Kiki: Perfectly Imperfect

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ADVENTURE DRAMA ACTION FAMILY FANTASY ROMANCE FUNNY MELODRAMA

Other,2000s

PAULINE GIBB

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Logline

Being born in Nishinari, a poor district of Japan, has its challenges. For Kiki the mouse this is more about his appearance than wealth. Protected by the wise words of his mother and a special jacket she crafts Kiki sets out on a quest for enlightenment that becomes more a matter of survival

Genre

Adventure,Drama,Action,Family,Fantasy,Romance,Funny,Melodrama

Short Summary

A young mouse born white in a family of dark mice in a poor district of Japan learns quickly that being different has many challenges. A philosophical mother and a supportive siblings do all they can to build his resilience, teaching him the lessons necessary to survive in the outside world.


Returning home is the ultimate goal for Kiki and his pregnant partner Nia so they leave Fremantle and stow away on a cargo carrier bound for Japan. The journey has many challenges however, with the help of Kiki's feline friend, they return in time to celebrate old family and new life

Setting

Japan, Timor Leste,

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Internal Journey/Rebirth,Quest,Voyage and Return

Plot - Other Elements

Coming of Age,Happy Ending,Meaningful Message

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Kiki. A mouse born different

Age: Child to adult

Gender: Male

Role: Logical

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Clumsy,Decisive,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Heroic,Educated,Modest,Skillful,Funny,Visionary,Romantic,Strong Moral Code

Additional Character Details

Name: Kashikoi. Kiki's philosophical mother

Age: 30

Gender: Female

Role: Emotional

Key Traits: Charming,Decisive,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Modest,Selfless,Skillful,Funny,Visionary,Sophisticated,Strong Moral Code

Additional Character Details

Name: Umineko (Rusty) - ship's cat and Kiki's new best friend

Age: 20

Gender: Male

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Complex,Confident,Crazy,Engaging,Heroic,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Blunt,Outspoken,Skillful,Funny,Lone Wolf

Additional Character Details

Name: Nia

Age: 18

Gender: Female

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Complex,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Honorable,Naive,Modest,Sexy,Skillful,Visionary

Development Pitch

I see the story following much the same path as the original story. Kiki growing up in tough Nishinari, being taught and teaching himself the skills necessary to survive in the wider world. His journey on the cargo ship and the adventures he has with his new best friend and then the journey to adulthood as he makes his new life in a strange country far away from the one he was born in

About The Author

PAULINE GIBB Pauline is known for her quick wit and quirky sense of humour which is reflected in everything she does including her writing. She is passionate about many things; most importantly her daughter Georgia. She enjoys a close circle of friends, loves her animals and the odd glass or five of red wine. She has a very impressive and eclectic range of creative and artistic talents which she uses to positively inspire others. She is practical and realistic about life and knows what it is like to “do it tough” having grown up in a housing commission area where she was the only member of her family to graduate from secondary school and go on to study a university degree becoming a teacher and later an educational administrator. Writing has always been one of Pauline’s key interests so she took the opportunity to follow that passion when a forced sabbatical saw her temporarily cease full-time employment two years ago. She has since written several stories, Kiki being the first to be published.

Target Audiences

Age: 7-12,13-17,18-34,55+,35-54

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: with a Publisher

Publisher: Austin Nacauley

Year Published: 2017

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

9781788238977 9781788238984 9781788238991

Genre

ACTION, DRAMA, FANTASY

Brief

In a black mice family, a white mouse suffers from prejudices and higher risks for being born differently. The little mouse goes on an adventurous journey worldwide, ends up approaching a friendly cat, and finding love.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

It is accurate.

Draw of Story

The story, which at first seems to be a children's one, delivers an intriguing analogy of being born "different" in a prejudiced society.

Possible Drawbacks

The actions repeat continuously. Mice spend their days looking for food, and it becomes boring and monotonous. If the story was created only for a young audience, perhaps these repeated actions could be less damaging. However, as the target audience is wider (7-54), this repetition becomes quite uncomfortable. A variety of demands and events would help the narrative to flow more interestingly.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

For children, the hook would be these fantasy characters, this environment of animation, and the adventures of the little mouse. For an adult audience, the hook would be this analogy about the prejudices that we face in society.

Fanbase Potential

I don't believe that the story has elements solid enough to attract a large fan base.

Awards Potential

I don't believe so because the story is a little cliche and tiring. Suppose the author could add more significant and diverse conflicts that would expose these prejudices in a layer intended for the adult audience. In that case, the film could have the potential for awards.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

THE UGLY DUCKLING: A DUCKLING IS CONSIDERED "UGLY" BECAUSE HE IS DIFFERENT FROM HIS SIBLINGS. STUART LITTLE: A MOUSE ADOPTED BY A FAMILY OF HUMANS, SUFFERS PREJUDICE FOR BEING DIFFERENT.

What’s New About the Story

It is a Japanese family of mice, which brings interesting aspects of that culture.

Lead Characters

The protagonist is likable. He's a kind little mouse who simply wants to help his family and be accepted. As a character created for children, it is correct and interesting. But to please other audiences, he could be a little more elaborate.

Uniqueness of Story

It is not, but it would be more potent if Japanese culture could be more present in the story, conflicts could go a little beyond fundamental needs, and if the narrative could be more creative.

Possible Formats

Film - Streaming, Film - Indie

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

The story demands a greater variety of conflicts for all types of audiences to follow and enjoy. The protagonist is likable, he is visually different, which is good to make us focus on him, but he could also sound different in his way of being and speaking. He has characteristics that are very similar to those of his siblings. And that ends up making his trajectory less glorious. The life tips that the mother gives to Kiki are good teachings for a young audience, but the overuse may give the film a didactic look. Perhaps if the author used a little bit of humor during the journey, the "serious" parts - prejudice and differences - might seem less formal. The trip's adventures and the friends that the mouse makes along the way are a good breath to the main plot but could be further developed in order to entertain. Diverse conflicts could give us the feeling of a more challenging, more complex journey, and that the triumph of the mouse when returning home was well deserved. In general, it is a story that could work, as it brings an important message about self-acceptance for children, but it ends up falling into repetitions and cliches. Better development of narrative and character could give the story a fresher air.