Cripple
DRAMA FUNNY YOUNG ADULT FAMILY MEMOIR POLITICAL RELIGIOUS CHILDREN'S
1960s & '70s
Tony Gonzalez
Submision Type
book
Logline
After the operation I wake up with my throat singed from ether. I struggle to wipe its taste from my lips, but both arms are tied to the hospital bed. My legs and chest are wrapped in plaster. I was once a ten-year-old boy. This is my last day as a child.
Genre
Drama,Funny,Young Adult,Family,Memoir,Political,Religious,Children's
Short Summary
A late spring California day finds me mowing the lawn, a chore I’d never finish. Searing pain sends me to the ground, to bed, and eventually, to three hospitals. I endure spinal taps, countless needle pokes, and my first operation. I wake up in a body cast.
Setting
Southern California
Based on a True Story
Yes
Plot - Premise
Internal Journey/Rebirth,Quest
Plot - Other Elements
Coming of Age,Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions,Twist
Mature Audience Themes
Substance Abuse
Main Character Details
Name: Tony
Age: Ten, aging to eighteen
Gender: Male
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Adventurous,Complex,Desperate,Empathetic,Funny,Skillful,Religious,Charming,Insecure,Heroic,Underdog,Lone Wolf,Strong Moral Code,Secretive,Sarcastic
Additional Character Details
Name: Father
Age: Thirty-two
Gender: Male
Role: Antagonist
Key Traits: Religious,Secretive,Lone Wolf
Additional Character Details
Name: Mother
Age: Thirty-one
Gender: Female
Role: emotional
Key Traits: Selfless,Empathetic,Funny,Faithful,Sexy,Confident
Additional Character Details
The author has not yet written this
Genre
DRAMA
Brief
Tony was once a carefree boy until he lands in the hospital for 5 months. His hip is destroyed and now he has a limp. He continues towards adulthood facing typical issues faced by any teenager in the late 60's, early 70's. His limitations prevent him from becoming an airline pilot.
Overall Rating
GOOD
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: GOOD
Characterization: GOOD
Commerciality: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Pace: GOOD
Premise: FAIR
Structure: GOOD
Theme: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes, the book profile accurately reflects the book.
Draw of Story
The story is from a young boy's perspective, learning about the world but experiencing a life altering event. His time spent in hospitals, needing operations is compelling especially set in the 1960's.
Possible Drawbacks
This is an average story. It is a coming of age story about a young boy. There isn't much conflict in Tony's life to make for a riveting plot.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
Tony faces many physical challenges but overcomes and goes off to lead a normal life. This movie would be a coming of age story that is generally introspective and informative which is a change of pace from the normal film fare.
Fanbase Potential
This would not have a large fanbase. There is little to grip the audience. It is about a young white privileged boy who faces some difficult moments but moves forward to live a normal life.
Awards Potential
This does not have awards potential. The story is average and lacks inspiration. It is a chapter in Tony's world but outside of his physical difficulties, there is nothing overtly interesting.
Envisioned Budget
MEDIUM BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
LADY BIRD
What’s New About the Story
The story is original in its' perspective of Tony's time in the hospital. He is 10 years old, not grasping all that his happening to him or around him. His viewpoint is intriguing considering he would now be considered disabled.
Lead Characters
Tony is a young white boy growing up lower, middle class in the 1960's. He has all of the same questions, issues and thoughts related to a boy of his time. There is nothing inherently unique about him.
Uniqueness of Story
This is an average story. It is a coming of age story about a young boy. There isn't much conflict in Tony's life to make for a riveting plot.
Possible Formats
Film - Indie, Film - Streaming
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
This story needs more gravitas. Tony's time in the hospital and coming to terms with his disability is interesting but he leads a relatively normal life afterwards. Teenage angst and family problems are normal but nothing extraordinary. This could translate to screen with the right vision. It is character driven so the right direction of the story, focusing on Tony's emotional growth could create more depth.