Stars of Ambracor

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ACTION APOCALYPTIC DRAMA FANTASY RELIGIOUS HORROR ROMANCE SCI-FI

Across Centuries

Sandra Valencia

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Logline

Two women with psychic abilities try to solve a mysterious, frightening, recurring nightmare one has. She is then saved from a gang attack by rescuers from another world where she was betrothed to a prince who searched years for her. They return to defeat demons seeking to rule both world planes.

Genre

Action,Apocalyptic,Drama,Fantasy,Religious,Horror,Romance,Sci-fi

Short Summary

Kendra and Diana go to a psychic fair to hear an expert on dreams. because of a recurring nightmare that constantly haunts Diana. They meet privately with the expert, who does a reading, disturbing them even more. The woman tells them things they've never revealed to anyone else. How can this be?


Diana, now Princess Sindara, faces demons who brought war to Ambracor. Kendra, aided by angels, came from her Earth plane to help. With Prince Thehrund and a priest, they begin a final struggle to save Ambracor and end brutal war. Thehrund faces new heartbreak seeing Sindara lifeless on the floor.

Setting

Contemporary Earth near Lake Erie; Ambracor, Earth-like, similar to Renaissance times

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Tragedy,Overcoming Monster/Villain,Internal Journey/Rebirth,Other

Plot - Other Elements

Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions

Mature Audience Themes

Extreme Violence

Main Character Details

Name: Diana Lorenz/Sindara Varacor

Age: 23

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Complex,Empathetic,Faithful,Educated,Honorable,Religious,Outspoken,Visionary,Romantic

Additional Character Details

Name: Kendra Porter

Age: 23

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Complex,Confident,Decisive,Engaging,Faithful,Educated,Honorable,Religious,Outspoken,Visionary

Additional Character Details

Name: Thehrund Cobrandya

Age: 33

Gender: Male

Role: protagonist

Key Traits: Masculine,Complex,Faithful,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Religious,Outspoken,Romantic

Additional Character Details

Name: Breeneth Brandere

Age: 30

Gender: Female

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Aggressive,Greedy,Villainous,Narcisstic,Sexy,Power Hungry,Secretive,Seductive,Manipulative,Unapologetic

Development Pitch

The appeal of Stars of Ambracor is that it is a mix of modern times with bygone eras. The story is a rare blend of paranormal themes with concepts of faith, demons, and angels. Intense romance and political maneuvering contract with the drudgery and brutality of war to build a story that engages both women and men. The story can be perceived as an adventure. For those who seek something more, the characters are complex. The primary characters are rich in thoughts and deeds, and the secondary characters highlight those aspects for a satisfying read that would easily translate to the screen. At least, that's what readers tell me.

About The Author

Born into a family with Kentucky coal-mining roots, Sandra Valencia always stood apart as different. Books, writing, foreign languages, and cultures captivated her interest. A broad range of paranormal experiences beginning in early childhood fueled her curiosity and enriched her writing endeavors. Determined to use her talents in linguistics, she built a career in international trade logistics that gave her many opportunities to meet people from around the world and learn firsthand about the nuances of different cultures. Each book in her The Chikondra Trilogy garnered positive reviews from her niche readers and Five-Star reviews from Readers’ Favorite, with Whispers from Prophecy earning a coveted finalist spot in the Reader’s Favorite 2019 annual book competition. Her book Stars of Ambracor has also earned a Five-Star review from Readers’ Favorite. Following several car accidents where Ms. Valencia humorously quips an invisible target was placed on her car, she was forced to have multiple surgeries on her spine and retire early. She resides in Ohio where her husband and their two sons join her to spend much of their time in their recently completed family project, a log home in the scenic Hocking Hills.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Other

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Sandra Valencia, through BookFuel

Year Published: 2016

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

978-1622174515

Genre

ACTION, ROMANCE, DRAMA, FANTASY

Brief

Diana's frequent nightmares turn out to be visions after she visits a dream psychic with her best friend Kendra. The two discover their destiny's lie in another world plane, Ambracor. Diana is really Sindara a princess who must defeat the darkness of other world planes with her newfound love, the prince. Sindara and the prince are able to rescue Ambracor's people, but Sindara herself is saved by her best friend Kendra.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The logline's use of they does not differentiate between the group being Sindara and Kendra, Sindara and Thehrund, or the gang. By using the names and not the pronoun this will be more clear who saved the world. In the short summary the jump between the expert and Diana discovering she is Sindara is a bit disjointed compared to longer journey in the narrative. The short summary could show the transition to their discovery as at present it seems somewhat instant when it was not the expert who told them the details about their true selves. The development pitch does a good job summarizing the story, but highlighting the themes of the book such as its over all message could help provide a better sense of why the story is worth consuming rather than just taking other reader's recommendations.

Draw of Story

Kendra and Diana's friendship is extremely strong without being codependent. It is a healthy example of female partnership and the depth that personal love can go without turning romantic.

Possible Drawbacks

Sometimes the emotions are told rather than shown as are what the characters mean to one another. For example when Brandere visits King Hamund and is disheveled each character is given their emotion rather than shown what they are doing i.e. Hamund hid his surprise but had anxiety about Brandere's appearance. By adding more subtext to the dialogue and showing the emotions through physical responses the scenes will feel more authentically present rather than as afterwards commentary.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that Diana is unaware that she has another life with a prince who is searching for her in another realm, but her subconscious is able to tell her. She is then brought to the other world to fulfill her destiny despite her old normal life as just a brand new bank employee.

Fanbase Potential

Fantasy when coupled with action can have a larger audience than just fantasy, but this may have a smaller audience due to the genre being more focused on fantasy and romance rather than action.

Awards Potential

Outside of Lord of the Rings, fantasy does not tend to get nominated for the awards circuits. Depending on the themes when made more apparent, the narrative could potentially garner awards within its genre.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

CURSED, JUPITER ASCENDING, TRU CALLING, THE MAGICIANS, THE KING ETERNAL MONARCH, XENA WARRIOR PRINCESS

What’s New About the Story

The strength is Kendra and Diana's bond as a non-romantic life partnership is compelling. They are end game just as much as their romantic relationships so to consistently focus on their development as a partnership rather than leave out much of their dynamic in the middle of the story during the romantic subplots would help make their friendship a clear focus, more central, and equally important.

Lead Characters

Kendra is warm hearted, considerate of others and selfless in that she overcomes her own anxieties to make sure Diana is safe more than once. Diana is surprisingly calm throughout, strong in her survival instincts and openly devoted to those she loves.

Uniqueness of Story

The action is easy to follow, but the stakes seem low as there is not any really lasting loss or setback. By showing the characters really struggling, such as a major casualty the weight of their bravery in defeating the darkness will be felt more deeply. There is investment in the protagonist success as good people, but understanding the morality and themes of the story would help better define their external conflicts.

Possible Formats

Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, Film - Indie, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series, TV Series - Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

Clarifying the message of why Diana needs to fulfill her destiny and why the darkness needs to be defeated other than darkness is equated with being bad would help make the themes more apparent and add investment to the external conflict. Making Kendra and Sindara's friendship as the central focus throughout even during their romantic subplots would make for a really memorable pair rather than switching the focus to be on Sindara and her prince. Kendra has an equal role in saving Sindara if not greater than Sindara's husband and so she should be more central throughout and not just in the beginning and end.