Gator Girrrl!!!!

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ACTION ADVENTURE FANTASY HORROR SCI-FI SUSPENSE/THRILLER YOUNG ADULT

2000s

Sharon Oberne

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Logline

Lexie's mother was struck by lightning while giving birth to Lexie. Everyone thought that's why Lexie was different. But lightning had nothing to do with Lexie being different, nothing at all!

Genre

Action,Adventure,Fantasy,Horror,Sci-fi,Suspense/Thriller,Young Adult

Short Summary

On a lonely stretch of road, during a thunderstorm,Al and Hannah are fixing a flat tire. Hannah, pregnant, goes into labor falling into a ditch. She's struck by lightning and Al believes she's dead. Al takes the infant home, only to discover she is already crawling.


Lexie and her shapeshifter (reptilian) lover, Smelly, Jr. have returned home to stay, after having an horrendous experience in what it means to be different and that family is family no matter what.

Setting

Everglades, island, mystical land

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain,Rebellion Against 'The One'

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending,Meaningful Message,Twist

Mature Audience Themes

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Main Character Details

Name: Lexie

Age: 18

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Aggressive,Complex,Heroic,Uneducated,Blunt,Outspoken,Skillful,Sarcastic,Lone Wolf

Additional Character Details

Name: The Woman

Age: 30+

Gender: Female

Role: Mentor

Key Traits: Aggressive,Complex,Confident,Engaging,Flexible,Gracious,Educated,Sexy,Skillful,Seductive

Additional Character Details

Name: Uncle Bob

Age: 50

Gender: Male

Role: skeptic

Key Traits: Aggressive,Complex,Crazy,Criminal,Greedy,Insecure,Villainous,Sarcastic

Additional Character Details

Name: Blue Eyes

Age: 40

Gender: Male

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aggressive,Badass,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Leader,Narcisstic,Masculine,Sexy,Power Hungry,Skillful,Manipulative,Unapologetic

Development Pitch

Gator Girrrl!!!! has been described as, "unlike anything one has ever read before." For it takes the reader on a journey with Lexie, part human/part Reptilian, who must accept being different. Lexie is raised on a Gator Farm owned by Uncle Bob. Besides killing snakes and taming the alligators, whom she considers her friends, Lexie is taken from her mother as a child and reared by The Woman. The Woman is a Reptilian shapeshifter, with magical powers, and is the sister of Lexie’s real father, Blue Eyes. Blue Eyes does his best to manipulate Lexie into becoming a special warrior, since she has inherited, “the power of light.” Lexie, along with Smelly, Jr., (The Woman’s son), returns to the Gator Farm, discovering her mother, Hannah, was murdered, and some creature has taken over her body. Lexie shows her skills as a warrior when she uses her ball of light to destroy the wicked creature, much to the satisfaction of Blue Eyes. Determined not to become a warrior, nor to allow Blue Eyes to train Smelly, Jr., Lexie leaves on a quest to find a special ring and hopes that this ring will give her the inner strength that she needs to succeed in the life she must accept. But, once she finds the ring, a door opens and Lexie falls into it with a host of other odd characters she must either befriend or confront, with Blue Eyes doing his best to control her. It’s having these experiences that helps Lexie to confront her father and to live her life with Smelly, Jr., her lover.

About The Author

Mrs. Oberne has had a strong interest in writing science fiction/fantasy stories since the age of six. Before her retirement from teaching, Sharon wrote six-book, chapter series (Alien Bleepers) for AroBookPublishing, working with the renown, Bob Reese. Besides writing, Mrs. Oberne is the creator for TopstheMonkey educational resources.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal,Female Leaning

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: no longer available

Year Published: 2019

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

Information not completed

Genre

DRAMA, FANTASY

Brief

Lexie's mother was struck by lightning as she gave birth to her in a ditch. She was crawling by the end of the day and her parents knew she was special. She had the gift of light, given by her real father, Blue Eyes, a being in the swamp. She grows up encounter the many magical creatures that live in the Everglades swamp.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: GOOD

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes, the book profile accurately reflects the book.

Draw of Story

The story starts with a mystery surrounding Lexie's birth. Her mother, Hannah, sees a man with glowing, blue eyes as they are changing the car tire. She is struck by lightening and presumed dead after she gave birth in a ditch. Lexie is crawling hours after her birth and they find her mother alive on the side of the road when they come to recover her body. There is a fantasy element being teased and it peaks the readers interest.

Possible Drawbacks

The story rambles without much of distinct plot. Lexie is special, she is tied to the magic of the swamps. She is learning about the creatures and history of the swamp. There is some magic, time travel and alternate universes. The story jumps around to many different ideas and it is not consistent. The dialogue is too on the nose and explanatory, leaving no room for mystery or revelations.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that Lexie is an unusual child after being born under unusual circumstances. Her true lineage makes her a child of the swamp and all it's magic and mystery. I would watch the movie to see the unique ideology tied with the Everglades. There aren't many stories surrounding this part of the world especially including magic and lore.

Fanbase Potential

This would not have a large fanbase as is. There isn't a tangible plot and needs a central ideology. There are too many unique elements being introduced without fulling flushing out the previous idea.

Awards Potential

This does not have awards potential. There is little character distinction or development and the plot structure is inconsistent.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

FATE: THE WINX SAGA, THE PRINCESS AND THE FROG, GRIMM, HIS DARK MATERIALS

What’s New About the Story

The story is original because of the setting in the Everglade swamps. There is a hidden world of fairies and magical creatures that do not appear to the human eyes.

Lead Characters

The lead character is a strong female character. She isn't developed with as much depth as she could. As a reader, I didn't feel that I understood her as a person as I could.

Uniqueness of Story

This is not a rare gem but it has some unique elements that make it entertaining. There needs to be a clear and distinct plot especially as a fantasy story. The adventure and events that Lexie goes through feels random and aimless instead of being apart of grander situation.

Possible Formats

Film: Studio, Streaming TV Series: Limited Run / Mini-Series

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

The story needs a consistent theme and plot. Many different events happen to Lexie and she is shown from being a newborn to a teenager. The consistent theme is the swamp but the characters are not really working towards anything. There are resolutions to certain circumstances but not an overall resolution to the story.