Dragon River

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FOLKTALE ADVENTURE CHILDREN'S FANTASY MYSTERY

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Rob Saunders

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This story has it all ... hardship, magic, dragons, theatre and some beautiful illustrations. With a happy ending thrown in it's truly a story for our times that reads like a children's blockbuster movie!

Genre

Folktale,Adventure,Children's,Fantasy,Mystery

Short Summary

The Drako Family live a life in the idyllic remote town of Brilliana but have to leave to the big city of Daydon after a long power cut.


The Drako family and their friends achieve great success with a Musical based on their lives featuring Solange the singer and Gallo the Dragon

Setting

Brilliana Daydon

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Rags to Riches

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Sally

Age: 12-15

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous

Additional Character Details

Name: Gal

Age: 12-15

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Modest,Lone Wolf

Additional Character Details

Name: Sebille

Age: 35

Gender: Female

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Aspiring

Additional Character Details

Name: Lancelot

Age: 35

Gender: Male

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Empathetic,Skillful,Leader

Development Pitch

This story will make a great family film. It has both jeopardy and success. Although its short at 20,000 words or so it packs in a lot of story. It also has a Dragon in Gallo that help the family as they strive to make something of themselves. He has a warm and friendly nature until he has to rescue Sally and Gal from danger when he becomes both fierce and strong. I see it as a live action film with Gallo in CGI. As a sculptor working digitally I have created him as a 3D character. The film could be set almost anywhere in the world as it has a universal feel to it. The two locations are significantly different. The first Brilliana is a remote town established to use the power from it's river. It's folksy, the nearest I've come to it personally would be the Austrian Tyrol. The city of Daydon feels like a small city with a sense of history maybe like Strasbourg. I'm feeling excited at the thought of seeing the film one day!

About The Author

I have a professional career as a sculptor, maker, engineer, artist and writer. Dragon River is my first published story.

Target Audiences

Age: 7-12

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Silverwood books

Year Published: 2020

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

978-1-78132-927-6

Genre

FANTASY

Brief

Sally and Gal live in a small town when Gal swallows a pearl and turns into a dragon. There family moves to the big city where Sally and her parents work in the theaters. They love it and are commissioned to put on a musical that features Gal and another dragon. The play is a hit.

Overall Rating

GOOD

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: GOOD

Premise: FAIR

Structure: GOOD

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

The book profile gives a vague description of the themes of the book. It describes hardships and theater but gives no details about the plot of the story. It needs to be more descriptive about the family having to move from their hometown to find work, Gal turning into a dragon and Sebille and Lancelot working in the theater.

Draw of Story

The story follows Gal and Sally on an adventure, being chased by some bad men for a pearl. Gal swallows it so they won't take it. When he drinks some water, he turns into a dragon. Dragons are always enthralling in a children's book.

Possible Drawbacks

The book jumps around from idea to idea, frequently. There is not a clear plot in the story. It starts with the families struggle which is the reason they move and end up in the theater. The dragons are not integral to the story even though it is given significant attention throughout. There is no driving plot and nothing exciting occurs. The family are happy working in the theater, making costumes and props for the new musical. And then it abruptly ends when the musical begins. There needs to be more excitement especially since it is a children's story. There is little to hold the attention of an adult, much less a child.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

There is no hook to the story. It is a story about a time period in this family's life. They move to a new city, work in the theater, adjust to there new lives and then put on a musical. I would watch this movie for the dragons and the magic but there is no plot to hold the audience's interest.

Fanbase Potential

This would not have a large fanbase. It does not hold up compared to current children movies. Nothing interesting or exciting happens. The dragons are nice but they just fly around .

Awards Potential

This has no awards potential. The story is not entertaining enough to be a film. There is nothing unique about the story or the events that occur.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

SPY KIDS, ONWARD, DORA AND THE LOST CITY OF GOLD.

What’s New About the Story

The only unique element of this story is that it shows the children being affected by the parents hardships. New trade routes destroy the workforce in their tiny town and their father must leave the family to find work somewhere else. It is the catalyst for the story but isn't carried throughout. The tone is very optimistic much like any children's story.

Lead Characters

The lead characters do not stand out. Everyone is very 2 dimensional.

Uniqueness of Story

This is a very average story that could be condensed without losing any important moments. It could be improved by focusing on the dragon and the pearl that Gal swallows to become the dragon. It could be an adventure story about the pearl.

Possible Formats

Film - Streaming, TV Series - Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS