White Fright

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ACTION APOCALYPTIC POLITICAL WAR YOUNG ADULT SUSPENSE/THRILLER ROMANCE

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Sid De Beer

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Logline

An old enemy rears its head in the quest fro world domination and the CIA has to deal with numerous threats from this old enemy. Genre is a fiction novel about a CIA agent that thwarts numerous plans from the old enemy seeking to dominate the world

Genre

Action,Apocalyptic,Political,War,Young Adult,Suspense/Thriller,Romance

Short Summary

The President turned to his aides seated around in the situation room. His face white with fright. An exceptionally talented student came to the attention of the CIA station chief in Paris, France and recruited he became a ruthless killer in the line of duty.


Russia threatens ti launch a nuclear strike against the USA and the story ends with Russia and America on the cusp of a nuclear war.

Setting

Paris, France-Virginia USA

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Quest

Plot - Other Elements

Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Yonti Barr who uses multiple aliases on various missions

Age: 22-24

Gender: Male

Role: Logical

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Aggressive,Charming,Confident,Crazy,Decisive,Faithful,Heartthrob,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Lone Wolf,Strong Moral Code,Seductive,Secretive,Romantic,Visionary,Skillful,Patriotic,Obedient,Masculine,Engaging,Flexible

Additional Character Details

Name: Captain Bastienne Petit of the French Police

Age: Various

Gender: Male

Role: Mentor

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Aggressive,Confident,Heroic,Honorable,Leader,Strong Moral Code,Secretive,Visionary,Skillful,Selfless,Patriotic,Obedient,Masculine

Additional Character Details

Name: Stan Noble

Age: 50

Gender: Male

Role: logical

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Aggressive,Decisive,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Strong Moral Code,Visionary,Skillful,Masculine

Additional Character Details

The author has not yet written this

Development Pitch

THIS YOUNG MAN IS AN EXTREMELY IMPORTANT PERSON FOR THE FUTURE OF MANKIND.... The USA administration is heavily reliant of the CIA to ferret out any impending threat to that nation. Who knows what the consequences of multiple warheads exploding in space would be. Possible black out of the sun which would drastically effect life on earth leading to starvation within weeks of such an event.

About The Author

A Modern International CIA Thriller

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: with a Publisher

Publisher: Amazon

Year Published: 2021

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

Information not completed

Genre

ACTION, DRAMA

Brief

Yonti is recruited as a student in Paris by the CIA. He is trained to become a fighter on par with his exceptional mind. Under a new alias he helps the CIA monitor Russia and other perceived enemies. With nuclear weapons coming into the picture, Yonti realizes he also has something to loose now, his fiance Claire, which makes him vulnerable to attack.

Overall Rating

EXCELLENT

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: EXCELLENT

Pace: GOOD

Premise: GOOD

Structure: EXCELLENT

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The book profile does reflect the story although some of the sections could be condensed or expanded. The logline could take the explanation of genre and place that in the development pitch. The character details could also showcase the importance of Claire by adding her. The short summary can be a bit confusing in that the order makes it sound like the CIA of Yonti in that he went rogue and became a killer when it just means that he become trained. By clarifying that Yonti is a good guy or editing the syntax to make it clear that he was trained not a traitor this will simplify the profile implications to better match the story.

Draw of Story

Yonti's training and being thrown into the job is compelling. The pacing is great and the characters are likable. There is a mystery as to whether Yonti has what it takes and how long his secret identity will be safe and when it will cause danger.

Possible Drawbacks

The plot and pacing is pretty on par, although some of the dialogue when it is in a foreign language can be repetitive. For example if the character speaks in French they then speak the same translation, when in reality, the conversation would not have the translation. By making the meaning evident with context such as answering the correct response in English to a French question or simply saying for example " they were praising God in Arabic" rather than having characters self-translate.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that Yonti is a french student recruited by the CIA who has multiple alias that are needed to stop a nuclear war. He is talented and fresh at the job, but ends up losing a lot in the process when it comes to a normal life and some of the people he works with.

Fanbase Potential

This genre as an action film or series could have a large fanbase with further developed side characters to make the action hero dynamics even more distinct.

Awards Potential

Although it could be popular due to the action genre, the same genre may limit the prestige awards it may be nominated for. This might win for popular awards however.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

ALIAS, 24, JACK RYAN, BOURNE IDENTITY, THE SUM OF ALL FEARS, TOP GUN

Whatโ€™s New About the Story

The originality stems from the unique skill set that Yonti has both in computers and in combat. He is able to be an expert but also new at the same time thus useful and learning.

Lead Characters

Yonti is hardworking, naturally skilled, and smart. Claire is hopeful and calm. Stan is patient and calculating.

Uniqueness of Story

This has a ton of potential for development with a bit more added to flesh out the side characters to make them dynamic rather than static.

Possible Formats

Film: Studio, Indie, Streaming TV Series: Network, Cable, Limited Run / Mini-Series, Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

Adding more proactive influence to the side characters and or transformations as to their own inner conflicts would strengthen the dynamics and dialogue of the character interactions to be more distinct. Creating a consistent antagonist may also help increase emotional attachment and consistent rising tension rather than pacing that increases at intervals.