The Power of Us
The Power of Us centers around eighteen year old Cassidy and twenty-nine year old Harly. Each battle their own demons. For Cassidy it's self-doubt, for Harly, survivors guilt. Together they face these demons and fight for love despite all the obstacles. Get ready for an emotional rollercoaster.
Having lost her parents at age eleven, Cassidy grew up in foster care and focused solely on gaining acceptance to Columbia. Her end goal, internship at the New York Artefact. Harly, publisher for The Artefact, presents an opportunity to Cassidy's class ~ the internship of her dreams.
Halfway through Cassidy discovers a lump in her breast. Turns out it's fibrosis. On her wedding day she receives several calls from her doctor. When she returns his call, he tells her he needs to see her urgently... Cassidy faints. Book 2 picks up at this point.
Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Plot - Other Elements
Happy Ending,Meaningful Message,Twist
Mature Audience Themes
Main Character Details
Name: Cassidy Knite
Key Traits: Aspiring,Empathetic,Faithful,Gracious,Honorable,Insecure,Naive,Romantic,Religious,Modest
Additional Character Details
Name: Harly Ashbey
Key Traits: Charming,Confident,Decisive,Faithful,Gracious,Heartthrob,Honorable,Leader,Romantic,Outspoken,Blunt,Sexy,Masculine
Additional Character Details
Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Confident,Sexy,Outspoken
Additional Character Details
Key Traits: Aspiring,Badass,Confident,Funny,Skillful,Sophisticated
Cassidy is the girl most woman will relate to. She suffers from self-doubt but she's hard-working, smart, and while she starts out naive, she grows immensely throughout the story. She find her inner strength and channels it to fight for what she wants ~ a life with a man she loves. Harly is a complex character. He's smart, successful, good-looking and driven. But he suffers from an unusual survivors guilt. Eleven minutes after their birth, Harly's twin brother died. For most of his life, Harly sees Brighton (his brother) in his dreams. These dreams are so vivid that Harly feels like he has a relationship with Brighton. Due to this guilt, Harly's never allowed himself an emotional connection with anyone because he doesn't think he deserves more than he already has. Until he meets Cassidy. Their attraction is instant and as time passes, their relationship unfolds. But it isn't without complications. Harly's mother doesn't approve; Cassidy's nemesis from college (who is also her internship colleague) has a strong desire for Harly which she makes clear when propositions him in a club. A front-page scandal ignites Cassidy's self-doubt and she walks away from her one true love, believing he deserves better. This comes after Cassidy discovers a lump in her breast which her doctor confirms is fibrosis. Emy, Cassidy's best friend, convinces Cassidy that she's worthy and she returns to Harly. The wedding they both desperately want arrives but it ends with a devastating phone call...
Cassidy is an aspiring journalist holding on to her dead parent's dream that she one day she'd work at the paper The Artefact. When she scores an internship there , she is inexplicably drawn to her boss and he to her. Despite their power dynamic and age difference they cannot deny their love. The two overcome many obstacles in order to get married only to find out some startling health news.
Authors Writing Style: GOOD
Franchise Potential: EXCELLENT
Accuracy of Book Profile
For the most part each section of the book profile accurately reflects the storyline with each portion elaborating their respective points. It might be beneficial to leave out the cliffhanger from the short summary as book two is a separate entity and detracts from the focus of book one.
Draw of Story
The tension between the two's relationship is maintained with steady rising actions for a while. The possessiveness of Harly really does create an uncertainty about his intentions with Cassidy, and while it never crosses the line, the tension remains about it.
Having the two perspective of both members of the couple makes any semblance of jealousy lack tension as the other pov explains away the misunderstanding to the audience even though the characters fight over the misconception. This can create frustration in knowing both sides rather than creating tension about the security of their relationship.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that they are both lonely people who find each other and share the same passion about writing but are incompatible in so many ways so they have to work to smooth out the kinks. These differences include class, power dynamics and insecurities.
Given the right release date around Valentine's Day or Christmas, this could ave a decent chunk of an audience along the same romance fandom as Fifty Shades in size.
Given the romance genre being the main focus of the narrative, this is unlikely to win serious awards, but depending on the chemistry of the acting could win popular awards such as MTV Movie Awards.
Similar Films/TV Series
FIFTY SHADES OF GREY, ELEGY, SAFE HAVEN, AFTER, LIBERAL ARTS
What’s New About the Story
Cassidy's inner conflict about honoring her parents' wishes versus living her own life is an interesting concept that falls by the wayside when her romance becomes the main focus. Cassidy is passionate about writing, but much of her relationship that joined her with Harly doesn't actually involve writing mentorship. Harly's genius is spoken not shown. Showing their powerful connection in a common interest such as writing could help provide further depth to their relationship. Harly's inner conflict is interesting in his twin guilt, but perhaps too early in his life to feel relatable. By making his grief over his twin more recent and thus unexpected pressure in his work may make him more flawed and dimensional.
Cassidy is hardworking, loyal and a dreamer. Harly is demanding, generous and confident.
Uniqueness of Story
The threats to their relationship do not disrupt the couple in any type of true or escalating way which makes their engagement lack tension and slows the pacing. For example, Cassidy wanting to wait to marriage to honor her parents is broken by her without guilt and then she changes her mind without issue. This makes the concept confusing in its introduction as it becomes an inconsistent optional issue rather than a character development that affects their dynamic. By creating issues that can't be brushed aside and require work to be solved rather than just changing their minds, the relationship will feel more three-dimensional and solid but interesting with tension.
Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, Film - Studio
WORK IN PROGRESS
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
Cassidy goes through a clear transformation, but Harly doesn't seem to have an transformation despite his inner conflicts. Cassidy's inner conflict honoring her parents also involves writing so keeping her passion at the forefront above office gossip and boyfriend drama might help create a richer foundation for her connection with Harly.