The Krybosian Stairpath

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ADVENTURE FAMILY FANTASY CHILDREN'S

2000s

S.R.R. Colvin

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Logline

Enter a world of wonder deep inside the earth as 11-year-old geologist Madison Terrence follows her pet gopher down a stairpath portal she discovers in her family’s cavern. When she descends the Krybosian Stairpath, a mystery from her family’s past begins to unravel. She soon realizes her arrival in

Genre

Adventure,Family,Fantasy,Children's

Short Summary

A shadowy figure from her family’s past stalks Madison on the last day of the school year then a hovering figure of a small person appears inside her backyard cavern. When a stairpath portal opens in the cavern, Madison follows her pet gopher down into another world.


After helping deliver Krybos from the forces that drew her there, Madison learns that the queen is her grandmother. Her grandfather had been there before and battled the same foe. Maintaining balance between the worlds only allows brief visits so he had to return to the surface as Madison now must.

Setting

Caves of western Virginia and the interior world of Krybos

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain,Voyage and Return

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Madison Terrence

Age: 11

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Decisive,Confident,Sophisticated,Educated,Adventurous

Additional Character Details

Name: Onyx Ruiz

Age: 11

Gender: Female

Role: Sidekick

Key Traits: Adventurous,Confident,Educated

Additional Character Details

Name: Mica Terrence

Age: 8

Gender: Male

Role: sidekick

Key Traits: Charming,Skillful,Sarcastic

Additional Character Details

Name: Mourgla

Age: 50

Gender: Male

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Criminal,Villainous,Power Hungry

Development Pitch

The Krybosian Stairpath would adapt beautifully to the screen as its wondrous geologic features are key to the story. Scenes throughout the book would easily translate to a visually cinematic work.

About The Author

S. R. R. Colvin grew up in the karst topography of western Virginia where her fascination for geology and caves flourished. Her interest in the subject was fueled by geology study in college. As a mother of three and grandmother of nine, she has a love of books for young people.

Target Audiences

Age: 7-12

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: iUniverse

Year Published: 2009

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

978-1-4401-5927-5

Genre

FANTASY, ACTION

Brief

Two young siblings with some bizarre familiar traditions and strange abilities are one day confronted with a fantastical subterranean world, where they find more about themselves and fight an evil force.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

It does, but the logline is incomplete, lacking a piece at the end.

Draw of Story

The mysteries surrounding the protagonist's family and their strange connection to geology.

Possible Drawbacks

The actions are too predictable and the story lacks a bit of complexity. To improve in these areas, some aspects would have to be further developed.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

A magical subterranean world.

Fanbase Potential

It could, especially among children interested in fantastical stories.

Awards Potential

Not really. For fantasy and children movie awards, the story feels a little too simplistic as it is now.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

THE HARRY POTTER MOVIES - A CHILD FINDS OUT A WHOLE NEW MAGICAL WORLD AND DISCOVERS THE SIZE OF HIS OWN IMPORTANCE IN IT. CITY OF EMBER - THE FILM HAPPENS IN A CITY THAT EXISTS ENTIRELY UNDER THE GROUND

What’s New About the Story

The whole concept of a magical world based on geology, which is very interesting. However, this new reality could be better explored and developed.

Lead Characters

Madison is a young girl who seems to know and remember everything. Even if she suffers bullying at school, she still feels proud of herself and does everything she can to find out about her family's mysterious secrets.

Uniqueness of Story

Not really. The premise has some potential, but it requires a lot of editing and rewriting to become something really unique.

Possible Formats

Film - Streaming, Film - Studio

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

First, there is not really much development to what seems to be a very complex fantastical world, but that ends up sounding too childish and simplistic. The book should provide more information about this world's rules, characteristics and inhabitants for it to be compelling in an adaptation. Also, the actions and dialogue are too direct, sometimes without any subtlety, something that could enrich the narrative. It would require some revisions for the book's events to feel more engaging, and maybe even adding more elements to the story itself. Finally, even though the premise is interesting and different, the narrative goes through a predictable path and doesn't stand out among so many other stories just like this one. For the narrative to be successfully adapted, it would need to find its own differential aspects, that could engage young viewers and maybe even create a general interest in a franchise.