Doom (Xian Warriors 1)

Regine Abel

Book Cover

GENRE

ACTION ADVENTURE APOCALYPTIC EPIC SUSPENSE/THRILLER ROMANCE SCI-FI WAR DRAMA POLITICAL MYSTERY

    Core Theme

    OVERCOMING EVIL/FINDING LOVE

    TIME PERIOD

    Future,2000s

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    STAR TREK (FILMS), STAR WARS (FILMS), STARSHIP TROOPERS (1997), AVATAR (2009)

    CHARACTER LIST

    • VICTORIA: 29. INTELLIGENT, CUNNING, MORAL, CARING

    • DOOM: 32. ALIEN, LOVER, MASSIVE, MUSCULAR, WARRIOR, FAITHFUL, BRAVE

    • LEGION: 32. DOOM'S BROTHER, CUNNING, DIPLOMATIC, STRONG, INTELLIGENT

    • CHAOS: 32. DOOM'S BROTHER, FIGHTER, CALCULATING, TACTICAL, COMBAT LEADER

    Logline

    When Earth is invaded by insectoid aliens, a second species of genetically engineered warriors come to humanity's rescue and herald the new evolution of the human race.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

    Target Gender: Universal

    Setting

    Earth, small town in the US.

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: self-published

    Publisher: Self-Published

    Year Published: 2020

    Starting Description

    Insectoid aliens called Kryptids make first contact with humans during a massive invasion. Attacked while scavenging for food and medicine for her makeshift hospital, Victoria is rescued by Doom, a genetically engineered alien warrior of the Vanguard who came with his brothers to liberate Earth.

    Ending Description

    The Warriors are now also facing extinction after the Kryptids destroys their means of being reborn through soul transfer. But human females developing psychic powers through the Vanguard’s training program, turn the tide in the war and give new hope to the Warriors.

    Group Specific

    Information not completed

    Hard Copy Available

    Yes

    ISBN

    978-1-989761-11-3

    Mature Audience Themes

    Nudity, Language/Profanity,Extreme Violence

    Plot - Other Elements

    Happy Ending,Twist,Meaningful Message

    Plot - Premise

    Overcoming Monster/Villain

    Main Character Details

    Name: Victoria

    Age: 28

    Gender: Female

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Charming,Adventurous,Empathetic,Engaging,Flexible,Gracious,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Strong Moral Code,Romantic,Selfless,Skillful,Decisive,Clumsy,Faithful

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Doom

    Age: 32

    Gender: Male

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Charming,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Heartthrob,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Unapologetic,Lone Wolf,Strong Moral Code,Skillful,Funny,Patriotic,Masculine,Blunt

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Legion

    Age: 32

    Gender: Male

    Role: emotional

    Key Traits: Masculine,Adventurous,Badass,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Heartthrob,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Strong Moral Code,Sophisticated,Skillful,Outspoken,Selfless,Patriotic

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Stran

    Age: 20

    Gender: Other

    Role: sidekick

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Heroic,Underdog,Decisive,Honorable,Skillful,Sarcastic,Unapologetic,Lone Wolf

    Development Pitch

    Imagine a universe where modern-day world versions of Wonder Woman’s Amazons fight alongside the genetically engineered Xian Warriors to eradicate insectoid humanoids set on enslaving the galaxy in a Starship Troopers meets The Matrix setting! Strong women warriors have a growing, proven appeal (Katniss, Black Widow, Wonder Woman, Lagertha, the Dora Miljae). In this series, the Xian Warriors fight alongside human women with the psychic ability to capture the soul of a fallen warrior and grant him rebirth by transferring his soul into a new body. This series would be ideal for a DC Universe type of movies, therefore appealing to men and women alike of all ages. The overarching story is spread over 6 books, each one constituting a single movie, filled with action, epic battles, gut-wrenching emotions, a standalone story and romantic arc with its own satisfying conclusion. Book one covers the Battle for Earth and human women becoming Soulcatchers. Book 2 and 3 reveals that each ethnic group has a unique psychic power. Combined, the powers of the women of the Vanguard and their Warriors make them nearly unstoppable. My Xian Warrior series is a celebration of the human race in all of its diversity, and of the strength of women. We are different, and it is a wonderful thing. We shouldn’t try to fit in a single mold but embrace our uniqueness and put it to the service of each other. Because together, we are stronger, if not invincible.

    Genre

    SUSPENSE, ROMANCE, ACTION, MATURE AUDIENCE, WAR, FANTASY

    Brief

    Human Doctor meets an Alien Warrior and his brothers after an attack on Earth has left humanity paralyzed in fear. The Warrior and the Doctor immediately fall for one another, and help each other cope with the perilous war that rages on Earth. Over several years, after being separated by several surprise attacks from the enemy, the two get married and birth a child, thus ensuring the future of the Warrior species.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    FIRST PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: GOOD

    Characterization: GOOD

    Commerciality: FAIR

    Franchise Potential: GOOD

    Pace: GOOD

    Premise: GOOD

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    The Book Profile is fairly accurate, though the book is much more of a romantic/drama than its description implies. While the action and thriller elements are strong, they take a back seat at the halfway point of the second act and transition quickly into the B plot as the romance of the protagonists takes hold.

    Draw of Story

    The property's premise is interesting. These hybrid humans with enhanced abilities and mixed genome is a fresh approach to human hybrids in the current sci-fi realm. The scope of the story is appealing as well. There are intergalactic stakes implied with the threat of the antagonist, and yet the focus is largely on Earth and the home planet of the human hybrids.

    Possible Drawbacks

    The book has moments where vividly descriptive sex serve as the bridge between major plot points. It seems to be either self-indulgence or fan service that will inevitably limit the potential audience to those over 18.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    The hooks is a dual set of stakes: Humanity's future hangs in the balance as an unstoppable army of bugs comes to attack Earth, while a race of intergalactic half-human warriors is looking for a way to extend the power and longevity of their species. The two come head to head and the protagonists serve as the first point of contact between these periled peoples.

    Fanbase Potential

    There is certainly a space in the sci fi market for this property to pick up a fanbase. Those interested in Star Trek and perhaps Star Wars would gravitate toward this property, and likely those of an older audience. At this point in US media at least, the rise of a sci-fi driven nerd culture could make this property appealing to many.

    Awards Potential

    This property could perhaps pick up awards for its special effects or its performances, but the IP itself is rather straightforward and likely would not garner much Award potential.

    Envisioned Budget

    LARGE BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    STAR TREK (FILMS), STAR WARS (FILMS), STARSHIP TROPPERS (1997), AVATAR (2009)

    What’s New About the Story

    The story does rely on familiar factors, but attempts to combine sci-fi elements to give it some unusual flare. The story of the alien Warriors is doubled down when it is revealed that they have sidekicks who can capture the souls from their dying bodies and return them to new physical forms. This becomes a plot point that brings the humans and aliens closer, and in the end both races have a symbiotic relationship that is not often seen in sci-fi films featuring the "alien savior" trope. At time the attempts at originality muddle the different elements of the story together and complicate the issue. There are many different people (humans, Xians, Hulanian Soulcatchers, Human Soulcatchers) and their introductions are not all equally as graceful. The plot of the war as an overarching point of contention becomes stale and, whether on purpose of by chance, the author shifts gears in order to focus on these different peoples in the later half of the story.

    Lead Characters

    They are both intelligent and romantic. They do end up falling for the alien's charm, but it is mutual and less male-domineering than it could have been. She is capable and moral, but her alien mate is not an exact foil of her and so she seems like a shining anomaly surrounded by a background of rather basic characters.

    Uniqueness of Story

    This is not a rare gem as it stands now. There is so much focus on the romance (which may be heavily minimized depending on the chosen audience) that the plot seems to take a back seat at times. The most glaring issue is the fact that the war with the antagonists is such a feeble plot device that the author time skips numerous times to avoid having to go into detail as to how Earth and its citizens are faring after years of abuse from a powerful and evolving army of space-age murderers. There is a strong focus on the protagonists, but their backstories are only brought up in the beginning and end of the story, and serve as little more than bookends to the romantic/thriller that dominates the central arc. If there is more depth of plot, sci-fi fans would latch onto the property more quickly. If the adaptation is focused purely on CGI and the epic nature of the battle, then the plot may not be necessary to turn a profit.

    Possible Formats

    Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Cable, TV Series - Network

    Analyst Recommendation

    CONSIDER

    Justification

    The story has a sufficient skeleton to sell an action/romance movie or sci-fi romance pilot. This reader believes that the adaptation's success will live or die on the budget used to make the sets and actors seem interesting and alien. The elements of romance, action and protagonist appeal would not be enough to host a big budget show over time (think Westworld's flop) but could probably make a competent sci-fi thriller. The only issue with entering the sci-fi market with this untested property is the risk of initial investment. If the movie cannot compete with Marvel-Lucasfilm-Disney, then it will be relegated to a small margin of sales or be forced to release between massive Disney films.

    Brief

    Bug aliens known as Kryptids attack Earth and humanity's only hope are a legion of part-human warriors known as the Xians. Victoria, a doctor caught among the chaos, finds herself face to face with the Xian Leader, Doom. The two develop an instant connection that, with a little luck, would prove to be the key to defeating the Kryptids and protecting the future of the Xians.

    What We Liked

    - The story has a fresh take on aliens that could prove to be its point of contact with the burgeoning number of new sci-fi fans. There is potential to capture the current hype of Star Wars, Star Trek and the Avengers to sell the half-human Xians to eager movie-goers.
    - This property has pro-female connotations and a strong female lead to back them up. The supporting cast is engaging and each one serves a role in the fight to come that viewers can resonate with. Every viewer will have someone to root for.
    - This property screams big budget alien film. There is a strong focus on equal parts action and romance, and there are some compelling characters for both male and female audiences. Both protagonists get their fare share of action, adventure and sexual dominance, which suggests that the demographic for this property is rather wide. Following along with the common four film trilogy, this will be the first movie and as such it will establish the plot. As the majority of the budget will go into asset development for this and future CGI elements, it will be important to lean into the romance early to save budget wherever possible. This reader suggests minimizing the necessity of massive CGI landscapes and focus on one or two significant battle scenes to allow for the most potent shots possible.
    - This would be a sort of Walking Dead archetype for TV, in which the role of the antagonist horde will take the forefront for the first season or two, and then begin to fade to the backdrop as interpersonal drama takes hold.
    - Key points: Aliens, Romance, World in Chaos, Defeating Evil, Future of Humanity at Stake.

    Synopsis

    Victoria is a late 20's doctor trying to help her patients when the Kyrptid aliens attack Earth. She takes shelter and begins to establish a makeshift hospital. A few weeks into the attack, she meets a golden-skinned alien named Doom. Him and his brothers have come to Earth to protect it from the Kryptid invasion, and to look for mates to help preserve the future of their race.

    Doom and Victoria have an instant connection that brings them close in the weeks to come. They do their best to help the humans and fight off the scourge attacking them. The morning after their first passionate kiss, Doom's body is killed and Victoria is forced to flee the scene. She is eventually brought to one of the Motherships that brought Doom and the others, known as Xian Warriors, to Earth.

    There she finds out that Doom can be saved, that another race of people known as Hulanian Soulcatchers, can capture his soul and return it to a new body. She waits for months until the process is complete. Meanwhile the Kryptid have taken to attacking the Xian home planet, killing the creator of the Xians and destroying all of the ""Shells"" that Xians use as new bodies to implant their souls into upon physical death.

    When Doom is finally rebirthed in a new Shell, the two share a passionate night in bed, and Victoria allows doom to claim her, thus extending her life to two hundred years.
    Doom makes many trips across the US to fight alongside his brothers, and Victoria tries to help the medical staff aboard the mothership. Her heart aches for Doom, and when she is given a chance to communicate with the Xians telepathically, she jumps at the opportunity. It takes months, and her progress is agonizingly slow. It is found out that human women are the superior soulcatchers to the Hulanians. As their true mates, human women are trained to be the new soulcatchers. Victoria, unable to progress far enough to ever become a soulcatcher, waits agonizingly for Doom.

    When he finally returns from the front lines, they try for two years to procreate. Her powers of telepathic communication increase, and her pregnancy follows. Her pregnancy is rough and there are many prying minds. When she finds her son's unborn mind and communicates with it, others begin to do the same. She becomes defensive, and tries to prevent the Xians from bombarding her unborn child.

    In an effort to give her peace, Doom channels his energy into a new found ability taught to him by the Soulcatchers. He takes her to a beach in a dreamlike state where they make love and she finds temporary bliss. Her son, Raven, is born and the mothership celebrates. Months later, the final Kryptid threat is eradicated on Earth, and Xians along with Victoria and some of the human soulcatchers return to the Xian home world to live out their extended lives and help the galaxy.

    About The Author

    Regine Abel has previously worked in film production and game design. She has taken on sci-fi writing and has over a dozen self-published books.