Words of Power

Peter Krivinskas peter.krivinskas@gmail.com 1528591253563

FANTASY

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Peter Krivinskas

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Logline

An orphaned Prince living with a woodworker and his family receives words of power on his 16th birthday. He learns to develop those powers with the intention of killing the uncle that killed his parents and friends. He will then be able to retake the crown which is his birthright.

Genre

Fantasy

Short Summary

The beginning has the King assassinated whilst returning to his home. The Queen has seen his death in her dream and leaves the castle taking their son to a remote village and handing him to a woodworker and his wife. Sometime after she leaves, she is captured and killed.


After coming into his magical abilities and being trained to use them, the Prince leads an army against his uncle, the King. He kills his uncle, marries his Princess and becomes King

Setting

Fantasy country

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Quest,Overcoming Monster/Villain

Plot - Other Elements

Coming of Age,Happy Ending,Meaningful Message

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Prince William

Age: 18/19

Gender: Male

Role: Emotional

Key Traits: Adventurous,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Heroic,Honorable,Naive

Additional Character Details

Name: Princess Soraya

Age: 18

Gender: Female

Role: Emotional

Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Confident,Engaging,Faithful,Patriotic,Skillful,Romantic

Additional Character Details

Name: Ashok

Age: 50

Gender: Male

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Badass,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Faithful,Heroic,Honorable,Leader,Patriotic,Selfless,Skillful

Additional Character Details

Name: Malik

Age: 50

Gender: Male

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Faithful,Educated,Honorable,Patriotic,Selfless,Skillful,Visionary,Secretive,Sophisticated

Development Pitch

Our hero presents as the village boy that every mother would want their daughter to marry. On his 16th Birthday, he is gifted with powers. Seeking help, he seeks out Malik, a hermit. From him, he learns that he is a Prince. He strives to become the Prince that he was born to be and sets out to avenge his parents and retake his crown. The story is a feel-good story but it has its share of tragedy, betrayal and finally romance as the hero falls for the daughter of a neighbouring king. It is an exciting page-turner.

About The Author

Peter Krivinskas

Target Audiences

Age: 7-12,13-17,18-34,35-54

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: No

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

Information not completed

Genre

FANTASY

Brief

When Prince William was only a small baby, his father Robert, the King, was attacked by his own brother, Oswald, who wanted to put the crown on his head. Feeling that something terrible was about to happen, the Queen took the baby and gave him to a poor family, to save his life. When William, now Cam, reached the age of 16, he learned he was a Prince with special powers, then he decided to seek revenge and retrieve the throne.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: GOOD

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

It is accurate, but I believe the author could add Kind Oswald as the antagonist.

Draw of Story

It's a story about a "common" boy who discovers he is a Prince with magical powers. Fantasy books have the power to make the audience dream of a better life.

Possible Drawbacks

Despite being a story for all ages, it sounds a little bit childish.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

I believe the looks of the film (magical powers, a kingdom, wizards...) would attract the audience. The narrative itself is not that attractive.

Fanbase Potential

I don't think so. It's a little bit childish for adults and violent for kids.

Awards Potential

I don't think so. The story is not original and the drama is not intense enough.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

GAME OF THRONES: A BOY WHO IS TREATED AS A BASTARD IS THE REAL HEIR OF THE THRONE. THE LION KING: AN ENVIOUS BROTHER KILLS THE KING AND THE LITTLE PRINCE WILL TRY TO RETRIEVE THE THRONE, AND FREE HIS PEOPLE. HARRY POTTER: AN APPRENTICE OF WITCHCRAFT THAT HAS LESSONS WITH EXPERIENCED WIZARDS.

What’s New About the Story

The little Prince has magical powers. I believe it's a different approach to revenge stories. This part could be improved in order to become more clear. The Prince seems to be the chosen one by Nature, the spirits animals, his essence, but we don't totally get why he needs these powers to be a King.

Lead Characters

It's a fantasy story, on the verge of becoming a fairytale, but the protagonist is not Machineavan. The Prince is a very good-hearted boy, but he kills his uncle, for example.

Uniqueness of Story

Not a rare gem. I believe the characters should be improved. The internal conflicts. The why's of the story. Why does this boy need magical powers to seek revenge? Why the age of 16? Oswald has become an evil man. Why?

Possible Formats

Film - Studio, TV Series - Network

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

The structure is good, so it starts with a thumbs up. However, some scenes could be removed to make the pace less rushed. Fewer events, more time to digest what is happening. The characters could show more emotions. The queen seems to be the only one in the book to truly show her feelings. I believe the Prince would be more likable if he could manifest his emotions. The reasons should be developed. Why does this kingdom select young people to receive powerful words? Why does William need magical powers? I understand that we have answers to these questions in the book, but I believe these questions should be further analyzed to make the story more complex. It's a fairytale, and it has elements of a fairytale, but what does this story have that seems different from many others? I believe that, if adapted, it needs more elements to make it more unique. The target audience is 7-54, but I believe it has to be further analyzed, as well. It's too violent (murders, revenge) for kids, and too childish (narratively speaking) for adults. It should be designed (the whole narrative) for a reduced audience, and it naturally could attract other targets. It's an interesting idea, and it has potential, but it needs further development.