POLITICS, WAR, ACTION

Bud , Johnny and Billy were raised Mennonites in the midwest. They meet during WWII after Pearl Harbor. Like many men who go off to war, they change from the naive, idealistic boys to hardened men who see death and destruction. The men constantly look out for one another until they finally make their way back home.

GOOD

FIRST PERSON

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: GOOD

Premise: GOOD

Structure: GOOD

Theme: GOOD

Yes,the book profile accurately reflects the book.

The story begins with the heartbreaking discovery that Johnny was molested by a elder in his church. He is running from the hypocrisy that he was raised in and goes to create a new life far from his father.

This story focuses on the three men, putting them in a very appealing light. They are heroes, fighting for the country, taking risk and getting out alive. It is a very idealistic, all American story which is one sided and unrealistic. To me more realistic, they could have a meaningful connection with Japanese soldiers. They kill all of the "Japs" for wanting to take over the world. There are more gray areas to this that could be explored. The profile says the men come back changed but there ideals about America are fantasy.

THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

The hook is that three young men meet in WWII, bonding over shared upbringings. They spend there time during the war protecting one another. I would watch this movie for the comradery between the men. Beyond that, it is a typical war film.

This could have a large fanbase as many war movies do. It does, however, feel dated with its' perspective. The men are all American men who believe what they are told, to kill "Japs.” They are apart of the system and thrive in it. There is no nuance to their thought process or their outlook on the world.

This could have awards potential as many other war movies have garnered. The story need to be updated with modern ideas. The sacrifice of serving is always acceptable in film but this story is not unique.

LARGE BUDGET

SAVING PRIVATE RYAN, HACKSAW RIDGE, PEARL HARBOR

The story is not unique. It is a war movie set during WWII. Three men find common ground and band together to get through the war. This story could be made more unique by having perspectives of the "enemy". The soldiers are in a foreign country and must have more of an effect on them then finding a beautiful woman.

The lead characters stand out because of their faith based connection. They all grew up in a Mennonite community, having many different experiences. Johnny was sexually abused while Billy grew up in an idyllic home making him very devout to the faith. Billy, Johnny and Bud's personality are not very unique, only some of the circumstances they have endured.

This is an average war story. It can be improved by having more grey areas. War seems black and white, but it is not. These men do not question much in relation to the war and there actions. They are dealing with personal issues mainly.

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WORK IN PROGRESS

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

This story needs a fresh perspective. It has an all American outlook on the war and America's position in it. There is little diversity in the story and the men don't gain real perspective about the world. They have seen horrors but what's beyond that. American's were on one side, but it wasn't the right side to the Japanese. That could be explored more. War is not a cut and dry topic which can be delved into here.