Deborah Sampson, A Revolutionary Woman

Sigal Erez

Book Cover

GENRE

BIOGRAPHICAL DRAMA ACTION WAR MEMOIR POLITICAL

    Core Theme

    HOPE

    TIME PERIOD

    18th Century

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    BRAVEHEART (1995), THE PATRIOT (2000), THE MESSENGER: THE STORY OF JOAN OF ARC (1999)

    CHARACTER LIST

    DEBORAH SAMPSON: CHILD TO MIDDLE AGE. FIERCE, DETERMINED, INTELLIGENT, COMPASSIONATE, COURAGEOUS..

    JEREMIAH THOMAS: MALE. 30S. GUARDIAN.

    BENJAMIN THOMAS JR. TEENAGER. ADOPTIVE SIBLING.

    MATILDA THOMAS: TEENAGER. ADOPTIVE SIBLING.

    MRS. BEDFORD: 50S. MENTOR. GENERAL PATTERSON: 50S. AUTHORITY FIGURE.

    Logline

    The true story of the Revolutionary female soldier who disguised herself as a man to fight in the Revolutionary War.

    Genre

    Biographical,Drama,Action,War,Memoir,Political,Epic

    Target Audiences

    Age: 6 and under,7-12,13-17,18-34,35-54,55+

    Target Gender: Female Leaning,Universal

    Setting

    New England

    Based on a True Story

    Yes

    Starting Description

    We meet a poor family in Sharon, Mass in 1760. The father is unable to support his family, he cowards and leaves. The mother stays with 7 children. Unable to care for them herself, she places them in different homes. One of the siblings is young Deborah Sampson.

    Ending Description

    Our protagonist, who has moved from home to home and accomplished the unthinkable all while enduring incredible suffering and pain, ends up triumphant. She creates a new path for all women to follow.

    Pitch Adaptation

    Deborah Sampson was an intelligent and courageous young woman, taller than other woman and most men. We follow her journey as an orphan, one of 7 siblings separated to fight poverty alone. Moving from home to home, educating herself and understanding how this land became home to so many. We will watch as she commits herself to the idea of a free country. However, it is not just the story about a woman fighting under an assumed male identity. This story will take us back in time to feel what it was like to participate in the birth of a country. We will remember the African Americans, just recently emancipated from slavery, and fighting in the war - not yet knowing their own fate or future of freedom. Deborah Sampson is the story of a woman who disguised herself as a man to fight in the Revolutionary War. Through this experience, we immerse ourselves in the era in which America was able to gain independence from the British.

    WGA Number

    2052507 2020- 2115587

    Mature Audience Themes

    The author has not yet written this

    Plot - Other Elements

    Coming of Age,Happy Ending,Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions

    Plot - Premise

    Rebellion Against 'The One',Voyage and Return

    Main Character Details

    Name: Deborah Sampson

    Age: 20 until 60's

    Gender: Female

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Aspiring,Adventurous,Badass,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Underdog,Modest,Patriotic,Selfless,Outspoken,Skillful,Funny,Visionary,Strong Moral Code

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Benjamin Thomas

    Age: 40's

    Gender: Male

    Role: Mentor

    Key Traits: Leader,Patriotic,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Educated,Honorable,Strong Moral Code,Visionary,Selfless

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Ambrose

    Age: 20's

    Gender: Female

    Role: emotional

    Key Traits: Underdog,Aspiring,Empathetic,Faithful,Gracious,Honorable,Strong Moral Code,Visionary,Selfless,Modest

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Mrs. Bradford

    Age: 50's

    Gender: Male

    Role: mentor

    Key Traits: Religious,Faithful,Visionary,Patriotic,Aggressive,Confident,Engaging,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Strong Moral Code

    Supplemental Materials

    Information not completed

    Genre

    ACTION, DRAMA, WAR

    Brief

    In the 1780s, Deborah Sampson, eager to serve in the Revolutionary Forces, disguises herself as a man and becomes one of the War of Independence's greatest soldiers.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    THIRD PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: FAIR

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: FAIR

    Franchise Potential: FAIR

    Pace: FAIR

    Premise: GOOD

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: GOOD

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    Yes, it's accurate.

    Draw of Story

    Being the true story of a bold and daring woman who disguised herself as male to fight for the Revolutionary Forces during the War of Independence, DEBORAH SAMPSON offers insights into a past era and culture when feminism was a distant dream and the future was filled with hope. The script offers a nice balance between drama and action as it moves between moments of Deborah's personal life and relationships, and vivid scenes of intense the intense violence and chaos of war.

    Possible Drawbacks

    The script is extremely difficult to follow in how it is written and structured, and jumps around in time far too much. The story begins in Deborah's childhood and ends many decades later, yet the script is only 102 pages. A concise script is usually a great attribute but in this case, if the story is to be a biopic of Deborah Sampson and is to begin in her childhood, then the script will need to be much longer to adequately tell her story without hopping around time too much. In other words, the film must become an epic if it is to offer the viewer a satisfactory and immersive glimpse into Deborah's life as a whole -- an example of this done very well is BRAVEHEART (1995) -- but this will drastically increase the budget for such a film, and may harm its chances of development. Alternatively, if the script is to remain at 100 pages, the story should focus entirely on one specific and brief period in Deborah's life, ideally in her first months as a Revolutionary soldier, weaving in organically what backstory is required, and using this specific period of time to paint a portrait of Deborah's entire life. Other issues with this script include poor characterization and character depth, flat dialogue, and many typos and other similar errors that take away from the story.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    The hook is that this is a true story about a woman who pretended to be a man in order to fight for the country she loved. With the power of feminism in today's society coupled with the fact that even now women and LGBTQ+ people are still fighting for equality in society and the military make this a hot-topic film that merges feminism, drama and the action of war into a fascinating biopic sure to interest a modern audience.

    Fanbase Potential

    If adapted as a high-budget epic war biopic, this could have a fanbase as large as something similar like BRAVEHEART. As a shorter, more focused film, the prospective audience and fanbase will narrow.

    Awards Potential

    Yes, the awards community loves true-story biopics with a feminist message.

    Envisioned Budget

    LARGE BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    BRAVEHEART (1995), THE PATRIOT (2000), THE MESSENGER: THE STORY OF JOAN OF ARC (1999)

    What’s New About the Story

    Original about this story is that it is a biopic of a little-known woman who disguised herself as a man to fight for the country she loved. Otherwise the script follows a conventional approach to a war biopic but this works well in partnership with its unique premise.

    Lead Characters

    Deborah is a fierce, determined, intelligent and courageous woman who has a kind heart and strongly believe that all men and women are created equal. Her affection for slaves makes her a rare person in the society in which she lives. If anything, Deborah is too perfect and some flaws would bring her great depth. No other characters stand out.

    Uniqueness of Story

    No, this needs too much work across the board to be considered a rare gem.

    Possible Formats

    Film: Studio, Streaming

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    This script requires major improvements in every area if it is to be successful in the fiercely competitive high-budget feature-film marketplace.

    Tips for Improvement

    Everything needs improvement but most crucially the script needs to either be expanded into the territory of an epic to adequately portray Deborah's life without hopping around in time erratically; or the script should remain concise and focus on a more specific and brief period in Deborah's life.

    Brief

    In the 1780s, Deborah Sampson, eager to serve in the Revolutionary Forces, disguises herself as a man and becomes one of the War of Independence's greatest soldiers.

    What We Liked

    Being the true story of a bold and daring woman who disguised herself as male to fight for the Revolutionary Forces during the War of Independence, DEBORAH SAMPSON offers insights into a past era and culture when feminism was a distant dream and the future was filled with hope. The script offers a nice balance between drama and action as it moves between moments of Deborah's personal life and relationships, and vivid scenes of intense the intense violence and chaos of war. With the power of feminism in today's society, coupled with the fact that even now women and LGBTQ+ people are still fighting for equality in society and the military, make this a hot-topic film that merges feminism, drama and the action of war into a fascinating biopic sure to interest a modern audience.

    Film: A feature film is the ideal format for DEBORAH SAMPSON, and this script is already written as one. If fleshed out and turned into an epic war biopic with a high budget, it could the blockbuster hit of the summer, bringing to mind the massively successful BRAVEHEART (1995). What makes this script more unique and appropriate for today's diverse, progressive audiences is the film's focus on one woman's desire to fight for her country, a notion highly relevant in modern society where women are still fighting for equality and equal treatment in the military. With the script's mixture of high-stakes battle scenes, scenes of drama that cover Deborah's personal life and relationships, and the immersive nature of the script as a period piece, DEBORAH SAMPSON is a film with something to offer for almost everyone.

    TV: DEBORAH SAMPSON would make a unique and gripping TV series as it follows Deborah Sampson from idealistic youth to Revolutionary soldier to wife and mother, interspersing vivid scenes of thrilling battle with scenes of Deborah's personal life and relationships. Viewers would eagerly tune in to watch the stakes gradually raise until the War of Independence is won and Deborah is honored as a hero and legend-in-the-making.

    Key points:
    1) Feminist theme is highly relevant today
    2) Combines high-stakes action and drama effectively
    3) Based on a true, gripping story
    4) It has been a while since a big-budget war epic was released and there is a place in the marketplace for this
    5) A unique perspective on a much-covered historical period

    Synopsis

    1770, PLYMPTON, MA: YOUNG DEBORAH SAMPSON (10) and her six young siblings listen anxiously as their parents argue and their father leaves the family forever.

    Deborah’s grandmother explains to her that this is the new world and it is an exciting place to be and that great things are to come. The children are sent away to live with various family members.

    At 15 years old, Young Deborah works on a farm. She is friendly with the house slaves, and lives in a ranch in the colony of Middlesex. The widow who owns the ranch is old and frail. One night she leaves an envelope beside sleeping Deborah, looking sad.

    Deborah attends the widow’s funeral.

    Deborah meets JEREMIAH THOMAS in his home. He reads the letter written by the widow, which tells him about Deborah’s skills. Deborah says she will miss the cooking of her colored brothers and sisters, which rattles Jeremiah. His slave MARIANNE goes to pick up Deborah’s bag but Deborah picks it up and says she carries her own things, and that she likes the slave’s name.

    Deborah walks around the house, checking it out. She meets BENJAMIN THOMAS JR. in the living room, and then his sister MATHILDA, who makes fun of Benjamin.

    ONE YEAR LATER: On the farm Jeremiah teaches Deborah, now 16, how to create good soil by digging with his hands.

    Deborah is fetching supplies in the town when an explosion goes off and mayhem ensues as everyone panics and runs. Nearby battle commences as the British fight the Americans. That night, everyone is safe at home. Jeremiah is relieved Deborah is okay.

    FIVE YEARS LATER: Jeremiah and the family bid 18-year-old Deborah goodbye as she goes off out on her own.

    Deborah arrives at the town center of the Shawmut Peninsula. Wounded soldiers pass by.

    Deborah arrives at Boston New College. PROFESSOR HUNTINGTON greets her, impressed by her knowledge. Later, Deborah goes to a tavern, seeking the manager who is supposed to hire her. Soldiers and a rich man debate slavery. Deborah tells them that all people are created equal.

    1781, MIDDLEBOROUGH, MA: At a busy enlisting center, Deborah is disguised as a man and none of the men notice. She gives the enlisting officer a fake male name but a nearby enlistee notices her and the enlisting officer removes Deborah’s cap – her braids fall down and the disguise is broken. Some days later, Deborah goes to a different enlisting office, this time not disguised, and pretends to need to collect a uniform for a fake brother. She manages to get a uniform for her exact size.

    1782, BELLINGHAM, MA: Deborah, as Robert, fights with fellow soldiers against the Redcoats, shooting from afar. She fires and hits a redcoat.

    Months later, Deborah, as Robert, leads thirty infantrymen on an expedition. Deborah is shot in the leg. She does not allow the men to take off her trousers to treat the wound, and instead flees into the forest where she digs out the bullet with a knife and tends to the wound.

    1783, PHILADELPHIA, PA: On the battlefield Deborah and revolutionary soldiers are fired upon by canons. Deborah fires at a distance, killing the redcoat lieutenant. Big battle commences.

    Meanwhile, French GENERAL JEAN BAPTISTE arrives on a battleship. The French command center sends a letter to GEORGE WASHINGTON, who reads it and points at a battle map and says that Charleston and Savannah will end the war.

    In hospital, Deborah is eager to fight but the doctor tells her that they are about to win the war. Deborah writes a letter to her siblings telling them of her experience in the war and how she disguised herself as a man.

    Later, GENERAL PATTERSON calls Deborah into his office. He says that what she did is remarkable and she will be discharged honorably as history remembers the unconventional. Years later, Deborah has married a local farmer in Plympton, MA, and they have two young kids.

    About The Author

    Sigal Erez is an actress, screenwriter, and film producer born to a Moroccan/Jewish family. She best known for her starring role as Miranda in the 2000 American film Across the Line.