The Last

Tina Farr farrtammy58@yahoo.com 4373093515418

GOTHIC

2000s

Tina Farr

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Logline

Vampires are cruel, merciless seducers who can kill you without an ounce of remorse. They are bitter, foul creatures who can take everything from you in a second. Caught between heaven and hell, Tristan is facing his own truths for survival and is out to quench the thirst in his soul.

Genre

Gothic

Short Summary

Tristan meets a woman in the Jazz club, who seduces him and then leaves him for dead...but he survives.


Tristan follows a look-alike to a hotel room where he finds out that his lover is still alive, and hates him for trying to kill her.

Setting

Detroit, Michigan

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Internal Journey/Rebirth

Plot - Other Elements

Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Extreme Violence,Nudity, Language/Profanity,Substance Abuse

Main Character Details

Name: Tristan Moore

Age: 38 (125)

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Charming,Sexy,Masculine,Confident,Engaging,Naive,Religious,Skillful,Seductive,Manipulative

Additional Character Details

Name: Tiffany Raven

Age: (?)

Gender: Female

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Flexible,Leader,Sexy,Villainous,Seductive,Secretive,Sophisticated,Manipulative,Unapologetic

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Development Pitch

The Last is a refreshing update to the Vampire Genre. It has an interesting protagonist and a mysterious antagonist. Most of the side characters have interesting backgrounds. The vampires have amazing powers. And the story sets up perfectly for a sequel or a series. There are more books to come.

About The Author

Before retirement, Tina Farr was a driver who dreamed of being a writer. She started writing when she was just 15 years old, inspired by her love of Urban literature. The Last is Tina's first novel to be published, and will not be her last.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Self-Published

Year Published: 2018

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

Information not completed

Genre

SUSPENSE, THRILLER, DRAMA, FANTASY, ROMANCE, MATURE AUDIENCE

Brief

Tristan Moore is an man turned into a charming vampire by seductive Tiffany Raven, a jazz singer that is also a deadly vampire. Looking for meaning in his living and regretting having killed Raven, Tristan is surprised to know she is still alive.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

FIRST PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: FAIR

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

Book profile reflects the book properly, however it could bring along more details about the story itself.

Draw of Story

The search for meaning in Tristan's life, a charming and merciless vampire who violently kills his victims, is interesting because his loneliness is evident as much as his incapability of controlling his hunger for blood.

Possible Drawbacks

There are some mistakes in sentences such as ""all violent men are not alcoholics"" which certainly meant ""not all violent men are alcoholics"" so the book doesn't seem revised. Passages are too fast and the development of the protagonist's personality is not coherent - even considering his duality of feelings. Tristan has some patterns of behavior, but as the story unfolds he shows different methods for killing. His personality should be more solid.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The story may bring along audience as seductive vampires such as the protagonist Tristan and his love interest Raven are enticing enough, in general, as well as interesting aesthetics from scenes set in jazz clubs in the 30's.

Fanbase Potential

This story could also have a large fanbase as it is a new story in the vampire/gothic niche.

Awards Potential

This story could have awards potential if scenes and passages are more developed. Scenes would also demand creativity from special-effects team especially regarding Tristan's victims, as he invades their minds and bring along childhood fears and flashbacks.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

THE VAMPIRE DIARIES, LUCIFER, THE TWILIGHT SAGA

What’s New About the Story

There is a need for a more solid development of characters. The idea of vampires that believe in God and pray, even before killing a victim, is interesting and original, however its development is not coherent or explored enough during the narrative.

Lead Characters

Tristan Moore becomes a vampire after being seduced by Raven. The more he kills, the more attractive he gets. Sex scenes add up to the atmosphere of seductiveness of the protagonist. His duality is also interesting, as he kills and prays to God, is a loner but also seeks for companion and misses the woman he killed. Raven is also interesting because she is seductive and the audience is unable to say if she is his partner or antagonist.

Uniqueness of Story

This story could be improved by having a better development of characters and making their behaviours, even dubious, solid during the narrative. Passages could also be more detailed and victims' pasts could be explored into detail adding up richness to this which I consider one of the greatest strengths of the narrative.

Possible Formats

Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Cable, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series, TV Series - Network, TV Series - Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

The characters dubious behavior and the idea of exploring traumas and fears of the victims is interesting, especially if it aims to become a series, however the narrative lacks development and structure.