Shoot the Messenger

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ACTION SCI-FI

Future

Pippa DaCosta

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Logline

When one of Kesh Lasota's illegal messages kills its recipient, she's plunged into an ancient war between magic and technology. Wanted for murder and on-the-run from the law, Kesh must uncover the true killer. But not everything is as it seems, including Kesh herself.

Genre

Action,Sci-fi

Short Summary

Messenger, Kesh Lasota, with the help of her AI drone, just wants to keep her head down and earn a living. When a sniper assassinates her latest recipient, she must hunt the killer to clear her name. But nothing is as it seems. The killer is fae—a race of beings not seen in Halow for 1000 years.


*WARNING SPOILER* With the truth unveiled, Kesh's entire story is revealed to be lies. She is the infamous "wraithmaker", the fae king's assassin, sent to kill the missing prince, betraying everyone she knows and loves in the process.

Setting

Sci-fi, far-future.

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain

Plot - Other Elements

Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Language/Profanity

Main Character Details

Name: Kesh Lasota

Age: Early 20s

Gender: Lgbt

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Badass,Complex,Skillful,Sarcastic,Secretive,Manipulative

Additional Character Details

Name: Marshal Kellee

Age: Immortal

Gender: Male

Role: Mentor

Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Charming,Complex,Confident,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Sexy,Skillful,Funny

Additional Character Details

Name: Talen

Age: Immortal

Gender: Male

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Complex,Confident,Empathetic,Faithful,Heroic,Modest,Sexy,Skillful,Secretive,Seductive,Sophisticated

Additional Character Details

The author has not yet written this

Development Pitch

Lies aren't her only weapons against the fae... In the Halow system, one of Earth’s three sister star systems, tek and magic—humans and fae—are at war. Kesh Lasota is a ghost in the machine. Invisible to tek, she’s hired by the criminal underworld to carry illegal messages through the Halow system. But when one of those messages kills its recipient, Kesh finds herself on the run with a bounty on her head and a quick-witted marshal on her tail. Proving her innocence should be straightforward. Until a warfae steals the evidence she needs. The fae haven’t been seen in Halow in over a thousand years. And this one—a brutally efficient killer able to wield tek—should not exist. But neither should Kesh. As Kesh’s carefully crafted lie of a life crumbles around her, she knows being invisible is no longer an option. To hunt the warfae, to stop him from destroying a thousand-year fragile peace, she must resurrect the horrors of her past. Kesh Lasota was a ghost. Now she’s back, and there’s only one thing she knows for certain: Nobody shoots the messenger and gets away with it.

About The Author

Pippa DaCosta is a USATODAY bestselling, two-time DragonCon Award Finalist, and Amazon Breakthrough Novel semi-finalist author. Pippa is traditionally published with Bloomsbury and Random House Germany. Her work has been featured in the Galaxy Chronicles anthology, part of the Future Chronicles series. Pippa continues to independently and traditionally publish fantasy and science fiction. Her books have been downloaded, bought and listened to over 1,000,000 times. ​

Target Audiences

Age: 35-54

Target Gender: Universal,Female Leaning

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Self-Published

Year Published: 2018

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

Information not completed

Genre

FANTASY, THRILLER, ACTION, WAR, POLITICS, MATURE AUDIENCE

Brief

Kesh is a "messenger", who is framed for the murder of a union leader. She soon learns there is a "fae" involved, the long thought extinct species of magic wielders. In an effort to clear her name and recover her friend she embarks on a journey to get to the root of the conspiracy. She unravels the plot of the "fae" and reveals her long concealed involvement with them in the process, vowing to stop their ambitions of eradicating the human species.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

FIRST PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: GOOD

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The book profile accurately reflects the book.

Draw of Story

The author did a good job of capturing the reader's attention by beginning the story at the inciting incident. The opening scene is action-packed, engaging, and draws a lot of intrigue.

Possible Drawbacks

The author has a lot of ground to cover in terms of exposition, but unfortunately does not do it in an effective way. Instead of providing the reader with background information about the world of the story and the race of "fae", we rely on the protagonist's internal thoughts to relay this when it is relevant to the particular scene. This leaves the reader somewhat confused and relying on the author to "spell-out" important information, giving the reader less interaction with the story.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

A seemingly ordinary messenger is caught up in an intergalactic conspiracy, but the audience soon learns that the protagonist is at the center of it.

Fanbase Potential

This story has the potential for a moderate fanbase. The elements preventing this story from having a large fanbase is its mature content and complex mythos, confining the demographic of potential viewers to a primarily adult one.

Awards Potential

I don't see this story having much potential for awards/acclaim, due to it being primarily "plot-driven". Although, the protagonist is interesting and layered due to their background, this isn't nearly explored enough due to an effort to preserve a plot twist. Also, there aren't any resonant themes presented overall in the work.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

SHOWS AND FILMS LIKE "BLADE RUNNER", "THE FIFTH ELEMENT", "TRIGUN", "COWBOY BEBOP" AND "MEMENTO" ARE SIMILAR TO THIS STORY, DUE TO THEIR SCI-FI SETTING AND/OR FEATURING A COMPLEX PROTAGONIST HARBORING A DARK SECRET THAT SHAKES UP THE PLOT OF THEIR RESPECTIVE STORY.

What’s New About the Story

The protagonist is somewhat unique due to her repressed background that shakes up the plot of the story. Her status as a genetically engineered human who is responsible for the internal conflict of a race thought to be dead is a major shock to the reader. However, this unique twist would be more effective if the story presented early exposition on the "fae", their politics, and the "rules" of the world.

Lead Characters

As stated above, the protagonist, and some of her companions (Marshall Kellee and Larsen), have very complex backgrounds.

Uniqueness of Story

If the dialogue and overall plot were tweaked a little to seem less formulaic and/or more depth is given to characters who already have the benefit of complex backgrounds, this story could become a rare gem.

Possible Formats

TV Series - Network, TV Series - Cable, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series, TV Series - Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

The world is there, the characters are there, the only thing that is needed really is a thematic thread to weave everything together. A strong theme for the story would help the author in determining how to effectively convey the goals and motivations for the characters and figuring out how to handle the exposition for the complex world they created.