DRAMA

Carson grew up in an all American family but never really fit on. Her relationship with her mother was strained; she struggled with her sexuality and what her path was. She created her own family with friends as she explored the world and learned about holistic healing practices.

GOOD

THIRD PERSON

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: GOOD

The book profile is a disjointed attempt to reflect the book. It needs to be more concrete alluding to the events of the story.

The story begins with the American dream. Carson's father was 1st generation of Italian immigration. They're sacrifice allowed Carson to live a life as freely as she does. Carson's story is extremely drawn out and lacks interesting plot points.

The book is extremely long winded, giving every detail of Carson's life. It isn't attention grabbing or inspirational. The story needs something more engaging. It reads like a play by play of the characters life.

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

The hook is that Carson goes out into the world, creating her own path. Carson is everyone and their stories. She makes friends, finds love, changes careers, discovers a passion and grows old. The film would need more excitement for me.

This could have a large fanbase purely because it is the story of a woman who is apart of the LGBTQAI community.

This does not have awards potential. The story needs more direction and a plot. It meanders through Carson's life without any dramatic events.

LOW BUDGET

JOY, ON THE BASIS OF SEX

The story is original because it is about one women's specific life story. Outside of that, it is much like anyone else's story that goes through ups and downs with different chapters in it. Carson is relatable because she lives like the audience. There isn't this huge event in her life that alters her. She is living a normal life but that might not translate well on screen.

The lead characters is not afraid to live her life. She goes with the flow. Overall, she is an ordinary woman making her way in the world.

This is an average story. There is nothing gripping or intriguing about Carson's life that hasn't been done before.

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, Film - Studio

WORK IN PROGRESS

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

To change this story to a recommend, there needs to be a driving plot. Is Carson trying to accomplish something? Is she working towards a goal or dealing with extraordinary circumstances around her? They is very little drama here.