Words of Power
Submision Type
book
Logline
An orphaned Prince living with a woodworker and his family receives words of power on his 16th birthday. He learns to develop those powers with the intention of killing the uncle that killed his parents and friends. He will then be able to retake the crown which is his birthright.
Genre
Fantasy
Short Summary
The beginning has the King assassinated whilst returning to his home. The Queen has seen his death in her dream and leaves the castle taking their son to a remote village and handing him to a woodworker and his wife. Sometime after she leaves, she is captured and killed.
Setting
Fantasy country
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Quest,Overcoming Monster/Villain
Plot - Other Elements
Coming of Age,Happy Ending,Meaningful Message
Mature Audience Themes
Information not completed
Main Character Details
Name: Prince William
Age: 18/19
Gender: Male
Role: Emotional
Key Traits: Adventurous,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Heroic,Honorable,Naive
Additional Character Details
Name: Princess Soraya
Age: 18
Gender: Female
Role: Emotional
Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Confident,Engaging,Faithful,Patriotic,Skillful,Romantic
Additional Character Details
Name: Ashok
Age: 50
Gender: Male
Role: mentor
Key Traits: Badass,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Faithful,Heroic,Honorable,Leader,Patriotic,Selfless,Skillful
Additional Character Details
Name: Malik
Age: 50
Gender: Male
Role: mentor
Key Traits: Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Faithful,Educated,Honorable,Patriotic,Selfless,Skillful,Visionary,Secretive,Sophisticated
Genre
FANTASY
Brief
When Prince William was only a small baby, his father Robert, the King, was attacked by his own brother, Oswald, who wanted to put the crown on his head. Feeling that something terrible was about to happen, the Queen took the baby and gave him to a poor family, to save his life. When William, now Cam, reached the age of 16, he learned he was a Prince with special powers, then he decided to seek revenge and retrieve the throne.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: GOOD
Characterization: GOOD
Commerciality: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Pace: FAIR
Premise: FAIR
Structure: GOOD
Theme: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
It is accurate, but I believe the author could add Kind Oswald as the antagonist.
Draw of Story
It's a story about a "common" boy who discovers he is a Prince with magical powers. Fantasy books have the power to make the audience dream of a better life.
Possible Drawbacks
Despite being a story for all ages, it sounds a little bit childish.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
I believe the looks of the film (magical powers, a kingdom, wizards...) would attract the audience. The narrative itself is not that attractive.
Fanbase Potential
I don't think so. It's a little bit childish for adults and violent for kids.
Awards Potential
I don't think so. The story is not original and the drama is not intense enough.
Envisioned Budget
LARGE BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
GAME OF THRONES: A BOY WHO IS TREATED AS A BASTARD IS THE REAL HEIR OF THE THRONE. THE LION KING: AN ENVIOUS BROTHER KILLS THE KING AND THE LITTLE PRINCE WILL TRY TO RETRIEVE THE THRONE, AND FREE HIS PEOPLE. HARRY POTTER: AN APPRENTICE OF WITCHCRAFT THAT HAS LESSONS WITH EXPERIENCED WIZARDS.
What’s New About the Story
The little Prince has magical powers. I believe it's a different approach to revenge stories. This part could be improved in order to become more clear. The Prince seems to be the chosen one by Nature, the spirits animals, his essence, but we don't totally get why he needs these powers to be a King.
Lead Characters
It's a fantasy story, on the verge of becoming a fairytale, but the protagonist is not Machineavan. The Prince is a very good-hearted boy, but he kills his uncle, for example.
Uniqueness of Story
Not a rare gem. I believe the characters should be improved. The internal conflicts. The why's of the story. Why does this boy need magical powers to seek revenge? Why the age of 16? Oswald has become an evil man. Why?
Possible Formats
Film - Studio, TV Series - Network
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
The structure is good, so it starts with a thumbs up. However, some scenes could be removed to make the pace less rushed. Fewer events, more time to digest what is happening. The characters could show more emotions. The queen seems to be the only one in the book to truly show her feelings. I believe the Prince would be more likable if he could manifest his emotions. The reasons should be developed. Why does this kingdom select young people to receive powerful words? Why does William need magical powers? I understand that we have answers to these questions in the book, but I believe these questions should be further analyzed to make the story more complex. It's a fairytale, and it has elements of a fairytale, but what does this story have that seems different from many others? I believe that, if adapted, it needs more elements to make it more unique. The target audience is 7-54, but I believe it has to be further analyzed, as well. It's too violent (murders, revenge) for kids, and too childish (narratively speaking) for adults. It should be designed (the whole narrative) for a reduced audience, and it naturally could attract other targets. It's an interesting idea, and it has potential, but it needs further development.