Cripple

Tony Gonzalez tonystar1@msn.com 5062666420378

DRAMA FUNNY YOUNG ADULT FAMILY MEMOIR POLITICAL RELIGIOUS CHILDREN'S

1960s & '70s

Tony Gonzalez

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Logline

After the operation I wake up with my throat singed from ether. I struggle to wipe its taste from my lips, but both arms are tied to the hospital bed. My legs and chest are wrapped in plaster. I was once a ten-year-old boy. This is my last day as a child.

Genre

Drama,Funny,Young Adult,Family,Memoir,Political,Religious,Children's

Short Summary

A late spring California day finds me mowing the lawn, a chore I’d never finish. Searing pain sends me to the ground, to bed, and eventually, to three hospitals. I endure spinal taps, countless needle pokes, and my first operation. I wake up in a body cast.


At eighteen I’m driving an ice cream truck, a converted diaper wagon with a freezer. One day it hits me: “No, kid. This ain’t you.” Six months later I work for General Telephone as a toll operator. I return to my childhood "favorite place in the world." Restored.

Setting

Southern California

Based on a True Story

Yes

Plot - Premise

Internal Journey/Rebirth,Quest

Plot - Other Elements

Coming of Age,Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions,Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Substance Abuse

Main Character Details

Name: Tony

Age: Ten, aging to eighteen

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Complex,Desperate,Empathetic,Funny,Skillful,Religious,Charming,Insecure,Heroic,Underdog,Lone Wolf,Strong Moral Code,Secretive,Sarcastic

Additional Character Details

Name: Father

Age: Thirty-two

Gender: Male

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Religious,Secretive,Lone Wolf

Additional Character Details

Name: Mother

Age: Thirty-one

Gender: Female

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Selfless,Empathetic,Funny,Faithful,Sexy,Confident

Additional Character Details

The author has not yet written this

Development Pitch

It’s a postcard perfect California life for young Tony Gonzalez. A popular boy at school, and with a family life that includes a verdant acre for his playground, he has all he could wish for—until the day he collapses in the yard from a mystery illness centered in his left hip. As his condition deteriorates in their local hospital, Tony’s mother, Ruth, busts him out and takes him to Children’s Hospital in Los Angeles, where they find a massive infection in his left hip. Tony wakes up in a body cast, spends five months isolated in a private room with only a television and books for company. Leaving Children’s, he endures a reduced series of body casts, crutches, eventually returning to school as a shell of the boy he once was. As the sixties become a violent decade, his alcoholic father, Antonio, makes plans that include selling the home Tony loves and keeping their family on the move. Then, in June of 1968, Robert Kennedy is assassinated. Antonio reveals that the assassin, Sirhan Sirhan, was his busboy at the Ambassador Hotel. Young Tony fears that his own absence in the hospital, and his degraded condition was a catalyst for a relationship that included his father accompanying Sirhan to practice shooting at a local shooting range. The family unit descends into one of alcohol-infused dysfunction. Tony battles through it with humor and a quirky philosophy until he's hired by the phone company as a toll operator, now needed, valued, and no longer viewed as a cripple.

About The Author

Tony Gonzalez earned his first writing award for the novella Short Order while studying theatre in college. He also gained playwriting experience there when his original musical Shakespeare’s a Bore, was performed, earning great reviews as well as fostering a love of comedic writing. Moving on from college, he was awarded a fellowship to study acting with Margo Albert. He became a member of the Plaza De La Raza Players, studied at Lincoln Park and toured throughout the Los Angeles area. He soon gained professional status by becoming a member of Actors’ Equity. This proved to be a very rewarding experience that included traveling to San Diego and being involved with the Los Angeles Music Center’s performance of A Christmas Carol. As other opportunities developed, Jacque Faure, an associate of then Los Angeles mayor, Tom Bradley, took Tony’s two-act play Life Minus E to a run at Guy Stockwell’s Stage II Theatre on Melrose Avenue. Around this time he received an award from the American Song Festival for his song Never Loved Before. His recent writing awards include the International Film Competition Festival’s Silver Award for Yonder. Other awarded screenplays include The Piano Gospel, which is a 2018 finalist in the Kairos Prize Award for spiritually uplifting screenplays as well as best screenplay in the Christian Film Festival and finalist status in many other film festivals, including: The Page Awards and Fresh Voices. Additionally, his screenplay “Damascus” earned recognition in the International Family and Faith Screenwriting competition. Tony has produced and written television commercials for the caregiving community in Reno, Nevada as well as performed as on-air talent for local music station, KUUB. He is currently working on an 80,000 word piece of non-fiction with renowned author/editor Lisa Dale Norton. Plans are in the works for a digital comedy series, Pudgy’s Place.

Target Audiences

Age: 13-17,55+,18-34,35-54

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Historians

Publishing Details

Status: No

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

Information not completed

Genre

DRAMA

Brief

Tony was once a carefree boy until he lands in the hospital for 5 months. His hip is destroyed and now he has a limp. He continues towards adulthood facing typical issues faced by any teenager in the late 60's, early 70's. His limitations prevent him from becoming an airline pilot.

Overall Rating

GOOD

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: GOOD

Premise: FAIR

Structure: GOOD

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes, the book profile accurately reflects the book.

Draw of Story

The story is from a young boy's perspective, learning about the world but experiencing a life altering event. His time spent in hospitals, needing operations is compelling especially set in the 1960's.

Possible Drawbacks

This is an average story. It is a coming of age story about a young boy. There isn't much conflict in Tony's life to make for a riveting plot.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

Tony faces many physical challenges but overcomes and goes off to lead a normal life. This movie would be a coming of age story that is generally introspective and informative which is a change of pace from the normal film fare.

Fanbase Potential

This would not have a large fanbase. There is little to grip the audience. It is about a young white privileged boy who faces some difficult moments but moves forward to live a normal life.

Awards Potential

This does not have awards potential. The story is average and lacks inspiration. It is a chapter in Tony's world but outside of his physical difficulties, there is nothing overtly interesting.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

LADY BIRD

What’s New About the Story

The story is original in its' perspective of Tony's time in the hospital. He is 10 years old, not grasping all that his happening to him or around him. His viewpoint is intriguing considering he would now be considered disabled.

Lead Characters

Tony is a young white boy growing up lower, middle class in the 1960's. He has all of the same questions, issues and thoughts related to a boy of his time. There is nothing inherently unique about him.

Uniqueness of Story

This is an average story. It is a coming of age story about a young boy. There isn't much conflict in Tony's life to make for a riveting plot.

Possible Formats

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

This story needs more gravitas. Tony's time in the hospital and coming to terms with his disability is interesting but he leads a relatively normal life afterwards. Teenage angst and family problems are normal but nothing extraordinary. This could translate to screen with the right vision. It is character driven so the right direction of the story, focusing on Tony's emotional growth could create more depth.