Sixty-Five Roses: An Amari Johnston Novel, Volume 3

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ACTION DETECTIVE DRAMA MYSTERY RELIGIOUS SUSPENSE/THRILLER YOUNG ADULT

1980s & '90s

R.A. Williams

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Logline

A young detective befriends a four-year-old girl with cystic fibrosis, whose only hope for survival is a scrap of cloth from the robe of Jesus Christ that reportedly has the power to heal. Amari risks her life in a frantic attempt to recover the miracle cloth before the child dies from her illness.

Genre

Action,Detective,Drama,Mystery,Religious,Suspense/Thriller,Young Adult

Short Summary

The year is 33 A.D., just after the crucifixion of Christ. Prochorus, one of Jesus' disciples, finds a Jewish zealot who has been mortally wounded after a confrontation with a Roman soldier. Prochorus uses a scrap of fabric from the robe a Jesus to miraculously heal the zealot.


After recovering from a gunshot wound in Toronto, Amari returns home, fearing that nothing else can be done to save Kathleen’s life. To her surprise, Father Josiah, a priest associated with the cloth’s thief, had secretly traveled to Fresno and healed the child.

Setting

Fresno, California and Toronto, Canada

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Quest,Other

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending,Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions,Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Amari Johnston

Age: 23

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Aggressive,Confident,Desperate,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Religious,Selfless,Outspoken,Skillful,Strong Moral Code,Unapologetic

Additional Character Details

Name: Dr. Kevin Brenner

Age: 26

Gender: Male

Role: Sidekick

Key Traits: Aspiring,Adventurous,Charming,Complex,Confident,Empathetic,Faithful,Educated,Honorable,Religious,Skillful,Funny,Visionary,Strong Moral Code

Additional Character Details

Name: Pete Johnston

Age: 55

Gender: Male

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Confident,Faithful,Heroic,Leader,Unapologetic,Skillful,Blunt,Religious,Masculine

Additional Character Details

Name: Alexander Kovalenko

Age: 55

Gender: Male

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Charming,Complex,Criminal,Desperate,Strong Moral Code,Sophisticated,Secretive,Skillful,Religious

Development Pitch

Millions of people suffer from incurable illnesses, and most would love the prospect of being miraculously healed. Even those not suffering from disease often have a strong desire to heal others, if only they had the power. This intriguing story centers around a determined young private investigator who is on the payroll of a wealthy philanthropist. Inside the restoration lab of the Royal Ontario Museum, a conservator with a back injury accidentally breaks open on ossuary that had once housed the bones of Prochorus, one of Jesus' closest disciples. Inside the ossuary is a hidden chamber that has held a scrap of fabric from the robe of Jesus for nearly 2,000 years. After touching the cloth, the conservator is miraculously healed. However, because he had broken the ossuary, he is fired, and subsequently, the healing cloth goes missing. Our protagonist, Amari Johnston, is assigned the task of recovering the fabric and getting the conservator's job back. Not only is Amari determined to help this conservator, but she is desperate to find the cloth because it is the only hope for a dying little girl with cystic fibrosis. The plot of Sixty-Five Roses is full of mystery, suspense, action, and religious mystique. Viewers will be intrigued and thrilled by this plot, but also touched by heartwarming moments when this endearing four-year-old child draws out the maternal, nurturing side of our brazen tom-boy protagonist.

About The Author

R.A. Williams draws from his educational background in psychology and sociology to write compelling, thought-provoking Christian fiction that falls outside of mainstream expectations. His published works include five novels: Carbon-14: The Shroud of Turin, The Cult of New Canaan, Sixty-Five Roses, The Class of 86, and The Gospel According to Todd. His shorter works have appeared in The Christian Communicator, Encounters With God, and Dreams and Visions.

Target Audiences

Age: 13-17,18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal,Female Leaning

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Amazon KPD

Year Published: 2020

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

1658235932

Genre

ACTION, DRAMA, RELIGION

Brief

Prochorus, a former disciple of Jesus, was able preserve a part of the robe Jesus wore while crucified. The robe was able to keep the healing power of Jesus. In the future, a young detective, Amari, races to find a surviving piece smuggled around by different church leaders. She hopes to heal her new friend, four year old Kathleen, from a death by cystic fibrosis.

Overall Rating

GOOD

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: FAIR

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The logline reflects the story perfectly but the short summary skips much of the middle of the narrative's search for the shroud and its authenticity before Amari's gunshot. As the gun shot happens in search of the cloth, it could be helpful if the two story parts of the summary are connected over the survival of the cloth first before bringing up the gunshot. Amari's gunshot is serious but it is not the focus of the search for the cloth which is Kathleen's survival.

Draw of Story

The idea that a piece of the cloth Jesus was sacrificed in has survived within the church and retained its healing power as a relic is noteworthy both for its power and its secrecy.

Possible Drawbacks

While Prochorus's story is well written it is unclear how it is connected to Amari's journey aside from explaining the origin of the cloth being part of the church. It is part of the beginning of the story then disappears as the action in the modern day search gets more intense. It does not have a parallel with the modern story either through plot or theme.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that the Rossi foundation is in search of a biblical relic that heals any physical ailment but the case is personal due to their attachment to a four year old cystic fibrosis near death. This attachment dictates the timeline of completing the mission and solving it an urgent matter.

Fanbase Potential

This could have a large fanbase of Christian believers as it is non-controversial in its mythology. Some Christian sects may have a problem with the iconography of the relic, but this may even appeal to the secular crowd as the mythology is easy to follow for an action film.

Awards Potential

Because of the Christian overtones this is unlikely to gain much awards potential in secular Hollywood.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

THE DA VINCI CODE, MONTY PYTHON AND THE HOLY GRAIL, THE LAST JEDI, DON VERDEAN, FIVE FEET APART

What’s New About the Story

The originality stems from the dual storylines of Prochorus and Amari's ties to the cloth. Whereas Prochorus' saga is about finding the robe for safekeeping, Amari's team needs to find the cloth in order to use it. By making the two tales consistently linked either by theme or plot, the inclusion of both side by side will make more sense.

Lead Characters

Amari is knowledgeable, compassionate, brave and thinks outside the box. While she trusts other she sometimes tries to do too much by herself without help which can get her in trouble.

Uniqueness of Story

This is a solid concept for a Christian movie about a healing relic, but the inclusion of the flashbacks to the cloth's origins could be better integrated as the dual timelines of biblical and modern day is what is most unique.

Possible Formats

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

This has so much potential, but the two storylines could be more cohesive to make the origin story of the cloth better integrated into solving the mystery of the cloth in modern times. Giving the characters internal conflicts will also create maximum emotional investment in the external conflict.