The Guardian of Light
ADVENTURE FANTASY EPIC ACTION
PRIDE, PREJUDICE AND ZOMBIES
SHANE - 20S, ORDINARY YOUNG MAN GRANTED THE CHANCE TO BECOME SANTA AND DEFEND THE WORLD AGAINST EVIL.
HILLOR - THE HEAD ELF, SHANE’S GUIDE TO EVERYTHING SANTA.
KRAMPUS - A FORMER SANTA’S APPRENTICE TURNED INTO AN EVIL MONSTER.
MORGAN LEFAY - A WITCH TASKED WITH GATHERING THE WORLD’S EVIL TOGETHER.
THE MAN IN A DARK SUIT - A MYSTERIOUS ORGANIZER OF THE PRISON BREAKOUT AT THE SOUTH POLE.
RENGAR - ELF, SHANE’S WEAPONS TEACHER.
I wanted to write a story that revolved around the character of Santa Claus in a way that had never been done before. Making it more for teens and adults without resorting to common tropes like making it a horror or comedy. Something that would captivate anyone who reads this series.
Target Gender: Universal
Orlando Fl, North Pole, South Pole
Based on a True Story
Status: Yes: self-published
Publisher: Kindle Direct Publishing
Year Published: 2019
A private military force breaks into a secret magical prison located in the South Pole and sets free the worst criminals from history. They release Krampus who seeks out and kills the current Santa Claus. In a panic the North Pole seeks out and trains a new Santa a young man named Shane Conner.
Shane is attacked on Christmas eve and just manages to defeat and recapture Krampus, with some help from others and his training. After returning to the North Pole he finds the long lost wand of Merlin which will set him out on his next adventure. While Morgana seeks out more magical criminals.
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Mature Audience Themes
Plot - Other Elements
Plot - Premise
Main Character Details
Name: Shane Conner
Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Heroic,Underdog
Additional Character Details
Key Traits: Honorable,Leader,Blunt,Confident
Additional Character Details
Key Traits: Villainous,Aggressive,Crazy,Lone Wolf,Skillful
Additional Character Details
Key Traits: Badass,Charming,Criminal,Seductive,Secretive,Sexy,Villainous
So Santa Claus protects the Light of the world which is the life force of the entire planet and the current Santa is killed after a massive break out happens in the South Pole where the worst criminals from all of history are kept. The governors of the North Pole must recruit and train a new Santa Claus to set out and recapture these villains before the are able to find and set free the Darkness a powerful entity that feeds on the Light of each world. All while trying to keep the magical world a secret. He finds out from his time in the North Pole that most everything humans thought about magical creatures and the world are not quite like he thought. He learns to use magic and starts his path to becoming the new leader of all the races which make up the North Pole. Meanwhile Morgana Le Fay works to aid Krampus who is getting ready to kill the new Guardian on Christmas Eve. By the end Shane realizes he can't keep doing this alone and also finds secret. So he returns home to rest up and plan things out for the future.
A prison break frees the world’s most dangerous magical creatures, with the monster Krampus killing Santa Claus. Ordinary Shane Conner is recruited to learn the ways of magic to become the new Guardian of the world and defeat Krampus.
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
The book profile skips over all the world building that takes place throughout the book, which needs to be included to give an accurate picture.
Draw of Story
The action movie beginning is a great way to start. It sets the tone clearly, while slowly revealing a mysterious world.
There’s a lot of description of minor actions. Getting dressed, crossing the room, picking up the food. This could be dramatically reduced. Similarly the scene descriptions give a visually rich world, but at the cost of making a slow story.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The allure here is a big magical spectacle with battles, spells and escapism from daily life.
Possibly, but most people don't want to watch Santa get killed. There's a large market for this kind of expansive fantasy world but kids don't want this violence in their feel-good content and most teenagers don't want Santa in their action content. It's a Venn diagram where that area of overlap is likely smaller than either area that does not.
Outside of a few notable exceptions, violent fantasy films and TV are made for pure entertainment and not awards.
Similar Films/TV Series
PRIDE, PREJUDICE AND ZOMBIES, ONCE UPON A TIME
What’s New About the Story
The way that it creates a backstory that combines many elements of traditional magical stories in a new story. For example, the way it includes an explanation for the myths of Atlantis, Merlin and of the genie and the lamp. If this could be dramatized instead of mostly being used as backstory it could make the world more enjoyable to unravel.
Relatability. What stands out about Shane is his normalcy. He can be a stand in for the audience, they want to see themselves in the red coat and they should feel that he is reacting to this situation in the same way they would.
Uniqueness of Story
No. There's a lot of fantasy out there and like a lot of fantasy like work is more focused on setting up its world for future stories than telling the story taking place now. This conflict, primarily between Shane and Krampus, needs much more drama, action and spectacle for the audience to enjoy it enough to come back for more.
Film - Studio, TV Series - Streaming, TV Series - Network, TV Series - Cable
WORK IN PROGRESS
This book is majority backstory and world building sandwiched between a dramatic beginning and end.
Tips for Improvement
Give this episode of the saga more of a cinematic arc instead of using it as set up.
A prison break frees the world’s most dangerous magical creatures, with the monster Krampus killing Santa Claus. Ordinary Shane Conner is recruited to learn the ways of magic. He steps into a vast magical world with a battle between darkness and light stretching back thousands of years. Shane steps up to become the new Guardian of the world and defeat Krampus, but the war will continue.
What We Liked
The visual richness and built out world are this story’s greatest strengths. There is a depth and breadth that fans could explore for a long time without tiring.
Film: As a film this can deliver big popcorn fueled magically battles in a clear battle between good and evil. All while having fun with humanity's fascination with magic. It can be Harry Potter with Santa Claus.
TV: The history of the Guardians is interesting, dramatic and episodic. If that history were told over time in parallel with Shane’s story, then there exists the framework for a lot of stories from many different perspectives, always with something new to explore. It combines a magical history with challenges for the present. Something similar in tone to the ABC series Once Upon a Time.
Key points: Wish fulfillment. Built out fantasy world. Magical spectacle. Holiday counter-programming. Good vs evil escapism.
Commandos break into an Antarctic Prison staffed by Elves and trolls, they free the prisoners and head north with a secret container, only to be killed by the monster that emerges from inside. Krampus, the large wolf-like monster now set freed continues to the North Pole, infiltrates Santa’s castle and kills Santa Claus. After Krampus escapes the elves are left with a dilemma, Santa had no apprentice and they need someone to become the Guardian that keeps all creatures united. They need Shane Conner. Shane Conner is a young man who shrugs things off, even after being dumped and fired he shakes off the phone number that keeps calling him, but eventually answers and is led to a mysteriously plain office. At the job interview Shane answers morality questions, is given a demonstration that magic exists and a ticket for the Polar Express. He is given the choice to become the new Santa Clause. Shane is suspicious but he has to see where this goes and soon heads north.
Meanwhile the forces of darkness are at work. Krampus kills and enslaves in the Canadian north, while a man in a dark suit tasks former prisoner Morgana LeFay with tracking down the other escapees. Shane makes it to North Pole and accepts the job of Santa. He is shown around and given more information about the powers, responsibilities and risks in becoming not just a toy giver, but the guardian of the light. The light being a mysterious, but cognizant force that can draw out the good in all. With barely more than a month till Christmas Eve his training in all things magical begins in earnest. From the head elf Hillor and various teachers he not only learns to wield magic as both a tool and a weapon, but the history of the long conflict between light and dark that he has entered. The twelve guardians before him have all fought the war and often lain down their lives to safeguard others.
The forces of evil are not idle, LeFay makes connect with Krampus, who is abducting children and magically changing them into ‘Gremlins’ who do his bidding. They grow concerned at the north pole as disappearances mount, but Christmas is now at hand. Before his journey Shane learns that his belief in himself, so important to magic, is why he was picked out for the job and that the elves believe most of the evil doers, even Krampus, still have good inside them.
On Christmas Eve Shane has issues with his magic as doubts cloud his abilities. Shane has a magical time delivering presents with Hillor until they are attacked. Krampus traps Shane in a forcefield where the two battle and Shane is almost defeated, but he sees a flash of light and the shadow of a woman which knocks Krampus off balance long enough for Shane to subdue the monster. As he recovers from battle Shane finds an artifact from a past guardian, Merlin’s wand. He knows Merlin is trapped somewhere in the world and believes the wizard can teach him more about magic than the elves will. He must also journey to find his own apprentice. Elsewhere, the man in the dark suit is perfectly happy to know Krampus is being held prisoner and he gives Morgana LeFay a new mission.