Kiki: Perfectly Imperfect
ADVENTURE DRAMA ACTION FAMILY FANTASY ROMANCE FUNNY MELODRAMA
Other,2000s
PAULINE GIBB
Submision Type
book
Logline
Being born in Nishinari, a poor district of Japan, has its challenges. For Kiki the mouse this is more about his appearance than wealth. Protected by the wise words of his mother and a special jacket she crafts Kiki sets out on a quest for enlightenment that becomes more a matter of survival
Genre
Adventure,Drama,Action,Family,Fantasy,Romance,Funny,Melodrama
Short Summary
A young mouse born white in a family of dark mice in a poor district of Japan learns quickly that being different has many challenges. A philosophical mother and a supportive siblings do all they can to build his resilience, teaching him the lessons necessary to survive in the outside world.
Setting
Japan, Timor Leste,
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Internal Journey/Rebirth,Quest,Voyage and Return
Plot - Other Elements
Coming of Age,Happy Ending,Meaningful Message
Mature Audience Themes
Information not completed
Main Character Details
Name: Kiki. A mouse born different
Age: Child to adult
Gender: Male
Role: Logical
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Clumsy,Decisive,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Heroic,Educated,Modest,Skillful,Funny,Visionary,Romantic,Strong Moral Code
Additional Character Details
Name: Kashikoi. Kiki's philosophical mother
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Role: Emotional
Key Traits: Charming,Decisive,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Modest,Selfless,Skillful,Funny,Visionary,Sophisticated,Strong Moral Code
Additional Character Details
Name: Umineko (Rusty) - ship's cat and Kiki's new best friend
Age: 20
Gender: Male
Role: mentor
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Complex,Confident,Crazy,Engaging,Heroic,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Blunt,Outspoken,Skillful,Funny,Lone Wolf
Additional Character Details
Name: Nia
Age: 18
Gender: Female
Role: emotional
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Complex,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Honorable,Naive,Modest,Sexy,Skillful,Visionary
Genre
ACTION, DRAMA, FANTASY
Brief
In a black mice family, a white mouse suffers from prejudices and higher risks for being born differently. The little mouse goes on an adventurous journey worldwide, ends up approaching a friendly cat, and finding love.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: FAIR
Commerciality: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Pace: FAIR
Premise: FAIR
Structure: FAIR
Theme: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
It is accurate.
Draw of Story
The story, which at first seems to be a children's one, delivers an intriguing analogy of being born "different" in a prejudiced society.
Possible Drawbacks
The actions repeat continuously. Mice spend their days looking for food, and it becomes boring and monotonous. If the story was created only for a young audience, perhaps these repeated actions could be less damaging. However, as the target audience is wider (7-54), this repetition becomes quite uncomfortable. A variety of demands and events would help the narrative to flow more interestingly.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
For children, the hook would be these fantasy characters, this environment of animation, and the adventures of the little mouse. For an adult audience, the hook would be this analogy about the prejudices that we face in society.
Fanbase Potential
I don't believe that the story has elements solid enough to attract a large fan base.
Awards Potential
I don't believe so because the story is a little cliche and tiring. Suppose the author could add more significant and diverse conflicts that would expose these prejudices in a layer intended for the adult audience. In that case, the film could have the potential for awards.
Envisioned Budget
LARGE BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
THE UGLY DUCKLING: A DUCKLING IS CONSIDERED "UGLY" BECAUSE HE IS DIFFERENT FROM HIS SIBLINGS. STUART LITTLE: A MOUSE ADOPTED BY A FAMILY OF HUMANS, SUFFERS PREJUDICE FOR BEING DIFFERENT.
What’s New About the Story
It is a Japanese family of mice, which brings interesting aspects of that culture.
Lead Characters
The protagonist is likable. He's a kind little mouse who simply wants to help his family and be accepted. As a character created for children, it is correct and interesting. But to please other audiences, he could be a little more elaborate.
Uniqueness of Story
It is not, but it would be more potent if Japanese culture could be more present in the story, conflicts could go a little beyond fundamental needs, and if the narrative could be more creative.
Possible Formats
Film - Streaming, Film - Indie
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
The story demands a greater variety of conflicts for all types of audiences to follow and enjoy. The protagonist is likable, he is visually different, which is good to make us focus on him, but he could also sound different in his way of being and speaking. He has characteristics that are very similar to those of his siblings. And that ends up making his trajectory less glorious. The life tips that the mother gives to Kiki are good teachings for a young audience, but the overuse may give the film a didactic look. Perhaps if the author used a little bit of humor during the journey, the "serious" parts - prejudice and differences - might seem less formal. The trip's adventures and the friends that the mouse makes along the way are a good breath to the main plot but could be further developed in order to entertain. Diverse conflicts could give us the feeling of a more challenging, more complex journey, and that the triumph of the mouse when returning home was well deserved. In general, it is a story that could work, as it brings an important message about self-acceptance for children, but it ends up falling into repetitions and cliches. Better development of narrative and character could give the story a fresher air.