The Substance of Things Hoped For: A Novel
DRAMA POLITICAL RELIGIOUS HISTORICAL FICTION CRIME ROMANCE
19th Century
Tom Noyes
Submision Type
book
Logline
For a brief time in mid-19th century Oneida, New York, two of the most eccentric and fascinating figures in American history crossed paths when troubled soul and soon-to-be presidential assassin Charles Guiteau threw in his lot with John Humphrey Noyes’s utopian community of “free love” believers.
Genre
Drama,Political,Religious,Historical Fiction,Crime,Romance
Short Summary
CHARLES GUITEAU, a new resident of the Oneida Commune, follows the commune’s founder and leader, JOHN NOYES, into the woods one morning to interrogate him about a sermon Noyes has delivered. Guiteau’s words and actions unnerve and intrigue Noyes, who carries in his pocket two fateful letters.
Setting
New York, Vermont, Niagara Falls, Washington D.C.
Based on a True Story
Yes
Plot - Premise
Tragedy,Quest,Internal Journey/Rebirth
Plot - Other Elements
Philosophical Questions,Meaningful Message,Other
Mature Audience Themes
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Main Character Details
Name: John Humphrey Noyes
Age: 12–70 (Novel covers parts of 7 decades.)
Gender: Male
Role: Antagonist
Key Traits: Aspiring,Aggressive,Narcisstic,Complex,Crazy,Religious,Power Hungry,Empathetic,Outspoken,Faithful,Visionary,Manipulative,Leader,Confident,Decisive,Engaging,Gracious,Educated,Seductive
Additional Character Details
Name: Charles Guiteau
Age: 20–40 (Novel covers parts of several decades.)
Gender: Male
Role: Antagonist
Key Traits: Aspiring,Villainous,Aggressive,Narcisstic,Complex,Crazy,Religious,Criminal,Desperate,Power Hungry,Empathetic,Funny,Engaging,Visionary,Insecure,Naive,Unapologetic,Manipulative,Lone Wolf
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Genre
RELIGION, POLITICS, DRAMA
Brief
While John Noyes creates a community based on free love, Charles Guiteau takes refuge in this community to exchange spiritual thoughts with the religious leader. The two start to relate, but Charles decides to end the romance and leaves the community at some point. After years, Charles will be responsible for President Garfield's death, while John leaves his own community and travels to another country far from his people.
Overall Rating
GOOD
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: GOOD
Characterization: GOOD
Commerciality: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Pace: FAIR
Premise: GOOD
Structure: FAIR
Theme: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
The author describes John and Charles as the story's antagonists, but they are actually the protagonists, even if anti-heroes.
Draw of Story
The early backstory sequence of John's life is touching and quite well written. We understand how that family works and how George's death actually affected John's psychological and life.
Possible Drawbacks
The structure is confusing and ends up taking away some of the emotion of reading. With each new chapter, a new narrator tells a part of the story from his perspective. This choice helps us understand the whole story without a single bias. However, it takes away the empathy we could feel for the main character and makes the narrative truncated.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The meeting of a religious leader from a hippie community and the murder of President Garfield is a fascinating premise.
Fanbase Potential
If adapted more clearly, with a better-structured narrative and a character that we could follow without further interference, I believe so. The two personalities have the appeal to attract a larger audience.
Awards Potential
If the story were even more loaded with drama, the meeting of these two emblematic figures could indeed have the potential for awards.
Envisioned Budget
MEDIUM BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
MIDSOMMAR: A GROUP OF FRIENDS VISITS A RELIGIOUS COMMUNITY, AND THEIR ENDS IS TRAGIC. THE COMMUNE: A COMMUNITY THAT TRIES TO SURVIVE PERSONAL TASTES, SOLIDARITY, AND TOLERANCE IN THE 70S.
What’s New About the Story
The encounter between these two iconic characters brings authenticity to the story of the murder of the president, and also to the story of the religious leader of alternative communities. Both stories together make the plot more original.
Lead Characters
The backstories of both make us understand a little of their personality and why they took the steps they did. The dialogues give them exclusive voices. While John is good at talking, Charles ends up becoming more and more lost in his dialogues. Characters are powerful in their developments.
Uniqueness of Story
It's not a rare gem. It has many good elements, but the structure in collective narration ends up taking some of the shine out of the narrative.
Possible Formats
Film: Streaming, Indie, Studio
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
The author has a great premise. Characters are already well built, well written, with unique voices, good dialogues that even show the emotional state of each one. The meeting of two outstanding characters is exciting and attractive. Universes, shaped by faith and spirituality, are also attractive. And the way they both relate and end up influencing the other's future is also enjoyable. However, despite being well written, having good characters, having a premise that guarantees a great story, the narrative does not take off. When we start a chapter, we get in touch with the universe of that character and the problems and situations related to him. The first-person perspective helps us enter that character's private universe. However, when we are familiar with that universe, those rules, and characters, we are sent to another place, with new characters, a new perspective, and new rules. This coming and going makes reading more complicated and prevents the reader from feeling the story deeply. Having multiple points of view is interesting when we want to discover something, analyze a case without the bias of a single character. However, since the stories of these two characters are already popular, this artifice loses its impact and makes the narrative less intense, without drama. A change in the narrative structure, with a more linear story (not necessarily chronologically), would make the meeting of both characters more touching and impactful.