Sixty-Five Roses: An Amari Johnston Novel, Volume 3
ACTION DETECTIVE DRAMA MYSTERY RELIGIOUS SUSPENSE/THRILLER YOUNG ADULT
1980s & '90s
A young detective befriends a four-year-old girl with cystic fibrosis, whose only hope for survival is a scrap of cloth from the robe of Jesus Christ that reportedly has the power to heal. Amari risks her life in a frantic attempt to recover the miracle cloth before the child dies from her illness.
The year is 33 A.D., just after the crucifixion of Christ. Prochorus, one of Jesus' disciples, finds a Jewish zealot who has been mortally wounded after a confrontation with a Roman soldier. Prochorus uses a scrap of fabric from the robe a Jesus to miraculously heal the zealot.
After recovering from a gunshot wound in Toronto, Amari returns home, fearing that nothing else can be done to save Kathleen’s life. To her surprise, Father Josiah, a priest associated with the cloth’s thief, had secretly traveled to Fresno and healed the child.
Fresno, California and Toronto, Canada
Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Plot - Other Elements
Happy Ending,Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions,Twist
Mature Audience Themes
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Main Character Details
Name: Amari Johnston
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Aggressive,Confident,Desperate,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Religious,Selfless,Outspoken,Skillful,Strong Moral Code,Unapologetic
Additional Character Details
Name: Dr. Kevin Brenner
Key Traits: Aspiring,Adventurous,Charming,Complex,Confident,Empathetic,Faithful,Educated,Honorable,Religious,Skillful,Funny,Visionary,Strong Moral Code
Additional Character Details
Name: Pete Johnston
Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Confident,Faithful,Heroic,Leader,Unapologetic,Skillful,Blunt,Religious,Masculine
Additional Character Details
Name: Alexander Kovalenko
Key Traits: Charming,Complex,Criminal,Desperate,Strong Moral Code,Sophisticated,Secretive,Skillful,Religious
Millions of people suffer from incurable illnesses, and most would love the prospect of being miraculously healed. Even those not suffering from disease often have a strong desire to heal others, if only they had the power. This intriguing story centers around a determined young private investigator who is on the payroll of a wealthy philanthropist. Inside the restoration lab of the Royal Ontario Museum, a conservator with a back injury accidentally breaks open on ossuary that had once housed the bones of Prochorus, one of Jesus' closest disciples. Inside the ossuary is a hidden chamber that has held a scrap of fabric from the robe of Jesus for nearly 2,000 years. After touching the cloth, the conservator is miraculously healed. However, because he had broken the ossuary, he is fired, and subsequently, the healing cloth goes missing. Our protagonist, Amari Johnston, is assigned the task of recovering the fabric and getting the conservator's job back. Not only is Amari determined to help this conservator, but she is desperate to find the cloth because it is the only hope for a dying little girl with cystic fibrosis. The plot of Sixty-Five Roses is full of mystery, suspense, action, and religious mystique. Viewers will be intrigued and thrilled by this plot, but also touched by heartwarming moments when this endearing four-year-old child draws out the maternal, nurturing side of our brazen tom-boy protagonist.
ACTION, DRAMA, RELIGION
Prochorus, a former disciple of Jesus, was able preserve a part of the robe Jesus wore while crucified. The robe was able to keep the healing power of Jesus. In the future, a young detective, Amari, races to find a surviving piece smuggled around by different church leaders. She hopes to heal her new friend, four year old Kathleen, from a death by cystic fibrosis.
Authors Writing Style: GOOD
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
The logline reflects the story perfectly but the short summary skips much of the middle of the narrative's search for the shroud and its authenticity before Amari's gunshot. As the gun shot happens in search of the cloth, it could be helpful if the two story parts of the summary are connected over the survival of the cloth first before bringing up the gunshot. Amari's gunshot is serious but it is not the focus of the search for the cloth which is Kathleen's survival.
Draw of Story
The idea that a piece of the cloth Jesus was sacrificed in has survived within the church and retained its healing power as a relic is noteworthy both for its power and its secrecy.
While Prochorus's story is well written it is unclear how it is connected to Amari's journey aside from explaining the origin of the cloth being part of the church. It is part of the beginning of the story then disappears as the action in the modern day search gets more intense. It does not have a parallel with the modern story either through plot or theme.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that the Rossi foundation is in search of a biblical relic that heals any physical ailment but the case is personal due to their attachment to a four year old cystic fibrosis near death. This attachment dictates the timeline of completing the mission and solving it an urgent matter.
This could have a large fanbase of Christian believers as it is non-controversial in its mythology. Some Christian sects may have a problem with the iconography of the relic, but this may even appeal to the secular crowd as the mythology is easy to follow for an action film.
Because of the Christian overtones this is unlikely to gain much awards potential in secular Hollywood.
Similar Films/TV Series
THE DA VINCI CODE, MONTY PYTHON AND THE HOLY GRAIL, THE LAST JEDI, DON VERDEAN, FIVE FEET APART
What’s New About the Story
The originality stems from the dual storylines of Prochorus and Amari's ties to the cloth. Whereas Prochorus' saga is about finding the robe for safekeeping, Amari's team needs to find the cloth in order to use it. By making the two tales consistently linked either by theme or plot, the inclusion of both side by side will make more sense.
Amari is knowledgeable, compassionate, brave and thinks outside the box. While she trusts other she sometimes tries to do too much by herself without help which can get her in trouble.
Uniqueness of Story
This is a solid concept for a Christian movie about a healing relic, but the inclusion of the flashbacks to the cloth's origins could be better integrated as the dual timelines of biblical and modern day is what is most unique.
Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series
WORK IN PROGRESS
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
This has so much potential, but the two storylines could be more cohesive to make the origin story of the cloth better integrated into solving the mystery of the cloth in modern times. Giving the characters internal conflicts will also create maximum emotional investment in the external conflict.