BOB

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ACTION ADVENTURE COMEDY SCI-FI FUNNY FANTASY MYSTERY

1980s & '90s,Contemporary,Future

Tegon Maus

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Logline

Peter Anderson is sent to do a fluff piece about lights in the night sky over Arizona and becomes embroiled in a mystery with help from his driver BOB as guide and protector

Genre

Action,Adventure,Comedy,Sci-fi,Funny,Fantasy,Mystery

Short Summary

After 27 years as a newspaper man, Peter Anderson’s career is slipping away until he stumbled upon the story of a lifetime. Sent to do a fluff piece about lights in the night sky over Arizona, he discovers far more than he ever expected when he comes upon a mysterious young woman.


Peter Anderson is found battered, beaten and half naked and tells his story of UFO's, aliens, time travelers to doctors in a mental institution... uncertain if any of it had happened or not.

Setting

Arizona - March 1997

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending,Twist,Other

Mature Audience Themes

Nudity, Language/Profanity

Main Character Details

Name: Peter Anderson

Age: Mid 50's

Gender: Male

Role: Skeptic

Key Traits: Charming,Complex,Confident,Flexible,Educated,Honorable,Underdog,Modest,Skillful

Additional Character Details

Name: BOB

Age: early 40's

Gender: Male

Role: Sidekick

Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Leader,Unapologetic,Manipulative,Secretive,Sarcastic,Funny,Skillful,Outspoken,Blunt,Masculine

Additional Character Details

Name: Dr Thorpe

Age: mid 60's

Gender: Male

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Sophisticated,Secretive,Villainous,Masculine

Additional Character Details

Name: Emma Greenwood

Age: early 30's

Gender: Female

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Charming,Confident,Empathetic,Engaging,Flexible,Gracious,Educated,Unapologetic,Sophisticated,Seductive,Secretive,Funny,Skillful,Sexy,Modest

Development Pitch

BOB is a fast paced buddy story filled with fun characters who find themselves in more trouble with each new twist and turn. With the help of innumerable people that BOB calls cousins they escape one close call after another in a search for a mysterious young woman connected to the lights that appeared in the night sky over Arizona.

About The Author

Tegon Maus... I write quirky, funny stories about the oddities of everyday people. I have 7 titles at present and am carried by Tirgearr Publishing.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: with a Publisher

Publisher: Tirgearr Publishing

Year Published: 2014

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

Information not completed

Genre

ACTION, COMEDY, FANTASY

Brief

Peter is a journalist investigating an organization. They believe they have sighted some UFO and are being warned about a possible invasion. Bob, Peter's driver, aids him once he is wrapped up in the case. Peter tries to help Emma who is connected with the UFO and comes across a shoot out between two non human species.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

FIRST PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: EXCELLENT

Pace: GOOD

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes, the book profile accurately reflects the book.

Draw of Story

This story is very lighthearted. It is categorized as a buddy comedy which it is, with a sci-fi twist.

Possible Drawbacks

The story is predictable and the characters are stereotypical. Bob is a Russian who speaks and acts like every other Russian henchman character in media. He has a "cousin" to help with any situation. There should be more diverse characters with interesting characteristics. Bob could be a Nigerian "uncle" with similar characteristics. Aliens don't only visit American soil either.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that aliens are coming to Earth, with the help of Bob, they try to stop them from taking over. I would watch this movie for a fun, lighthearted tone. It's an escapism film with fun moments.

Fanbase Potential

This could have a large fanbase if it amassed a cult following. The story is not unique, but is still entertaining.

Awards Potential

This does not have awards potential. The story does not dive deeply into character development, science fiction or personal relationships. It is a two dimensional story.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

EVOLUTION, PAUL, NAPOLEON DYNAMITE, HOT FUZZ

What’s New About the Story

This story is not original. There have been many science fiction stories with similar storylines. It could be more unique if the setting was different and if Bob was not Russian.

Lead Characters

The lead character does not stand out. He is the straight person in opposition to Bob's character. Bob's character is a caricature of Russians for the purpose of the comedy and nothing more.

Uniqueness of Story

This is an average story that would still be entertaining. It could be improved by refreshing the typical formula.

Possible Formats

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

The settings need to change as well as putting more effort into character development. There are some fun moments between Peter and Bob but as a buddy comedy, there should be more. Bob is a caricature of a Russian character that feels outdated. There definitely could be some diversity explored with the character, both racially and with characteristics.