The Krybosian Stairpath
Logline
Enter a world of wonder deep inside the earth as 11-year-old geologist Madison Terrence follows her pet gopher down a stairpath portal she discovers in her family’s cavern. When she descends the Krybosian Stairpath, a mystery from her family’s past begins to unravel. She soon realizes her arrival in
Genre
Adventure,Family,Fantasy,Children's
Short Summary
A shadowy figure from her family’s past stalks Madison on the last day of the school year then a hovering figure of a small person appears inside her backyard cavern. When a stairpath portal opens in the cavern, Madison follows her pet gopher down into another world.
After helping deliver Krybos from the forces that drew her there, Madison learns that the queen is her grandmother. Her grandfather had been there before and battled the same foe. Maintaining balance between the worlds only allows brief visits so he had to return to the surface as Madison now must.
Setting
Caves of western Virginia and the interior world of Krybos
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Overcoming Monster/Villain,Voyage and Return
Plot - Other Elements
Happy Ending
Mature Audience Themes
Information not completed
Main Character Details
Name: Madison Terrence
Age: 11
Gender: Female
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Decisive,Confident,Sophisticated,Educated,Adventurous
Additional Character Details
Name: Onyx Ruiz
Age: 11
Gender: Female
Role: Sidekick
Key Traits: Adventurous,Confident,Educated
Additional Character Details
Name: Mica Terrence
Age: 8
Gender: Male
Role: sidekick
Key Traits: Charming,Skillful,Sarcastic
Additional Character Details
Name: Mourgla
Age: 50
Gender: Male
Role: antagonist
Key Traits: Criminal,Villainous,Power Hungry
Development Pitch
The Krybosian Stairpath would adapt beautifully to the screen as its wondrous geologic features are key to the story. Scenes throughout the book would easily translate to a visually cinematic work.
Genre
FANTASY, ACTION
Brief
Two young siblings with some bizarre familiar traditions and strange abilities are one day confronted with a fantastical subterranean world, where they find more about themselves and fight an evil force.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: GOOD
Commerciality: GOOD
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Pace: FAIR
Premise: GOOD
Structure: FAIR
Theme: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
It does, but the logline is incomplete, lacking a piece at the end.
Draw of Story
The mysteries surrounding the protagonist's family and their strange connection to geology.
Possible Drawbacks
The actions are too predictable and the story lacks a bit of complexity. To improve in these areas, some aspects would have to be further developed.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
A magical subterranean world.
Fanbase Potential
It could, especially among children interested in fantastical stories.
Awards Potential
Not really. For fantasy and children movie awards, the story feels a little too simplistic as it is now.
Envisioned Budget
LARGE BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
THE HARRY POTTER MOVIES - A CHILD FINDS OUT A WHOLE NEW MAGICAL WORLD AND DISCOVERS THE SIZE OF HIS OWN IMPORTANCE IN IT. CITY OF EMBER - THE FILM HAPPENS IN A CITY THAT EXISTS ENTIRELY UNDER THE GROUND
What’s New About the Story
The whole concept of a magical world based on geology, which is very interesting. However, this new reality could be better explored and developed.
Lead Characters
Madison is a young girl who seems to know and remember everything. Even if she suffers bullying at school, she still feels proud of herself and does everything she can to find out about her family's mysterious secrets.
Uniqueness of Story
Not really. The premise has some potential, but it requires a lot of editing and rewriting to become something really unique.
Possible Formats
Film - Streaming, Film - Studio
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
First, there is not really much development to what seems to be a very complex fantastical world, but that ends up sounding too childish and simplistic. The book should provide more information about this world's rules, characteristics and inhabitants for it to be compelling in an adaptation. Also, the actions and dialogue are too direct, sometimes without any subtlety, something that could enrich the narrative. It would require some revisions for the book's events to feel more engaging, and maybe even adding more elements to the story itself. Finally, even though the premise is interesting and different, the narrative goes through a predictable path and doesn't stand out among so many other stories just like this one. For the narrative to be successfully adapted, it would need to find its own differential aspects, that could engage young viewers and maybe even create a general interest in a franchise.