The Atlantis Gene

Pierce Roberts

Book Cover

GENRE

SUSPENSE/THRILLER ADVENTURE APOCALYPTIC

    Core Theme

    GOOD VERSUS EVIL

    TIME PERIOD

    Contemporary,Across Centuries

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    10,000 B.C., ATLANTIS: THE LOST EMPIRE

    CHARACTER LIST

    JOSEPH BLACKFEATHER: 20S. LEAD. COURAGEOUS NATIVE AMERICAN MAN

    ALICE BLACKFEATHER: 20S. RESEARCHER AND JOSEPH'S WIFE.

    JULES LECLERC: RESEARCHER FROM THE PASTEUR INSTITUTE, JOSEPH'S FRIEND.

    KATE VENSKY: 40. VETERINARIAN AND JOSEPH'S FRIEND

    FRED GARRETT: 55. NOBEL LAUREATE GENETICIST AND JOSEPH'S FRIEND

    CHIN MOY: 80. EVIL GENIUS, JOSEPH'S ENEMY

    Logline

    An partial stone tablet , gold and enamel ring and fossilized human bones are accidentally found at an Indian Reservation. Chinese researchers seeking a longevity gene with malevolent intent find out about this discovery and collide with those trying to protect the secrets of the Atlantis Gene .

    Target Audiences

    Age: 13-17,18-34,35-54,55+

    Target Gender: Universal

    Setting

    Atlantis, Montana, Columbus Ohio , Paris , Rome , Austria , South Pacific

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: with a Publisher

    Publisher: Self Amazon

    Year Published: 2020

    Starting Description

    Atlantis , facing imminent destruction evacuates its leaders/scientists on a great armada and disperses around the world to bring their advanced culture to primitive peoples . Ten thousand years later evidence they predated accepted theories on American pre history is discovered- a powerful secret .

    Ending Description

    Joseph Bkackfeather , a young Lakota Sioux shaman has generational connection to the Atlantis Gene ring placing him in conflict with those trying to steal it , kill his team of investigators and kidnap his son. An assassination of the Pope in Rome is prevented by their Atlantis Gene.

    Group Specific

    Information not completed

    Hard Copy Available

    No

    ISBN

    Information not completed

    Mature Audience Themes

    Information not completed

    Plot - Other Elements

    Twist

    Plot - Premise

    Overcoming Monster/Villain,Other

    Main Character Details

    Name: Joseph Blackfeather

    Age: Early twenties

    Gender: Male

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Faithful,Honorable,Selfless,Heroic

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Chin Moy

    Age: 80

    Gender: Male

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Educated,Power Hungry,Villainous,Complex,Criminal

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Dr Fred Garrett

    Age: 55

    Gender: Male

    Role: protagonist

    Key Traits: Confident,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Visionary,Selfless,Patriotic

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Dr Kate Vensky- ODell

    Age: 40

    Gender: Female

    Role: protagonist

    Key Traits: Faithful,Educated,Heroic,Honorable,Leader,Religious

    Development Pitch

    Reviews suggest that readers believe the manuscript ( and series) would translate well to a movie or series . The three stories progress well ( The Atlantis Gene is the third adventure) with strong characters and seriously evil villains that each threaten the existence of humanity in different unique ways . The science and pseudo- science drives the plot with evil characters that have developed their own special ‘ Hell’s’ . The good guys are strong , smart , creative , funny and likable and uniquely qualified to bring the bad guys to justice ,always with a twist .

    Genre

    ACTION, SUSPENSE, THRILLER, DRAMA, RELIGION, FANTASY

    Brief

    In the near-present day, a Native American man discovers the remains of and artifacts from the people of Atlantis. He and his scientist friends realize that the people of Atlantis fled their island after it was destroyed in 10,000 BCE and began mating with normal humans, spreading their superior genes and long life expectancies. They work together to stop an evil scientist who has been manipulating his own body in order to reverse his aging and who is serving Satan, trying to kill people.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    THIRD PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: FAIR

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: FAIR

    Franchise Potential: GOOD

    Pace: FAIR

    Premise: FAIR

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    The logline could be clearer and more focused. There are also many typos, specifically in the Short Summary, and the Short Summary could also be more focused, since currently it is a bit all over the place. Chin Moy is also listed as a protagonist instead of an antagonist.

    Draw of Story

    The story begins in 10,000 BCE and focuses initially on the royals of Atlantis. It is an exciting opening that provides context for the rest of the story that is set centuries later, in the present day. The themes of good overcoming evil are apparent quickly as well and drew me into the story. The constant action also served as a hook when I was reading, as did the rotation between the different timelines.

    Possible Drawbacks

    I think that the writing could have been a lot more concise. There were many moments of unnecessary dialogue or lengthy descriptions of random items, such as foods characters were eating, that did not serve to progress the plot and instead slowed down the pacing of the story tremendously. Going through and dramatically shortening the length of the novel (there is a lot that can be omitted) would make this story much harder to put down. There is also a bit too much jumping between timelines and storylines, especially early on, that made the plot difficult to follow initially and characters difficult to keep track of. It grew easier to keep track of these different characters and storylines as the plot progressed, but the beginning was still a bit confusing in that regard.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    The idea of reversing aging and attempting to achieve immortality has been an idea that readers and viewers have proven that they enjoy and are interested in. The Atlantis gene combined with this concept is new and refreshing, and the genre of this concept (supernatural thriller) would draw in audiences. Joseph is also a courageous protagonist, and his group of intelligent friends are likable and interesting to follow. The author's own research and deep knowledge of genetics shines through as well in a fascinating, informative way that lends authenticity to the writing.

    Fanbase Potential

    If adapted, this story could have a large fanbase. It has franchise potential and its focus on the people of Atlantis and genetic manipulation could draw in specific audiences.

    Awards Potential

    No, stories in this genre do not typically have Awards potential.

    Envisioned Budget

    LARGE BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    10,000 B.C., ATLANTIS: THE LOST EMPIRE

    What’s New About the Story

    The focus on the blending of genes between the royals of Atlantis and the Native American community in the U.S. is unique and not something I have come across in stories relating to the people of Atlantis. The grand scope of this story – it takes place all over the world – also gives it an exciting, adventure-like feeling. To make this story more unique, Moy, the protagonist, could be humanized more. We see him as an evil genius who makes a deal with the devil, but we don't really know why he is the way he is. He could be a more complex villain with layered motivations.

    Lead Characters

    Joseph is a Native American man and the protagonist, and this representation is commendable and not something that is common. He is young, intelligent, kind, and brave, and he cares deeply about his friends and family. He is connected to his ancestors and is guided by their words and spirits. His friends are also all loyal and brave, and they always support each other.

    Uniqueness of Story

    To make this story a rare gem, I think the writer could dive deeper into his characters. We should see more of what makes each character unique, what their backgrounds are, and what motivates them throughout the course of the story. Their voices could also each be more unique and distinct. In addition, the writing could be cut down dramatically. There is a lot of information that is shared that is unnecessary and makes scenes drag on much longer than they should. Some plot points are also a bit confusing. If Moy discovered the material that makes his aging reverse when he is in South America, why does he need Satan? And how was the Nazi death instrument recreated and 3D printed in a way that worked?

    Possible Formats

    Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Network, TV Series - Cable, TV Series - Streaming

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    While the idea has the potential to be exciting, I think that the characters need to be more distinct and fleshed-out, the writing needs to be trimmed down and refined, and some plot points need further clarification. This premise could be exciting and action-packed but currently is bogged down by excessive descriptions and unnecessary exchanges between characters.

    Tips for Improvement

    The book would need to be dramatically shortened – currently, there is way too much information shared that slows down what should be a fast-paced story. The characters would have to be better developed in a way that makes audiences more invested in their journeys and in a way that allows us to understand why they are the way they are and why they make the choices that they make. There should be less jumping between storylines, and the antagonist should be more complex with clear motivations. Joseph's abilities could have more of an explanation, and Moy's actions should also be more clearly explained.

    Brief

    Joseph, a Native American man, discovers artifacts from the people of Atlantis and ultimately learns about his own connection to the Atlanteans. He, his newborn son, and his wife all possess the blessed Atlantic gene, which will allow them to live for an impossibly long time, but this makes them a target for an evil scientist. Joseph must team up with his scientist friends to understand his findings and to stop the evil scientist from killing many people.

    What We Liked

    This thrilling story shows the power good people have when they come together to defeat evil forces. Audiences will love Joseph, his family, and his friends, and they will be on the edge of their seats watching all of the adventures these characters take. The author's research informs the writing and lends authenticity to his storytelling. The premise is unique and exciting, and the author balances multiple characters, locations, and time periods expertly.

    Film: This story has a clear inciting beginning, middle, and end, and this structure would lend itself very well to a film format. The inciting incident would lead us into the story and the rising action, and the fighting sequences and other action scenes would be thrilling to watch play out on the screen. What's more, this book is part of a series, meaning that this world would have franchise potential. This genre – supernatural thriller – is also one that has historically performed well at the box office, and this story would no doubt be successful when it is adapted as a film.

    TV: This dense story has so much exciting content in it and would adapt perfectly to a TV format. A TV show would allow writers the opportunity to dig even deeper into these likable characters' backgrounds and lives, and there are more than enough adventures in this book alone to support a series. The action scenes would be thrilling to watch on the screen, and the settings around the world would make for exhilarating sets. While many films have been made about the people of Atlantis over the years, there has yet to be a reputable show that focuses on this topic, and this is the perfect source to adapt for that purpose.

    Key points: 1. good overcomes evil
    2. supernatural/fantasy elements
    3. diverse characters
    4. exciting action scenes
    5. Atlantis backstory

    Synopsis

    In 10,000 BCE, there was a group of people with superior genes who were blessed by the gods. These people were the Atlanteans, and their superior genes allowed them to live to impossibly old ages. They lived on a remote volcanic island until the volcano erupted, causing them to flee. Many ended up in North America and began reproducing with Native Americans, sharing their genes.

    Modern researchers are intrigued by the stories about people from the past who reached very old ages, and they try to find a genetic explanation. If they can find this explanation, maybe they can manipulate genes to extend humans’ lives. A group of immoral Chinese scientists are determined to figure this out. They are DOCTOR PETER HO, JAX CHENG, and DOCTOR CHIN MOY. They realize that they need the help of DOCTOR FRED GARRETT, a kind man who works for Ohio State University. Jax Cheng’s half-sister MYA LIU is a student of Fred, and she makes him an incredible offer to go work with Jax and the Chinese researchers, but he refuses, since his wife, HELEN, has Alzheimer’s and he can’t leave her. When they realize that he won’t change his mind, Mya kills Helen. Fred is devastated and believes his wife died suddenly from her disease, but Helen had donated her body to the university for science, and when the autopsy is conducted, Fred realizes that someone must have recreated Berhetzel’s weapon (a Nazi death ray) and used it to kill Helen. He agrees to go with the Chinese researchers now that Helen is gone, but he is deeply suspicious that they killed her.

    In the meantime, Moy tells his group that he is going to the South American jungle to quit smoking, but he is really searching for Berhetzel’s missing anti-aging capsules. He finds them and takes one; when he wakes up, he looks twenty years younger.

    JOSEPH BLACKFEATHER, who is married to ALICE BLACKFEATHER, is a Native American man who finds a ring and some other old artifacts, and he and his friends – JULES, KATE, TOM, BRAD, JEAN, and ADELE – figure out that it is from the Atlanteans. After much research and DNA testing, they realize that Joseph, Alice, and their newborn SON all have a very high percentage of the Atlantean DNA. Meanwhile, Moy takes too much of the anti-aging capsules he discovered and dies, but he makes a deal with Satan that allows him to return to life if he carries out evil and kills people. His other mission is to kidnap the Blackfeather baby and turn him into the antichrist.

    As Moy kills people, transforming his appearance between each kill, Joseph and his friends rush to try to stop him and protect Joseph’s son. Joseph’s grandfather, NELSON, who passed away, assumes a spirit form and guides Joseph to safety. Joseph’s ring activates powers that come with his Atlantean genes, and he defeats Moy once and for all.

    About The Author

    Pierce Roberts, like the characters in his book, is a veterinarian. He combines real science with fictional science to generate thrillers that span generations and continents.