Two scoops, not Three

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OTHER COMEDY EROTICA ROMANCE

Contemporary

Terri Boas

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Logline

Sometimes, finding the perfect combination involves sampling a few flavours . . Briony, Natalie and Lauren are in their early, 30’s and have been best friends since school. Over a series of events in May 2017, the girls find that their friendships are challenged and will never be the same again.

Genre

Other,Comedy,Erotica,Romance

Short Summary

You meet Briony in a carwash where she has forgotten to close the sunroof and gets soaked through. She returns to her flat to find Lauren has returned, from her most recent cruise ship contract. Married Natalie, is at her spin instructor Jason's flat, after having had a midday romp with him.


Natalie breaks it off with Jason after he involuntarily ties her up with a TRX suspension strap. She loses his baby. Lauren reveals to Briony that she is in love with her and Briony realises that deep down, she has always loved Lauren. Briony and Lauren sing, 'I know him so well' on the karaoke.

Setting

A fictional town in South East England.

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Other

Plot - Other Elements

Meaningful Message

Mature Audience Themes

Nudity

Main Character Details

Name: Briony Jane Greene

Age: 34

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Clumsy,Desperate,Faithful,Funny,Romantic

Additional Character Details

Name: Natalie Stevenson

Age: 34

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Sexy,Secretive,Manipulative,Funny

Additional Character Details

Name: Lauren Newland

Age: 34

Gender: Female

Role: protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Confident,Engaging,Sexy,Outspoken

Additional Character Details

Name: Jason

Age: 30's

Gender: Male

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Aggressive,Charming,Confident,Heartthrob,Masculine,Sexy

Development Pitch

This is a very contemporary story about love and friendship. Through the three main characters who have very different personalities, we see the importance of friendship, and the challenges that these women face together. The characters and their situations are very relatable, true to life, and a bit sexy too. Eternally single Briony is looking for love, long-term, married, mum, Natalie, is having an affair with spin instructor, Jason and Lauren has conflicting feelings about who could be her ‘Mrs Right’. As a TV series this would be a modern day, twist, on Sex and the City. People will invest in Briony, Natalie and Lauren, and want to binge the episodes to see what the girls get up to next. Reader reviews have said that the characters are so relatable, and everyone knows someone just like either, Briony, Natalie, or Lauren. They'll become part of the household and friends of the audience. People will experience, empathise, enjoy and despair with the women. Leading female characters have proven to be very popular recently, with the successes of, Orange is the New Black, Dead To Me and You, Me, Her. Two scoops, not Three - will be a light and fluffy, true to life, show, where people will fall in love, with the leading women. They’ll look forward to the escapism, provided by the characters. Genre: Women’s Fiction Core Theme: Love and Friendship Time Period: 2017 Comparable Titles: Sex and the City & Bridget Jones’s Secret Diary

About The Author

Terri Boas lives in Hampshire, England, UK with her husband, Rich, daughter, Portia and Pud, the cat. She is a part-time Group Exercise Instructor at some of her local gyms. Two scoops, not Three is her debut novel. Terri is an Aries.

Target Audiences

Age: 35-54,55+

Target Gender: Female Leaning,Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Wrate's Publishing

Year Published: 2020

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

978-1-9996089-9-6

Genre

DRAMA, ROMANCE, LGBT

Brief

Natalie, Briony and Lauren have been best friends since childhood. Now as grown women, they try to navigate life. Natalie is having an affair with her personal trainer while Briony dates another jerk.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: FAIR

Premise: GOOD

Structure: GOOD

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes, the book profile accurately reflects the book.

Draw of Story

The story follows three best friends with a very close relationship. This will be relatable to many people, especially woman with strong female friendships.

Possible Drawbacks

The book does not have a central plot. It chronologizes a time period in these friends lives. The story has a slower pace because of it. Lauren felt like a supporting character instead of one of the three best friends. To avoid this there could be a common event that the friends were supposed to attend. The bombing at the Ariana Grande event is a turning point for the characters. They could possibly had planned to attend because of their share loved for the singer and because of a fight, they didn't. There needs to be something that ties them together besides drunken nights out.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that three best friends must navigate through the trials of life and accept the decisions they make. Will their friendship weather the change? I would watch this movie for the camaraderie and the strong female bonds. There are very realistic portrayals of woman who don't have their lives together and make mistakes.

Fanbase Potential

This could have a large fanbase. The story explores female friendships and the hard patches we all face in life. It also incorporates a real life tragedy and explores the emotions surrounding it. It also explores LGBTQAI relationships.

Awards Potential

This does not have awards potential. The plot is not gripping or groundbreaking and the character development is typical for this genre of story.

Envisioned Budget

LOW BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

SWEET MAGNOLIA, GIRL'S TRIP, WAITING TO EXHALE, SEX AND THE CITY

What’s New About the Story

The story is not original. It is about female friendships which has been done many times before. The only original element is that Lauren is a lesbian and that her and Briony end up together. If this were developed earlier in the story and the dynamics of the friendship were explored, it would be more unique.

Lead Characters

The lead characters do not stand out. They are three normal woman, living life the best they can. They make decisions that take them down a certain path and they deal with the consequences. They are relatable but not exceptional characters.

Uniqueness of Story

This not a rare gem. It could be improved by having a more diverse cast. The problems these women are facing in the plot are very stereotypical women issues. Natalie is feeling unwanted in her marriage and ends up sleeping with her personal trainer. Briony is constantly dating the wrong type of man and falls in with another one, inevitably getting hurt. There are lots of problems they could be facing but woman's worth is constantly tied to their relationship status. They could be having serious issues dealing with family or physical and mental health, issues that are more universal.

Possible Formats

Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, Film - Indie

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

For this to be a recommend there needs to be a stronger story. The characters are solid, even though lacking in diversity. The woman can be facing more hard hitting issues like illness, poverty, abuse, PTSD, abandonment, job harassments, death, etc. There could be more exploration of emotions in those situations that would also give it more awards potential.