Peregrination Book 1: Earth

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ADVENTURE FANTASY RELIGIOUS ROMANCE

Across Centuries

SG Boudreaux

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Logline

Seth is chosen to travel through time by way of storms that generate enough power to open portals that lead to other periods, planes, and realms. He and others like him must battle demons, personal struggles, and find people and artifacts that will help them to save mankind from destruction.

Genre

Adventure,Fantasy,Religious,Romance

Short Summary

The evening before the destructive and deadly San Francisco, California, earthquake that leveled the city. The main character, Seth Jager, is a sea captain who now works on tugboats in the San Francisco bay. He stopped traveling the seas to settle down and court a woman named Caroline Palmer.


Seth is now time-traveling with other Peregrines searching for a lost person who is important to their winning the prophesied Final Battle. He is also desperate to get back to Caroline, his wife of one night before they were separated by an earthquake. He doesn't even know if she's alive.

Setting

Varies because of the time-travel aspect. But begins with the 1906 California earthquake

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending,Meaningful Message

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Seth Jager

Age: 27

Gender: Male

Role: Logical

Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Confident,Honorable,Masculine,Blunt

Additional Character Details

Name: Caroline Palmer

Age: 25

Gender: Female

Role: Emotional

Key Traits: Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Faithful,Gracious,Educated,Religious,Selfless,Romantic

Additional Character Details

Name: Simon Lane

Age: 53

Gender: Male

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Adventurous,Confident,Complex,Engaging,Empathetic,Faithful,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Outspoken,Strong Moral Code

Additional Character Details

Name: Jason Marshal

Age: 40

Gender: Male

Role: sidekick

Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Confident,Decisive,Faithful,Honorable,Leader,Strong Moral Code,Skillful,Outspoken,Religious,Patriotic

Development Pitch

There are four characters in book 1 known as Peregrines who travel through time by way of storms that generate enough power to open time portals. They search for artifacts and people that their Dragoman mentors lead them to find. They discover ancient civilizations, new, undiscovered places, and have adventures that can be deadly. Seth is still trying to find a way back to his home and life with his wife of seven hours, Caroline. Separated by a severe earthquake and transported to a world of unbelievable things and people in the giant city known as Garganthera, in 1500 BC at Barriers Edge, he had no choice but to go along with this way of life. As Seth and his fellow travelers walk the earth and realms through other dimensions and planes, they must battle demons to accomplish their missions.While living and learning this new way of life, he secretly hopes of learning how to find a way to get back to Caroline. Seth learns things about himself, and how to trust others. He must learn to fight with weapons, and how to take on more than one person or demon at a time. He also learns to be careful what he says because demons use his spoken words to torment and trick him. He must learn to trust his new friends in ways he has never trusted anyone before. The story also follows the lives of the other characters and their POVs. Also transported by the earthquake of 1906, unknown to Seth, Caroline finds herself in 1580, Dover, England, tended to by an orphaned sixteen year old girl.

About The Author

S G Boudreaux, born Shawna Gaile Blake (1970) in West Virginia, is a stay at home mom who homeschools her children with two now graduated. She enjoys music and plays drums in a ladies music group called By His Design. She and her husband of over twenty years live in the country in Louisiana, along with their youngest child, two dogs, one cat, and family members close by and very far away. She is the youngest of seven children. Five older sisters and one older brother. The Peregrination Series was began in the fall of 2017 after God's leading for her to write this series in the summer of 2017. The first four books have been completed and she is currently working on book five in the series. Book 5: The Final Battle; Battle of the Beasts should be released in the Fall of 2020. You can find out more about her Blog, her books, and current events at www.sgboudreaux.com

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: SG Boudreaux

Year Published: 2018

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

978-1733963664

Genre

RELIGION, ACTION, FANTASY

Brief

Seth is overjoyed to begin life with his new bride Caroline until they are swallowed by an earthquake. Seth survives only to find himself separated from the love of his life. Seth is rescued in falling through a portal to become a time traveler for God. While he helps complete missions he longs to reunite with Caroline.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: EXCELLENT

Pace: FAIR

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The development pitch section largely focuses on Caroline's story, however Seth is the protagonist and Caroline seems to be the protagonist is Book 2 rather than Book 1. By focusing the section on Book 1 rather than the series, the section will better match the story and the rest of the profile. Although the preview of Book 2 is a great cliffhanger for the sequel in comparison to Book 1's goal of Seth, having the preview as part of the pitch is not reflective of the majority of the story.

Draw of Story

The tension of the characters' lives about to be changed by the historical 1906 San Fransisco earthquake is palpable and then the resolution that Seth ends up as a time traveler for God is an unexpected twist.

Possible Drawbacks

Much of the male interactions with females are romantic in nature. They do not tend to interact with women unless it is women they are secretly interested in or it is part of the mission. The women are always described respectfully, but given in depth physical descriptions and outfits that do not affect the plot and the male characters are not given. By allowing the women's characters to be shown rather than interpreted by the men and equally representing their appearances only when needed, the women will feel more three dimensional and less dependent on men.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that Seth falls into an opening from the earthquake and is transported into a time traveling portal rather than dying. The added notion that he is able to go wherever and whenever he wants with this new ability but can't find his wife is another intriguing conflict.

Fanbase Potential

This could have a fanbase of people who enjoy Christian movies and fantasy. It is a smaller but loyal audience.

Awards Potential

This might have awards potential in the Christian market, but the religious overtones would likely disqualify it from major awards consideration along with being part of the science fiction and fantasy genre.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

LEFT BEHIND, ASSASSIN'S CREED, PRINCE OF PERSIA, AVATAR, SERENITY, FIFTH ELEMENT

What’s New About the Story

The concept of peregrination and the use of world building in biblical time travel are unique. Creating room for character development and emotional growth along with a flashy concept will help make the story emotionally memorable.

Lead Characters

Seth is very methodical and upstanding and he is thrust into an unstable lifestyle against his will. His ability to adapt to the unusual circumstances shows he is very open minded. He is the definition of a self-made man which makes him at home in himself wherever he goes.

Uniqueness of Story

The emotional investment can be improved through variations in character dynamics and greater character development in terms of inner conflicts. The external conflict is well established, but aside from hoping for love, the characters have next to no personal goals.

Possible Formats

Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Network, TV Series - Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

The differing parallel situations between Caroline and Seth while unknown to each others' characters are a good source of tension that is separated into two books. Knowledge of this as an audience early in the transition of the earthquake would add an emotional stake that is lacking in the time travel element as there would always be a real chance the couple could reunite.