Pool Party
Logline
Kyle Piedmont's family moves to Pennsylvania and no one is happier to see him go than his teacher. His new condo community is run by the iron fist of the HOA, who forbids parties at its private pool. But that doesn't stop Kyle from planning a diversion for the HOA board long enough to throw a party.
Genre
Children's,Adventure
Short Summary
The story opens in Kyle Piedmont's 4th grade class. He sits watching the last few minutes of his last day of school ever in Ms. Snead's classroom tick by. What he doesn't realize is that his teacher, Ms. Snead, is also looking forward to this being Kyle's last day of school in her class as well.
Of all the places Kyle could have moved, it had to be to the same condo complex where Ms. Snead's sister resides. Ms. Snead found herself part of Kyle's planned diversion and when she found he was behind it, highly anticipated exposing him.
Setting
Last day of school in Florida and condo complex in PA
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Rebellion Against 'The One'
Plot - Other Elements
Meaningful Message,Happy Ending
Mature Audience Themes
Information not completed
Main Character Details
Name: Kyle Piedmont
Age: 10
Gender: Male
Role: Antagonist
Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Charming,Confident,Outspoken,Unapologetic,Leader
Additional Character Details
Name: Mr. Gonzales
Age: 70
Gender: Male
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Masculine,Complex,Decisive,Outspoken,Power Hungry,Funny,Leader,Sophisticated
Additional Character Details
Name: Ms. Snead
Age: 45
Gender: Female
Role: antagonist
Key Traits: Desperate,Sarcastic,Unapologetic
Additional Character Details
Name: Carolina
Age: 12
Gender: Female
Role: sidekick
Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Complex,Confident,Empathetic,Faithful,Sophisticated,Romantic
Development Pitch
Pool Party is geared towards the 'tween viewer, similar to the demographic that found Diary of a Wimpy kid so appealing. Each 'tween stage is touched, from the boy whose baby face gives him a pass when his antics are discovered, to the first crush of a fourteen year old boy, first love of a girl on the cusp of her teenage years. The conflict between teacher and mischievous student is one that will have the kids cheering for Kyle and the parents and teachers agreeing with Ms. Snead as she shakes her head and acknowledges 'that's what's wrong with kids these days'.
Genre
COMEDY
Brief
Kyle Piedmont is a 10-year-old boy who loves to have fun and enjoy his life. His only source of problems is Ms. Snead, a very strict teacher. When Kyle's father decides to move to another state, Kyle finds himself open to start a new life, far from his teacher. However, he ends up meeting someone even more full of rules there.
Overall Rating
GOOD
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: GOOD
Characterization: GOOD
Commerciality: GOOD
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Pace: GOOD
Premise: FAIR
Structure: FAIR
Theme: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
Protagonist/antagonist roles are switched. Kyle is the protagonist and Mr. Gonzales is the antagonist.
Draw of Story
It's a story for kids, according to the target audiences the author chose, but it's also a fun and light entertainment for the whole family.
Possible Drawbacks
The main conflicts could be a bit more diversified, especially for the young main character, whose individual arc doesn't lead him to discover anything or change in any way.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
For kids, it presents the pleasures and hardships of discovering a new universe, with new places, friends, adventures, and also problems.
Fanbase Potential
It could have a large fanbase if it becomes a franchise or a TV series, in which Kyle is the protagonist. I can imagine young fans who would like to continue following Kyle's adventures.
Awards Potential
Not really. I think it is an unpretentious story, intending to entertain rather than earning Awards.
Envisioned Budget
LOW BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
PROBLEM CHILD - A FILM ABOUT A YOUNG CHILD WHO DEFIES HIS PARENTS AND EVERYONE ELSE, CAUSING PROBLEMS AND CHAOS WHEREVER HE GOES. LITTLE NICHOLAS - AFTER FINDING OUT HIS MOTHER IS PREGNANT, THE YOUNG NICHOLAS THINKS HE IS GOING TO BE ABANDONED BY HIS PARENTS AND CREATES A GIANT CONFUSION, IN THIS MOVIE ADAPTATION OF A FAMOUS FRENCH BOOK SERIES.
What’s New About the Story
The book shows that, even though the protagonist misbehaves, he also has a good heart, which might be a positive influence on children. To make it more unique, the narrative's conflicts should be improved.
Lead Characters
Besides the protagonist being a misbehaved child with a good heart, his parents are also supportive of him in a positive, non-spoiling manner, something unusual for this kind of narrative.
Uniqueness of Story
Not really. The story should have more developed, complex conflicts. The protagonist, for instance, doesn't have many internal conflicts and doesn't change much throughout the narrative.
Possible Formats
Film - Streaming, TV Series - Streaming
Analyst Recommendation
CONSIDER
Justification
The author has a good, well-developed writing style, which makes the story more interesting. I could see the book being adapted into a TV series, especially because of the intriguing dynamic of the central family, something that enriches the characters and could make them more compelling to watch. Furthermore, the conflicts in the narrative are very simplistic, but they should probably work for its target audience. These conflicts could even be more complex and mature, challenging the young public a little further. Even if the main character does frequently misbehave in the course of the story, one of his last actions aims to help a friend in trouble, surprisingly showing us that he has good intentions and a friendly heart.