Kiki: Perfectly Imperfect
ADVENTURE DRAMA ACTION FAMILY FANTASY ROMANCE FUNNY MELODRAMA
Being born in Nishinari, a poor district of Japan, has its challenges. For Kiki the mouse this is more about his appearance than wealth. Protected by the wise words of his mother and a special jacket she crafts Kiki sets out on a quest for enlightenment that becomes more a matter of survival
A young mouse born white in a family of dark mice in a poor district of Japan learns quickly that being different has many challenges. A philosophical mother and a supportive siblings do all they can to build his resilience, teaching him the lessons necessary to survive in the outside world.
Returning home is the ultimate goal for Kiki and his pregnant partner Nia so they leave Fremantle and stow away on a cargo carrier bound for Japan. The journey has many challenges however, with the help of Kiki's feline friend, they return in time to celebrate old family and new life
Japan, Timor Leste,
Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Internal Journey/Rebirth,Quest,Voyage and Return
Plot - Other Elements
Coming of Age,Happy Ending,Meaningful Message
Mature Audience Themes
Information not completed
Main Character Details
Name: Kiki. A mouse born different
Age: Child to adult
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Clumsy,Decisive,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Heroic,Educated,Modest,Skillful,Funny,Visionary,Romantic,Strong Moral Code
Additional Character Details
Name: Kashikoi. Kiki's philosophical mother
Key Traits: Charming,Decisive,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Modest,Selfless,Skillful,Funny,Visionary,Sophisticated,Strong Moral Code
Additional Character Details
Name: Umineko (Rusty) - ship's cat and Kiki's new best friend
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Complex,Confident,Crazy,Engaging,Heroic,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Blunt,Outspoken,Skillful,Funny,Lone Wolf
Additional Character Details
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Complex,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Honorable,Naive,Modest,Sexy,Skillful,Visionary
I see the story following much the same path as the original story. Kiki growing up in tough Nishinari, being taught and teaching himself the skills necessary to survive in the wider world. His journey on the cargo ship and the adventures he has with his new best friend and then the journey to adulthood as he makes his new life in a strange country far away from the one he was born in
ACTION, DRAMA, FANTASY
In a black mice family, a white mouse suffers from prejudices and higher risks for being born differently. The little mouse goes on an adventurous journey worldwide, ends up approaching a friendly cat, and finding love.
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
It is accurate.
Draw of Story
The story, which at first seems to be a children's one, delivers an intriguing analogy of being born "different" in a prejudiced society.
The actions repeat continuously. Mice spend their days looking for food, and it becomes boring and monotonous. If the story was created only for a young audience, perhaps these repeated actions could be less damaging. However, as the target audience is wider (7-54), this repetition becomes quite uncomfortable. A variety of demands and events would help the narrative to flow more interestingly.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
For children, the hook would be these fantasy characters, this environment of animation, and the adventures of the little mouse. For an adult audience, the hook would be this analogy about the prejudices that we face in society.
I don't believe that the story has elements solid enough to attract a large fan base.
I don't believe so because the story is a little cliche and tiring. Suppose the author could add more significant and diverse conflicts that would expose these prejudices in a layer intended for the adult audience. In that case, the film could have the potential for awards.
Similar Films/TV Series
THE UGLY DUCKLING: A DUCKLING IS CONSIDERED "UGLY" BECAUSE HE IS DIFFERENT FROM HIS SIBLINGS. STUART LITTLE: A MOUSE ADOPTED BY A FAMILY OF HUMANS, SUFFERS PREJUDICE FOR BEING DIFFERENT.
What’s New About the Story
It is a Japanese family of mice, which brings interesting aspects of that culture.
The protagonist is likable. He's a kind little mouse who simply wants to help his family and be accepted. As a character created for children, it is correct and interesting. But to please other audiences, he could be a little more elaborate.
Uniqueness of Story
It is not, but it would be more potent if Japanese culture could be more present in the story, conflicts could go a little beyond fundamental needs, and if the narrative could be more creative.
Film - Streaming, Film - Indie
WORK IN PROGRESS
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
The story demands a greater variety of conflicts for all types of audiences to follow and enjoy. The protagonist is likable, he is visually different, which is good to make us focus on him, but he could also sound different in his way of being and speaking. He has characteristics that are very similar to those of his siblings. And that ends up making his trajectory less glorious. The life tips that the mother gives to Kiki are good teachings for a young audience, but the overuse may give the film a didactic look. Perhaps if the author used a little bit of humor during the journey, the "serious" parts - prejudice and differences - might seem less formal. The trip's adventures and the friends that the mouse makes along the way are a good breath to the main plot but could be further developed in order to entertain. Diverse conflicts could give us the feeling of a more challenging, more complex journey, and that the triumph of the mouse when returning home was well deserved. In general, it is a story that could work, as it brings an important message about self-acceptance for children, but it ends up falling into repetitions and cliches. Better development of narrative and character could give the story a fresher air.