BOB
ACTION ADVENTURE COMEDY SCI-FI FUNNY FANTASY MYSTERY
1980s & '90s,Contemporary,Future
Tegon Maus
Submision Type
book
Logline
Peter Anderson is sent to do a fluff piece about lights in the night sky over Arizona and becomes embroiled in a mystery with help from his driver BOB as guide and protector
Genre
Action,Adventure,Comedy,Sci-fi,Funny,Fantasy,Mystery
Short Summary
After 27 years as a newspaper man, Peter Anderson’s career is slipping away until he stumbled upon the story of a lifetime. Sent to do a fluff piece about lights in the night sky over Arizona, he discovers far more than he ever expected when he comes upon a mysterious young woman.
Setting
Arizona - March 1997
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Overcoming Monster/Villain
Plot - Other Elements
Happy Ending,Twist,Other
Mature Audience Themes
Nudity, Language/Profanity
Main Character Details
Name: Peter Anderson
Age: Mid 50's
Gender: Male
Role: Skeptic
Key Traits: Charming,Complex,Confident,Flexible,Educated,Honorable,Underdog,Modest,Skillful
Additional Character Details
Name: BOB
Age: early 40's
Gender: Male
Role: Sidekick
Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Leader,Unapologetic,Manipulative,Secretive,Sarcastic,Funny,Skillful,Outspoken,Blunt,Masculine
Additional Character Details
Name: Dr Thorpe
Age: mid 60's
Gender: Male
Role: antagonist
Key Traits: Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Sophisticated,Secretive,Villainous,Masculine
Additional Character Details
Name: Emma Greenwood
Age: early 30's
Gender: Female
Role: emotional
Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Charming,Confident,Empathetic,Engaging,Flexible,Gracious,Educated,Unapologetic,Sophisticated,Seductive,Secretive,Funny,Skillful,Sexy,Modest
Genre
ACTION, COMEDY, FANTASY
Brief
Peter is a journalist investigating an organization. They believe they have sighted some UFO and are being warned about a possible invasion. Bob, Peter's driver, aids him once he is wrapped up in the case. Peter tries to help Emma who is connected with the UFO and comes across a shoot out between two non human species.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: GOOD
Characterization: FAIR
Commerciality: FAIR
Franchise Potential: EXCELLENT
Pace: GOOD
Premise: GOOD
Structure: FAIR
Theme: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes, the book profile accurately reflects the book.
Draw of Story
This story is very lighthearted. It is categorized as a buddy comedy which it is, with a sci-fi twist.
Possible Drawbacks
The story is predictable and the characters are stereotypical. Bob is a Russian who speaks and acts like every other Russian henchman character in media. He has a "cousin" to help with any situation. There should be more diverse characters with interesting characteristics. Bob could be a Nigerian "uncle" with similar characteristics. Aliens don't only visit American soil either.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that aliens are coming to Earth, with the help of Bob, they try to stop them from taking over. I would watch this movie for a fun, lighthearted tone. It's an escapism film with fun moments.
Fanbase Potential
This could have a large fanbase if it amassed a cult following. The story is not unique, but is still entertaining.
Awards Potential
This does not have awards potential. The story does not dive deeply into character development, science fiction or personal relationships. It is a two dimensional story.
Envisioned Budget
MEDIUM BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
EVOLUTION, PAUL, NAPOLEON DYNAMITE, HOT FUZZ
What’s New About the Story
This story is not original. There have been many science fiction stories with similar storylines. It could be more unique if the setting was different and if Bob was not Russian.
Lead Characters
The lead character does not stand out. He is the straight person in opposition to Bob's character. Bob's character is a caricature of Russians for the purpose of the comedy and nothing more.
Uniqueness of Story
This is an average story that would still be entertaining. It could be improved by refreshing the typical formula.
Possible Formats
Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Streaming
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
The settings need to change as well as putting more effort into character development. There are some fun moments between Peter and Bob but as a buddy comedy, there should be more. Bob is a caricature of a Russian character that feels outdated. There definitely could be some diversity explored with the character, both racially and with characteristics.