accurate, but Elle Morrow functions more as a sidekick, supporting the former Senator Morrow than being a protagonist herself. She has immense relevance in the story and is the source of several solutions and the target of conflicts. Still, even so, the former senator remains the central figure of the narrative.
Draw of Story
This initial political fight between very opposing sides sounds current and realistic. Placing the two opposite sources face to face in the first scene is a good way to intensify the drama and make the theme clear from the start.
Some scenes seem uniquely created to make us understand who is who, and they sound unnecessary. With the opening scene, we are already sure of the sides and nature of each one. Some comments and explanations delivered after that, about their ideals and characteristics, sound too much expository and redundant.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is this political opposition that ends up becoming a criminal hunt. Here, the political opposition is taken to its ultimate consequences.
Extreme political opposition is something that is widely seen in real life. It's something that fills newspaper news and day-to-day discussions. Therefore, having these two antagonistic forces in the political environment may not be a starting point that attracts a broad audience, mainly because of the heavy content of the story and because it is not based on true events.
Stories that involve the KKK and its horrendous racial crimes alone have an intense dramatic weight. However, such a tense and relevant subject could be accompanied by a more complex narrative, with a more marked theme and more defined characters to elevate its potential for awards.
Similar Films/TV Series
BLACKKKLANSMAN: AN AFRICAN AMERICAN DETECTIVE TRIES TO INFILTRATE THE KKK TO DISCOVER THEIR PLANS. THE BEST OF ENEMIES: A CIVIL RIGHTS ACTIVIST AND A KKK LEADER STAY FACE TO FACE TO DISCUSS SEGREGATION IN SCHOOLS.
What’s New About the Story
The background story of miners from West Virginia, which incites conflicts between both senators. It is a different starting point for a story that involves political opposition and the KKK.
Former Senator Morrow is a complete hero. He has a good character, cares about others, thinks about doing good through politics, benefits the less fortunate, and even discovers a criminal plan. The current Senator Jameson is an absolute villain. He is selfish, sexist, abusive, he only thinks about money, and he is a criminal. As opposite forces, they work well, but creating flat characters that are just good or bad is not the best option here. More complex characters could make the story more complex as well.
Uniqueness of Story
It is not. The story features subplots such as the miners', the story of the raped girl, the racial cleansing plan, the KKK, and the political opposition, the spirit of black people who return from death... but it ends up losing strength due to its vast number of subplots.
Film: Indie TV Series: Limited Run / Mini-Series
WORK IN PROGRESS
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
The initial scene of political opposition is quite attractive. There, we observe an interesting realism that attracts us to a plot that apparently will provide us a series of events connected by the authenticity of the theme. Two politicians with opposing views and ideas fighting for a political position that goes far beyond the job, but presume the lives of citizens. However, we are soon thrown back and forth in subplots that seem a little disconnected from the central theme—for example, the Russian wife and the Russian characters who appear to kill her. Soon after, a story about a vaccine that injected the AIDS virus to kill part of the population as a source of an idea of racial cleansing also seems to throw us to another side, completely different. Then we have spirits of black slaves reappearing to seek revenge. So, all the realism of the initial scene is lost. It is possible to mix realism and fantasy in the same film, but here, with such an impactful theme at hand, the use of this "fantasy" mixed with so many different subplots ends up making the whole thing seem a little disconnected. Subplots are welcome, as long as they somehow feed the central theme and connect to the main narrative. Here, these subplots do not increase tension and impact. Instead, they remove the relevance of the central narrative. There are many problems happening at the same time for the public to follow and worry about. The goal would be to reduce subplots and focus more on some of them. The point that the wife is Russian does not seem to have much relevance to the story. Not only Russian but a former Russian spy. It doesn't add much to the central narrative. It seems that this subplot falls into an action film trope that does not match very well with this story. The realism of the political conflict and of the supremacist group (which could be, in fact, the center of the narrative) loses its strength because of these distractions. The characters are interesting, the theme is relevant, the writing style is good, but the structure could be better developed.