Dragon River
Submision Type
book
Logline
This story has it all ... hardship, magic, dragons, theatre and some beautiful illustrations. With a happy ending thrown in it's truly a story for our times that reads like a children's blockbuster movie!
Genre
Folktale,Adventure,Children's,Fantasy,Mystery
Short Summary
The Drako Family live a life in the idyllic remote town of Brilliana but have to leave to the big city of Daydon after a long power cut.
Setting
Brilliana Daydon
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Rags to Riches
Plot - Other Elements
Happy Ending
Mature Audience Themes
Information not completed
Main Character Details
Name: Sally
Age: 12-15
Gender: Female
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Adventurous
Additional Character Details
Name: Gal
Age: 12-15
Gender: Male
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Adventurous,Modest,Lone Wolf
Additional Character Details
Name: Sebille
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Role: mentor
Key Traits: Aspiring
Additional Character Details
Name: Lancelot
Age: 35
Gender: Male
Role: mentor
Key Traits: Empathetic,Skillful,Leader
Genre
FANTASY
Brief
Sally and Gal live in a small town when Gal swallows a pearl and turns into a dragon. There family moves to the big city where Sally and her parents work in the theaters. They love it and are commissioned to put on a musical that features Gal and another dragon. The play is a hit.
Overall Rating
GOOD
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: GOOD
Characterization: FAIR
Commerciality: FAIR
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Pace: GOOD
Premise: FAIR
Structure: GOOD
Theme: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
The book profile gives a vague description of the themes of the book. It describes hardships and theater but gives no details about the plot of the story. It needs to be more descriptive about the family having to move from their hometown to find work, Gal turning into a dragon and Sebille and Lancelot working in the theater.
Draw of Story
The story follows Gal and Sally on an adventure, being chased by some bad men for a pearl. Gal swallows it so they won't take it. When he drinks some water, he turns into a dragon. Dragons are always enthralling in a children's book.
Possible Drawbacks
The book jumps around from idea to idea, frequently. There is not a clear plot in the story. It starts with the families struggle which is the reason they move and end up in the theater. The dragons are not integral to the story even though it is given significant attention throughout. There is no driving plot and nothing exciting occurs. The family are happy working in the theater, making costumes and props for the new musical. And then it abruptly ends when the musical begins. There needs to be more excitement especially since it is a children's story. There is little to hold the attention of an adult, much less a child.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
There is no hook to the story. It is a story about a time period in this family's life. They move to a new city, work in the theater, adjust to there new lives and then put on a musical. I would watch this movie for the dragons and the magic but there is no plot to hold the audience's interest.
Fanbase Potential
This would not have a large fanbase. It does not hold up compared to current children movies. Nothing interesting or exciting happens. The dragons are nice but they just fly around .
Awards Potential
This has no awards potential. The story is not entertaining enough to be a film. There is nothing unique about the story or the events that occur.
Envisioned Budget
MEDIUM BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
SPY KIDS, ONWARD, DORA AND THE LOST CITY OF GOLD.
What’s New About the Story
The only unique element of this story is that it shows the children being affected by the parents hardships. New trade routes destroy the workforce in their tiny town and their father must leave the family to find work somewhere else. It is the catalyst for the story but isn't carried throughout. The tone is very optimistic much like any children's story.
Lead Characters
The lead characters do not stand out. Everyone is very 2 dimensional.
Uniqueness of Story
This is a very average story that could be condensed without losing any important moments. It could be improved by focusing on the dragon and the pearl that Gal swallows to become the dragon. It could be an adventure story about the pearl.
Possible Formats
Film - Streaming, TV Series - Streaming
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS