ACTION ADVENTURE HORROR FANTASY
FINDING THE WILL TO FIGHT OVERWHELMING ODDS FOR YOUR VALUES.
20th Century (multiple decades)
LUCIFER, THIS IS THE END, LEGION
GAVIN: 40. LEAD. AWKWARD, CARING, VENGEFUL.
SAUL: AGELESS. A POWERFUL DEMON WITH DESIGNS ON THE EARTH WHO USES GAVIN.
CLARA: 50. A PSYCHIC WHO IS CHOSEN TO DEFEND THE EARTH AGAINST THE SATANIC FORCES.
SEB: 40. A TEACHER WHO AIDS CLARA.
LIU: VERY OLD. GIVES CLARA THE POWER TO FIGHT EVIL.
JOSEPH: AGELESS. CLARA'S GUIDE IN THE ASTRAL PLANE.
A diabolical demon, a misguided human, and a challenge to Satan’s crown. A retired psychic and her magical tapestry is the world’s only hope.
Target Gender: Universal
Based on a True Story
Status: Yes: self-published
Year Published: 2013
Gavin, otherwise known as 'The Freak' returns home after working away to find intruders. His concern lies with his beloved who is upstairs. When they find her they torture and kill her in front of Gavin and then kill him. Gavin swears revenge and a demon named Saul offers a deal he can't refuse
Saul's plan to take over the land between heaven and earth and capture the tapestry that holds it within its threads is foiled for now by the psychic, Clara known as The Guardian or Keeper of the Tapestry. Saul is sent back to hell by a knife kissed by the devil himself, after defeating the dragons.
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Mature Audience Themes
Plot - Other Elements
Plot - Premise
Overcoming Monster/Villain,Internal Journey/Rebirth,Quest
Main Character Details
Key Traits: Clumsy,Obedient,Naive
Additional Character Details
Key Traits: Adventurous,Confident,Empathetic,Engaging,Gracious,Honorable,Selfless
Additional Character Details
Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Confident,Crazy,Criminal,Decisive,Leader,Masculine,Villainous,Narcisstic,Power Hungry
Additional Character Details
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The Tapestry will make you ask questions. Is Gavin good or evil? Why does he do what he does? And why is he the way he is? You might hate him initially but when you find out what he's been through and then find out who his 'girlfriend' really is? You'll find a smidgen of empathy for him, I guarantee it. But will you feel sorry for him? Will you excuse him, because of his childhood, is that an excuse? We'll leave the reader to make that decision. I feel this is more than your typical good vs evil story, sometimes we don't know who the good guys are, or even where they are. Sometimes we just have to wait for them, they'll show themselves, like Gavin eventually does, but you will still wonder, is he a good guy? Can he be forgiven, that's up to you and that's why I know this would make a great movie. It's totally subjective. And Saul is the demon we all love to hate, he's been compared to Tom Ellis' Lucifer although I based him on Cole Turner from Charmed I think that's a good comparison.
DRAMA, RELIGION, WAR, FANTASY, THRILLER, ACTION, MATURE AUDIENCE
Gavin is murdered, but is resurrected by Saul, a powerful demon imprisoned by Satan. Clara, a psychic, is given the power of the four elements to defeat Saul and the evil being who Gavin has now become. With the help of two giant Chinese dragons and a big trident, she battles Saul while the world is devastated by a plague. Clara defeats the evil forces and the world returns to normal.
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
No. It needs to talk about the story more than it does.
Draw of Story
A demon and the promise of the Satanic.
It introduces elements, such as a talisman, then seems to forget about them. The story doesn't go into the mythology enough.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The promising action and drama of a man being possessed by a demon, and the demon's designs on the earth.
Small. The story, characters, and mythology aren't clearly laid out enough to be satisfying.
Similar Films/TV Series
LUCIFER, THIS IS THE END, LEGION
What’s New About the Story
It's unique in that is has the promise of a demon who betrays Satan for control of the world, and would be more interesting if it delved more into this contest. As it is, there are a lot of human interventions that don't have much of a connection to Satan.
A good guy makes a deal with a demon and does some evil things pretty quickly. The demon has the promise of being a more interesting character, and the other humans are brave and attain agency.
Uniqueness of Story
No, not as it is.
Film: Studio, Streaming TV Series: Streaming, Limited Run / Mini-Series, Cable
WORK IN PROGRESS
It rushes to its conclusion, and could use a lot more story.
Tips for Improvement
There are elements that are introduced but not explored or made into integral parts of the story. More of the mythology needs to be laid out and incorporated into the plot.
A powerful demon who wants to replace Satan possesses a man, while a psychic woman is given the powers of mother nature to stop them from destroying the earth.
What We Liked
Satan and demons can make for interesting and exciting stories, and this has plenty of those elements. There is also a demonic protagonist who may or may not be evil, a witty demon, and gifted humans who wield magic against evil. Also, the world is going to end which is one heck of a ticking clock.
Film: There are a lot of big cinematic set pieces in this story that would be well-serviced by a big screen. The plot moves along quickly, and there are no lulls in the pace of character development or the action. It's fun and exciting and there's plenty of carnage to keep an audience in their seats.
TV: Now that TV is not limited in the scope of its stories, this one can be drawn out over several episodes since there are plenty of moments that can be employed as cliffhangers. The drama is exciting and intense and the characters would make a viewer want to tune in to see what they will do next.
People with extraordinary skills
Blood and gore
Gavin, 28, is an average guy who somehow scored a hot girlfriend, Michelle, 22. Three guys, Pinkie, Craig, and Phil attack him in his house for assaulting Laura, Pinky’s girlfriend. She admits that it was all a misunderstanding and Gavin didn’t really attack her. That doesn’t dissuade the three criminals. They discover Michelle, upstairs, naked in bed and drag her downstairs. The three of them rape and abuse her in front of Gavin. Then, they pour petrol all over the house and Michelle and light a match. Saul is a powerful demon. For a thousand years he’s been preparing to battle Satan and take over. After a 40 year battle, Satan tricks Saul and traps him in a warehouse. While trapped, he practices his tricks like inhabiting the body of a man or woman or flying as a crow while his body is trapped in the building. He wants revenge on Satan. Gavin watches Michelle burn as the flames reach him and he starts to burn. His pain ends and he’s floating above himself. Then, he’s in a warehouse in front of a tall man in a dark suit. Saul informs him that if he agrees, he can teach Gavin to be a demon, give him super powers, then after a time Gavin will be free to rule the world. Saul turns the warehouse into a plush hotel lobby. Gavin agrees, and Saul goes about teaching him the demonic way. Gavin is released into the town and goes to an Irish pub where he puts a charm spell over the crowd and every girl wants him. He enjoys the attention, then two girls kill each other with glass bottles over him and he leaves. Back at the warehouse/hotel lobby, Saul shows Gavin his past in a horrifying, surreal manner and tells him if he opens a door he can confront the man who ruined his childhood. Clara, 50, is a psychic. A real one. She goes out of her body and into the astral plane to trail a man who’s the husband of her client Valerie. She watches him go to a hotel and soon after a woman joins him. She informs Valerie, who takes it well enough. The next day the newspaper says that a woman shot her husband and killed herself. Clara is upset and can’t forgive herself. That was her last case. She has saved enough for retirement and three years later contemplates visiting the astral plane again, where she’d look for her spirit guide, Joseph. He lost his wife and child during childbirth and killed himself and is stuck in the astral plane looking for them. When he met Clara, he saw that a little hideous creature called a soul snatcher was about to cut Clara’s cord to the earth and that meant certain doom - so Joseph made himself three times bigger and shot flames from his mouth and sent the creature back. He has looked after Clara ever since. Presently, Joseph hears a creature cackle and watches as the astral plane shakes and other creatures scurry away from the awesome sound. Clara inherited a tapestry from her grandmother, who tells her she is now the keeper of the dragon fire, and she hopes she never has to use it. The tapestry is of two Chinese dragons in battle. Now there is a glow coming from it and she hears an awful, monstrous laughing sound and the dragons tell her it is now time. She is to obtain a trident and defeat her new enemy or the earth will perish. The tapestry begins to burn, and there’s a gold disc with jewels and the two dragons on it. Then, she’s transported to a bucolic place where she hovers above the green grass and feels at peace. Then the dragons appear. Gavin is remembering his childhood, where his stepfather would beat and torture him. Little Gavin plays footie in his new shoes when he hears his stepfather’s voice. He’s there with Gavin’s mother and she looks scared - and he’s pissed. Back at home, he awaits his punishment. He and his two siblings, David and Moira, are forced to eat rancid stew. Then, the air seemed to change to Gavin. His siblings freeze. When his stepfather comes into the room, Gavin curses at him and insults him, then calls him out for getting excited when he spanks Gavin’s little bare ass. His stepfather is shocked, then scared. His siblings disappear and so does the door. Gavin tells him to eat the whole plate of stew. Clara marvels at the beauty of the enormous dragons as they fly around her, each half a mile long. Then, she notices a farmer on a tractor, and some foxes and rabbits. The beautiful scene turns into a hellscape of horrible creatures, probably from the astral plane, eating each other. A family of pigs roast a man on a spit then eat him. The farmer’s head gets severed and rolls downhill. The dragons tell her to come to them and she does, then falls asleep in their protection. She wakes up at home in front of the tapestry and sees the gold disc talisman and picks it up.
Pinkie picks up a hot girl in a club and they go back to a hotel room. She goes into the shower to freshen up while he gets naked on the bed. Something invisible begins to masturbate him and he freaks out. Gavin comes out, and tears Pinkie’s penis apart along with the rest of his body. Seb, 40, gets a knock at 3 am and lets Clara in. She has the talisman with her and says she needs his help and explains everything that’s happened. Then the dragons’ eyes start to glow and Clara hears Joseph and asks for his help. She hears “empauuussson.” She passes out on the couch. Liu is an old man in a hospital bed. He recalls telling his deceased wife about the tapestry and the talisman and how the dragons would come to the guardian one day. He knows they now have, and must bring the guardian to him. Saul is ecstatic as he envision Gavin killing Pinkie and reminds himself he needs to come up with a plan to escape the warehouse- he will lose his powers if he leaves. Gavin walks up to a canteen and the guard sees Gavin change into a demonic bird for a second before falling to his death. Gavin, full of power, walks in. Walter sees him and pisses himself at the sight of the dead man walking - then is thrown out the window by an invisible force (Gavin). The men playing cards all try to run but Gavin causes a fire extinguisher to explode and takes the whole structure down. Phil, who managed to escape, hides outside but Gavin finds him and spins him in the air so fast the blood starts to seep from his pores. Gavin drinks some of the blood then sends Phil crashing to his death. Clara and Seb wake up after 12 hours and discuss what happened. They figure Joseph said “emperor's son” and Clara goes home where she sees water on her window turn into the shape of a trident and the words “Old Gables.” Liu remembers his father passing along to him an ornate little box with the four true names of the elements inside - words of the greatest power that he is now entrusted with.
Clara and Seb look for nursing homes called “Old Gables,” which was the message left scrawled on her window. She finds it and calls Liu who tells her she must come to him so she can “become.” He gives her the box and she opens it and reads the four words. She now has the power of mother nature. Before he dies, Liu whispers, “Find the trident before…” Gavin makes his way back to Saul, grateful he has this awesome being who’s given him a new life. Saul is pleased with Gavin’s progress and his revenge on the men who killed Michelle. They bring Craig to the warehouse/hotel and he’s shocked and confused as Gavin sends him into a black void where he runs for what could be days or months until he’s crawling on the ground like a beetle. Clara tries to summon Joseph, and he finally appears to her, but is weak. He tells her an angel named Ramiel has a message - she needs to find the trident then the dragons will come to her again and she can defeat the evil one. She remembers a pub called The Trident and her and Seb go off to find it. Gavin watches Craig scurry around the room like a beetle then summons his girlfriend. Craig doesn’t recognize her, and eats her alive as she lies there terrified and confused. Clara has transformed into a younger, more lustrous version of herself. She and Seb find The Trident pub on the internet. Saul summons Lillith, the original demon woman, and has sex with her and sends Gavin off to find his stepfather. Clara has a nightmare about school children covered in rats. They chant the nursery rhyme “Ring a ring o’ roses” (which is what Gavin has been hearing since his ordeal began). Then, Lillith appears and introduces herself. She tells Clara she isn’t worthy and will never defeat her brother Gavin. Shocked, Clara says her brother is dead. She says Lillith will never have him. Clara summons fire from the heavens and dispels Lillith and her demons.
Gavin’s stepfather, now 60, lives in a shitty apartment alone. Gavin appears, and his stepfather taunts him like he did when he was a child. Gavin takes the man’s organs out and spins him around and watches him die in agony. Clara and Seb reach The Trident pub and wonder how they’re going to get the huge iron trident off the wall when the dragons appear. Saul unleashes gigantic swarms of plague-infected fleas upon the world and there is complete chaos, looting, crashing planes and buses, etc. Tom, a London stockbroker, walks through the streets with a bell in a shopping cart yelling, “Bring out your dead.” The dragons tell Clara that Gavin’s soul will be devoured by Saul when he is done with him - but she can still help him. Clara is overcome with sadness at the plight of her brother when she sees what he’s been through in a vision. They show her the devastation all across the globe from the plague and she wretches. Her and Seb go outside the pub and the giant trident leaps into her hands and glows blue. There is smoke coming from a nearby village and Seb gets a call from his terrified daughter. Then she starts singing, along with every child on earth, “ring a ring o’roses…”
Clara and Seb search for dragon eggs that are all around the world. They find one under an oak and Clara, now fully transformed into The Guardian, wields the trident and uses the true name of water to call a river from the sky to hatch the egg. Saul appears, 80 feet tall, and attacks Clara, but she is protected by an invisible force as he tries to step on her. She moves heaven and earth against Saul and he tries to counter but she is protected - by Satan. Saul thinks it’s Seb and goes after him. Seb tells Clara to use lightning to crack the dragon egg and it works. The dragon hatches and soon grows to full size and battles Saul while Seb runs into the pub. Saul crushes the pub and Seb. Clara and Gavin reunite, and she finds out his girlfriend Michelle was really just a blow up doll. She calls to Saul to finish the battle, but Gavin takes out an enchanted knife and reminds Saul that his blood flows through him - and Gavin cuts his own hand but Saul feels it in his own hand and roars in pain. Gavin plunges the knife into his chest and Saul is defeated, falling to the ground and burning up. The world returns to as it was, with no one remembering the devastation.