Misconception

Sharmela Dicupe

Book Cover

GENRE

DRAMA ACTION CRIME

    Core Theme

    SURVIVAL

    TIME PERIOD

    20th Century (multiple decades)

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    PRISON BREAK, OZ, ORANGE IS THE NEW BLACK

    CHARACTER LIST

    • LUKE SAYER: 20-40. LEAD. PUSHOVER

    • GISELE: 20-30S. EX-WIFE FATHER

    • MICHAEL: 30-50S. PRIEST/MENTOR JUDGE

    • SALVATOR SAYER: 70S. FATHER & CORRUPT JUDGE

    Logline

    A father is convicted for the murder of his seven year old daughter. Labeled as a pedophile in prison, he becomes a target of abuse. With the aid of his mother and a priest, they hire a trained killed to execute a sleek spree.

    Genre

    Drama,Suspense/Thriller,Mystery,Action,Crime

    Target Audiences

    Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

    Target Gender: Universal

    Setting

    Philadelphia

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Starting Description

    At a birthday party all the little girls are dressed the same, the birthday girl goes missing. Nowhere to be found, the detective's investigation concludes to her death. With his wife accusing him, a tainted past and evidence to support. Luke is sent to prison for the murder of his daughter Juliette

    Ending Description

    Luke is released from prison. He confronts his father on his death bed demanding to know where Juliette is.Luke is told more than her location. After family secrets are revealed and he confronts his dad's betrayal, which ultimately leads to his death, seconds before he reconciles with his daughter

    Group Specific

    The author has not yet written this

    Pitch Adaptation

    This is a heart wrenching one of a kind story. As we dive into the main protagonist Luke Sayer, traumatized by the deceit and cruelty of his past. A man afraid to care for his daughter, ashamed of his hands. And the story he needs to tell. The night of his daughter’s birthday, Juliette goes missing. His world crashes to pieces, fragments of his happiness now stolen once again. Everyone is against him fighting to put him behind bars, creating the perfect portfolio of a killer. Stepping into prison doors as a pedophile and child killer leaves, him an easy target to be raped repeatedly. Struggling to cope, he carries his story through his passion, his comic book. When an opportunity appears, Luke takes advantage to gain protection but only eliminating some players leaving some left. With the aid of his mother and priest they both discover who the CEO’s are they deliver the information to THE JUDGE (Luke’s father), who reaches out to a HITMAN and tells him “I need you to get caught”. ALEX the hitman enters the prison as AARON, with little time he executes the hit and escapes hand informs the judge “it’s done.” The conversation reveals that the Judge is his FATHER and LUKE is his BROTHER. Luke’s remaining years strengthen his character and on the day of his release his whole world shatters, shot to death standing in front of his daughter JULIETTE, After the shooting Juliette is comforted by the priest and is given a hand drawn comic book exposing her father’s truth.

    WGA Number

    1318013

    Mature Audience Themes

    Sexual Abuse,Substance Abuse, Language/Profanity

    Plot - Other Elements

    Twist

    Plot - Premise

    Overcoming Monster/Villain

    Main Character Details

    Name: Luke Sayer

    Age: mid 30's

    Gender: Male

    Role: Emotional

    Key Traits: Complex,Naive,Underdog,Secretive,Visionary,Strong Moral Code,Heroic

    Additional Character Details

    Name: The Judge (Luke's Father)

    Age: 70's

    Gender: Male

    Role: Antagonist

    Key Traits: Aggressive,Greedy,Leader,Manipulative,Sophisticated,Secretive,Power Hungry,Blunt,Villainous,Narcisstic

    Additional Character Details

    The author has not yet written this

    Additional Character Details

    The author has not yet written this

    Genre

    ACTION, SUSPENSE, MATURE AUDIENCE

    Brief

    Man is sent to prison after being framed for the death and molestation of his daughter. Inside, he is abused by his fellow inmates as well as the guards. He eventually earns his release and hopes to recover what life he has left.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    SCRIPT

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: FAIR

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: FAIR

    Franchise Potential: FAIR

    Pace: FAIR

    Premise: FAIR

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    Yes, it does reflect the book.

    Draw of Story

    The protagonist’s circumstances are appealing.

    Possible Drawbacks

    Grammar, punctuation, and language issues made certain portions hard to read or understand.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    The framing of the lead character.

    Fanbase Potential

    If produced, a large fanbase would be hard to achieve. This story contains high volumes of violence that could turn some consumers away.

    Awards Potential

    No. The story doesn't contain the type of depth that award-winning productions generally rely on.

    Envisioned Budget

    MEDIUM BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    ANY PRISON SHOWS OR FILMS

    What’s New About the Story

    The premise is fairly unique, but more character development is needed.

    Lead Characters

    The lead is not really unique. There are elements that could be expanded upon.

    Uniqueness of Story

    No, not a rare gem. The script still needs much work. The structure needs rehashing/tightening.

    Possible Formats

    Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, Film - Studio

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    A good start but plenty of room to improve this story.

    Tips for Improvement

    More character development. Tie up loose ends/fix plot holes. Must fix typos, spelling, grammar mistakes. Lead character needs an arc and more agency in the story. Script is quite short at 86-pages for feature film format. Rating criteria should be considered, as it sits the script might not be suitable for an R-rating.

    Brief

    Man is framed for his daughter's murder and molestation and must survive inside prison.

    What We Liked

    - Strong Male lead;
    - Unique perspective;
    - Inside look at prison life;
    - Plot twists;
    - Intense scenarios.

    Synopsis

    Luke Sayer, 30s, is in costume at a Halloween party at his house. Today is special because it is also his daughter, Juliette’s, seventh birthday party. Everyone is getting ready to light the candles on the cake. Luke realizes his wife is missing and takes a second to locate her. His wife, Gisele, is in their car parked in the garage cheating on him. He discovers this and enters the garage in a rage. He picks up a baseball bat and busts out one of the windows. Gisele is furious and berates him about their failing marriage. Before she storms out to rejoin the festivities, she calls him a pedophile. As the cake is brought out, they realize the daughter is now missing and nowhere in the house. Gisele, still fuming from earlier, calls the police and points a finger at her husband as the responsible person.

    A burned body is soon discovered and Luke is interrogated, blamed, and sentenced to prison. Right away, Luke doesn’t fit in and word gets around to other inmates that he raped and killed a child. His cellmate informs him of the reality of the situation and suggests he find protection. Not long after, guards wake Luke in the middle of the night and escort him to another cell where he is beaten and violently raped by two inmates. Needing a moment of peace, Luke attends a religious service the next day and meets Father Michael. They discuss God and Luke volunteers to help Father Michael as needed. Still looking for protection, Luke comes across a large man named Big Abe who “runs” the recreational yard. He passes Big Abe some vital information and further begs him to provide some sort of protection in exchange. Big Abe wants nothing to do with him and refuses. As a result, Luke is continually violated and abused by both inmates and guards alike.

    After a short visit with his mother, Luke confesses to Father Michael that it is the guards who are regularly abusing him and even gives up two of their names. The priest puts the names in an envelope and tracks down Luke’s mother to pass along the information. She then proceeds to give the envelope to her ex-husband. He is a corrupt judge and could care less for his son. But she demands his help and he concedes. The judge makes a phone call to a career criminal named Alex, who owes him a favor. Alex manages to infiltrate the prison under an assumed identity, Arron White. He begins making moves right away. Arron sparks up a relationship with CEO Maria, a female guard, and secretly watches Luke in the rec yard. He devises a plan to disrupt that day’s cell shakedown. When officers arrive he purposely vomits everywhere. They leave and an inmate arrives with a mop and bucket. Arron has concealed a vacuum-sealed package containing a guard’s uniform in the dirty mop water. Arron gets revenge on the crooked guards in the restroom and then takes Maria’s car after strangling her as well.

    Eight years later, Luke is granted parole and has Father Michael there to help with his transition back into the world. Upon release, Luke visits his ailing father in the hospital which goes just as expected, awful. They discuss how Luke’s wife set him up and let him go down for a crime he didn’t commit. Luke's father also reveals that his daughter Juliette is not dead. Luke drops everything and goes to reconcile with his daughter. He is delighted to find her but before they can embrace he is tragically shot and killed in the street. Juliette is with Father Michael in his office and he gives her a comic book that Luke had made. She is the centerpiece of his creation.

    About The Author

    Sharmela Dicupe loves stories that shed a new perspective from something disturbing or ugly. For the past years, she has been articulating ideas, detailed to execution. “Misconception” is her first official script as a self-taught screenplay writer. She took a chance and wrote her first script in three months, entered it in one competition and won an award.