Outback Blues

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DRAMA CRIME ACTION MYSTERY

1980s & '90s,1960s & '70s

Steve Bowker

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Logline

When a small child goes missing from a local caravan park the local police must go to aboriginal settlements after the mother alleges it was an aboriginal woman that stole her son. With bad weather a disabled plane. The odds are against them finding the child.

Genre

Drama,Crime,Action,Mystery

Short Summary

the police are informed a child has been abducted from a local caravan park the police question guests and the parents the press hound the parents for details. Detective Sergeant Dan Wilson from Fitzroy C I B arrives on the scene making tensions tighten for parents and the local police .


Detective Jackson (Jacko) goes to darwin and uncovers a child selling Syndicat run by a doctor Andrew Peterman,after an altercatio and Jacko being shot he alerts his brother in Adelaide that Philip Benson abducted the child a wild attempt to stop Benson' flight from taking off, Philip is arrested

Setting

Information not completed

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Other

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending,Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Language/Profanity

Main Character Details

Name: Detective Jackson

Age: 28

Gender: Male

Role: Logical

Key Traits: Adventurous,Confident,Decisive,Heroic,Leader

Additional Character Details

Name: Sergeant Ian Morris

Age: 55

Gender: Male

Role: Tempter

Key Traits: Complex,Aggressive,Empathetic,Educated,Honorable,Leader

Additional Character Details

Name: Detective Dan Wilson

Age: 40

Gender: Other

Role: skeptic

Key Traits: Complex,Insecure

Additional Character Details

Name: Tanya Benson

Age: 25

Gender: Female

Role: logical

Key Traits: Charming,Confident,Empathetic,Educated,Blunt,Unapologetic

Development Pitch

About The Author

Steve Bowker has been writing books for 40 years is out back blues series runs over 6 books and if a fictional story and portrays a small town and local police and residence the first book outback blues pilot book was the last one written in the series but is the first book in the series. Steve Bowker now a director of film and scriptwriter has always seen Outback Blues as a great family and drama books.

Target Audiences

Age: 13-17,55+,18-34,35-54

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: with a Publisher

Publisher: xlibris

Year Published: 2016

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

Information not completed

Genre

DRAMA, ACTION

Brief

A baby is kidnapped in a quiet village where crimes rarely happen. The child's mother claims that the child was taken by an aborigine. After much investigation and false leads, the police discovers the baby's family is involved.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

He could use the Development Pitch section. He left it blank. The antagonist is also missing from the page.

Draw of Story

A baby is kidnapped by an aborigine in a caravan park. This beginning gives us at least thought-provoking elements to keep reading.

Possible Drawbacks

After a while, the investigation gets a little tiring since the whole story is based on it. The author could add other elements to the plot to give us some breathing between one scene of investigation and another.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The investigation, although a little tiring, is the hook. You want to know what happened to the kidnapped child.

Fanbase Potential

I don't think so. It is a story that lacks drama, more significant conflicts and sequence of actions, better character development. Besides, unfairly accusing an aborigine can produce the opposite effect on the audience.

Awards Potential

I don't think so. It is a story of police action that does not show conflicts or enough originality in its execution in order to have the potential for awards.

Envisioned Budget

LOW BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

THE WITCH: A BABY IS KIDNAPPED, AND THE STORY UNFOLDS AS A RESULT OF THIS DISAPPEARANCE. GONE BABY GONE - A KID IS KIDNAPPED, AND THE POLICE OFFICERS DISCOVER SHE WAS TAKEN BY HER OWN FATHER

What’s New About the Story

The aborigine's part brings a different air to a story that could only be a police action film. However, this choice could be further explored to increase tension.

Lead Characters

The characters are typical policemen, which is expected from the genre. However, some characters could be better presented. Wilson is an uncredible "villain" because he is a little cartoonish.

Uniqueness of Story

It is not a rare gem. The story seems to start with an intriguing suspense atmosphere involving the abduction of a baby by a tribe, but right after, it becomes a police investigation movie without much innovation.

Possible Formats

Film - Streaming, Film - Indie

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

If the author focuses more on the kidnapping, on the aborigines' proximity, on the mother who seems to be devastated, perhaps it would be a more intriguing story. It starts well, with a threatening atmosphere, but it quickly dissipates to make way for a rather tiring investigation, with the presence of many police officers. Many! To the point that you don't care so much about them. We don't care much about the mother because she is briefly introduced, so we don't know much about her. We don't care about the father for the same reason. We don't care about the detective because there are so many officers in the case that everything seems to lose focus and strength. Obviously, we want to discover who kidnapped the baby, but everything ends up being pure investigation, so we get tired of it quickly. It would be exciting if we could get to know this family better. Even if cliched, a backstory scene would fit right here to create some kind of empathy for this family. The investigation scenes could be interspersed with some sort of relief. The threatening atmosphere of the beginning could be maintained throughout the story, maintaining tension. And the final revelation is not interesting enough to make us breathless. In general, it has a good start, but it needs substantial improvement to become more relevant.